Redemption
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Comment from Tellis
That way, if I have to shoot Boudreaux, the blood won't get on the carpet.I liked this sentence a lot. It made me laugh. Great chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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That way, if I have to shoot Boudreaux, the blood won't get on the carpet.I liked this sentence a lot. It made me laugh. Great chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thanks Tellis - I'm glad that you read and enjoyed!
Comment from humpwhistle
Okay, this story is moving along nicely. I particularly liked the cliff-hanger ending. One question. I was under the impression Dax would be staying in the barn/studio, as opposed to the main house. Did I miss something?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Okay, this story is moving along nicely. I particularly liked the cliff-hanger ending. One question. I was under the impression Dax would be staying in the barn/studio, as opposed to the main house. Did I miss something?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Hi Lee - in one of the past chapters, Beth decided that this was the South, and in the South, watch dog's didn't sleep outside, they slept in the "big house". Thanks for reading and your kind words. Regards, Bill
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My mistake, Bill. Thanks for setting me straight. I must have missed a chapter.
Peace, Lee
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I'm just totally delighted that you're following the story. Thanks a bunch!
Comment from adewpearl
What in the hell is this guy up to? - add question mark
Yeah, I do, Dax - add the second comma for direct address
You do a great job of building suspense in the beginning of this chapter and then a sense of intrigue once they start talking to the intruder. And you end with a good cliffhanger, to top it all off. Excellent dialogue, too :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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What in the hell is this guy up to? - add question mark
Yeah, I do, Dax - add the second comma for direct address
You do a great job of building suspense in the beginning of this chapter and then a sense of intrigue once they start talking to the intruder. And you end with a good cliffhanger, to top it all off. Excellent dialogue, too :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thank you Brooke - it means a lot to me that you stop by and always are trying to help me get better. Regards, Bill
Comment from Jen Gentry
I always love it when I am going thru chapters for review when the author takes the time to give background info on the book and characters. Helps me to see the whole picture. This chapter is well written and obviously well edited I did not see any mistakes. It was an easy read and flowed very smoothly. Enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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I always love it when I am going thru chapters for review when the author takes the time to give background info on the book and characters. Helps me to see the whole picture. This chapter is well written and obviously well edited I did not see any mistakes. It was an easy read and flowed very smoothly. Enjoyed it.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thank you Christa - it is awkward sometimes realizing that some people are going to drop by for the first time. I appreciate your kind words. Regards, Bill
Comment from marcii
Wow, that was sure an interesting read, the big bad drug lord ex DEA agent does his own breakin.
Well written.
Now I have caught up on your story I can say that except for your spoiler it has been a marvelous story to read.
Look forward to reading more.
Marcii
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Wow, that was sure an interesting read, the big bad drug lord ex DEA agent does his own breakin.
Well written.
Now I have caught up on your story I can say that except for your spoiler it has been a marvelous story to read.
Look forward to reading more.
Marcii
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thanks Marcii - I very much appreciate you reading and for your kind words!
Comment from InHisownwrite
Well my friend...
All I can say is that it takes a special talent to write this kind of material.... And I couldn't do it........
You seem to know alot about this whole world, and if you don't, it really comes across that you do..... Every chapter gets deeper and deeper, and better and better.....
I always look forward to what will happen next!
Love it! Bryan
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Well my friend...
All I can say is that it takes a special talent to write this kind of material.... And I couldn't do it........
You seem to know alot about this whole world, and if you don't, it really comes across that you do..... Every chapter gets deeper and deeper, and better and better.....
I always look forward to what will happen next!
Love it! Bryan
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thank you Bryan - I appreciate your continuing support to this story. Regards, Bill
Comment from lola29
I love this story, and this chapter is a very scary-good read. I'm not sure about Gus--I mean he did cross to the other side, so it seems he would be looking out for his own interest instead of Beth's. I'm eager to read how Dax handles this situtation.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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I love this story, and this chapter is a very scary-good read. I'm not sure about Gus--I mean he did cross to the other side, so it seems he would be looking out for his own interest instead of Beth's. I'm eager to read how Dax handles this situtation.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Hi Lola - Gus is going to come out with mixed grades. Stay tuned! Bill
Comment from Shirley B
Great story. One that I am glad I will be following. I love a good mystery. I can tell this is one with a lot of good twist and turns. I am glad I am one of your fans now, so I won't miss anything, Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Great story. One that I am glad I will be following. I love a good mystery. I can tell this is one with a lot of good twist and turns. I am glad I am one of your fans now, so I won't miss anything, Shirley
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Hi Shirley - I'm glad you stopped by too! If you haven't read from the beginning, a few minutes to read chapters 1 and 2 would throw you right in the mix. My fingers will be crossed for the Sooners this weekend!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Pretty close to perfect. Good job. Good plot and good characters.
Dax looked at Beth. "Beth?" (Too many Beths, try: Dax looked at her. "Beth?")
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Pretty close to perfect. Good job. Good plot and good characters.
Dax looked at Beth. "Beth?" (Too many Beths, try: Dax looked at her. "Beth?")
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Barbara - like Dax is getting towards Beth - I'm getting to like you better all the time! Thanks for reading, your kind words and the gift of a six. Hope you are feeling better. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from c_lucas
You have a good mystery.thriller going here. This is very well written with good character development. It seems like Dax will have to deal with an old acquaintance. Good job.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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You have a good mystery.thriller going here. This is very well written with good character development. It seems like Dax will have to deal with an old acquaintance. Good job.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Hi Charlie - I very much appreciate your support of this story. Regards, Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. Charlie
