What Have I Done So Wrong?
A search inside ones own heart and soul.15 total reviews
Comment from bhogg
In your verbiage about the poem, in side, inside
How are your (you)
Very nicely written with a rhyme scheme and structure that made for easy reading. In plain site and all alone. This was excellent.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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In your verbiage about the poem, in side, inside
How are your (you)
Very nicely written with a rhyme scheme and structure that made for easy reading. In plain site and all alone. This was excellent.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your review. I will attend to the errors you mentioned. yes, the underlying theme is in plain site and all alone. Sad.
Comment from aernby
I like this It raises an important question and provides ans answer.
Whats wrong with me? THE narrator. I am a good christian I follow Christ, I look alitltle strange, perhaps and that is why the despisesd my perfeict personhood. I am good and hey are bad
nno wonder they hate me.
Still the narrator has a sense that the reak cause lies with him. As indeed it does ---
The narrator has a haughty sense of his own moral superiority, and the depravity of those "Humans" who have not warmed to him.
john+
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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I like this It raises an important question and provides ans answer.
Whats wrong with me? THE narrator. I am a good christian I follow Christ, I look alitltle strange, perhaps and that is why the despisesd my perfeict personhood. I am good and hey are bad
nno wonder they hate me.
Still the narrator has a sense that the reak cause lies with him. As indeed it does ---
The narrator has a haughty sense of his own moral superiority, and the depravity of those "Humans" who have not warmed to him.
john+
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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john+, Thank you for your review. Your perspective of the narrator does raise some questions. How others perceive the intent of my poems is very educational. It makes me stop and think when I sit down to write. Again, Thank you, john+
Comment from Crunchie
You've done nothing wrong dear Poet except that you are a deeply feeling person existing in a world of superficial relationships!
Your poem touches the heart as you search for answers and meaning to the question you end with!
God only looks at the heart, that is so reassuring in a world that rejects you if your face does'nt 'fit' their ideals!
A very well crafted verse, straight from the heart !
Keep Doin' it Sister !
Shalom,
Crunchie X
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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You've done nothing wrong dear Poet except that you are a deeply feeling person existing in a world of superficial relationships!
Your poem touches the heart as you search for answers and meaning to the question you end with!
God only looks at the heart, that is so reassuring in a world that rejects you if your face does'nt 'fit' their ideals!
A very well crafted verse, straight from the heart !
Keep Doin' it Sister !
Shalom,
Crunchie X
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Knowing that my poetry touchs others is it's own reward; and your review indicates that.
Comment from Matoshka
I could feel the sense of not fitting in, the loneliness. I loved how this flowed with all the compassionate, loving thoughts, always the question. This was a great read and I loved the picture. Great job. Christians never fit in with the world, we are different. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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I could feel the sense of not fitting in, the loneliness. I loved how this flowed with all the compassionate, loving thoughts, always the question. This was a great read and I loved the picture. Great job. Christians never fit in with the world, we are different. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much for your review. You picked up exactly what I was trying to say!!
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You are so welcome, glad I picked it up. God Bless
Comment from annettebda
To truly look inside ones own heart and soul requires a recognition that nothing done is right or wrong it just is. If we believe ourselves to be faulty in some way then others will willingly jump on the band wagon.
Annette
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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To truly look inside ones own heart and soul requires a recognition that nothing done is right or wrong it just is. If we believe ourselves to be faulty in some way then others will willingly jump on the band wagon.
Annette
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. You picked up exactly wHat I was trying to say.
