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Ode To Khadijah

Honors Khadijah and her role as The Prophet's wife

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Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, written with a great parable form, draws the reader into the story. i wish you the best of luck in the contest

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
    Thank you for the expressive review.
Comment from RICH01
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I am going to venture to comment on this poem. I say venture because the content is new to me. Also, although I like to write poetry, I really am quite ignorant of the technicalities of poetic form and your exposition of the form of the poem, identifying the strophe, the antistrophe and the epode was quite helpful to me. Even though unfamiliar with the content, the poem held my interest at first but, it is so carefully and tightly structured, with fairly routine Stanzas all the way through, I began to lose interest in it. I know it is a form of religious poetry and as such I think it very good.
Also it was my first introduction to anything Muslim.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
    Sorry that this was less than overwhelming to you. The prescribed form is an 'ode' which is a classic form of poetry from long ago, but very much alive today in music and in rhyme
Comment from Ntorious
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By now you already know this is an excellent and powerful piece.
Strong calculated verbiage.
Expressive and enlighting to the the soul.
I liked the flow of this poem

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
    Thank you for the expressive review.
reply by Ntorious on 05-Dec-2010
    you are very welcome
Comment from Juana
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I am not an expert on the Qur'an, but I appreciated reading the poem anyway. The final comments were highly useful and ended up having me go back and re-read the poem. So, they were also effective. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2010
    The parable of the light from the Qur'an is one of the most beautiful descriptions of what it means to be Muslim. Muslims accept that God sends parables so that they can understand, because we cannot experience God as a fact, object, or thing. We can only know God through parables and manifestations from the prophets. Most religions acknowledge this to some extent.
Comment from piyasha hossain
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I extremely enjoyed reading this poem. what attracted me most is the picture that you used. the poem is comprehensive in the first reading. the poem was interesting enough to make me read what was coming next.alternative use of end rhymes drew a lot of attention and gives a very lyrical effect while reading it.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2010
    I am happy to get your review. I believe that you are the only muslim to comment on it so far. It is what I get from the parable of the light in Qur'an. Salaam Sadiqui (Peace my friend).
Comment from amada
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A very powerful poem. I read very slow and it seemed that The Light you talk about in here came to surround me, entirely. Great experience reading this uplifting work.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
    Be careful, this is not supposed to proselytizing. It is not intended to entice anyone to Islam, but an attempt to show that the spiritual depths of all religions are truth and God, not the ritual or the symbolic fanaticism we sometimes succumb to. Glad it appealed to you as an ode. Thank you for the review. BTW: I, too, believe there is a Light of Reason.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2010
    PS Read my comments and especially the quoted passage from the Qur'an, The Parable Of The Light.
reply by amada on 04-Oct-2010
    I like your work. I like how you express your ideas. I like inspirational works. But sometimes, I confess, it gets too deep for me. My loss.
Comment from keimosobie
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It's a good poem and shows the wisdom of many years. You really get your message across well and the message can be passed on through many different religions as well.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    I am glad you see that it was intended to be somewhat ecumenical without proselytizing. It should bring out the the truth as the religious intent.
Comment from Just2Write
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Yu have done an excellent job with sound and meter in this poem. The construction flows so well and you relay such an interesting story of God and the Light of Allah. I thoroughly enjoyed this poetic. Rose.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    My guide was excellent, Ode to Joy, and I kept the rhythm of that masterpiece, so I pass on the kudo to Beethoven. But the message is the light of God, rather than ritual duty in religion.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
    PS Also Schiller who wrote the German lyrics to the Ode to Joy.
Comment from Writeaway...
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An excellent, interesting piece mystery writer, bravo. I found no errors whatsover and was kept interested, I wish you well in the contest, keep writing!! :)

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
    Thank you.
Comment from richard7
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God is Truth and Light of Reason,
found in every season.

wonderful words to read philosophical in depth and spiritual by nature .
i like how you have bold typed aand script and ordinary text combined your notes explain it well!

well presented and grammar is fine.
i think reader of any religion will find this satisfying and enlightening

thanks

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
    Thank you. I am glad that a reader "...of any religion..." would find this satisfying. I always worry, with the common stereotyping of Muslims as terrrorists. Except for the fanatics, any religion should 'satisfying' even if not understood. Islam is certainly not understood in America, though it is the fastest growing religion in America. This contest was to dispel the bad press.
reply by richard7 on 01-Oct-2010
    You are welcome.
    I think the moslim terrorist fear comes from the extremists alone and not the majority of logical peace fearing moslims.
    the christians are extremist too simply not as publicised.
    so are atheist practioners extremist and gay bashers.
    i think the common unity is respect and understanding.
    I myself think religion should be an honest search for truth and not a fad everyone is following.

    have a good day.

    richardL