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26 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
Well, you know I love a good tanka :) and this is a beaut. I love the subject matter and the transition from fall to winter. Love, love, loved the ending! Well done. Congrats!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Well, you know I love a good tanka :) and this is a beaut. I love the subject matter and the transition from fall to winter. Love, love, loved the ending! Well done. Congrats!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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thanx mingle! :)
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You're so welcome. Not finding much time to read or write anything but for the contest LOL Marcia
Comment from markk
great and very descriptive poem about autumn. I enjoyed it a lot as it gives great imagery using excellent similes. well written.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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great and very descriptive poem about autumn. I enjoyed it a lot as it gives great imagery using excellent similes. well written.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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thank you mark :)
Comment from izzybelle
I am looking at the tree branches outside of my window and they are indeed waving a rainbow of hope .. gold, red, russet and brown .... hope that they will return vivid vibrant green in spring perhaps.
Very clever and moving piece.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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I am looking at the tree branches outside of my window and they are indeed waving a rainbow of hope .. gold, red, russet and brown .... hope that they will return vivid vibrant green in spring perhaps.
Very clever and moving piece.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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cool! thanx izzy! :)
Comment from samandlancelot
I love the picture of the branches waving a rainbow of hope, awaiting Spring's rescue. Wonderful imagery! Excellent poem!
Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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I love the picture of the branches waving a rainbow of hope, awaiting Spring's rescue. Wonderful imagery! Excellent poem!
Patricia
Comment Written 28-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2010
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thanx patricia! :)
Comment from l.raven
Very pretty phrase.I like the wording.My favorite season is Winter.The air feels clean when the wind blows.I also love Autumn when the leafs fall.The color is beautiful.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Very pretty phrase.I like the wording.My favorite season is Winter.The air feels clean when the wind blows.I also love Autumn when the leafs fall.The color is beautiful.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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me too! thanx raven! :)
Comment from missy98writer
shelley kaye,
your poem is beautifully written. Your Tanka is in great form and syllable count. Your words paint a picture in the readers head of autumn. Marvelous use of personification with the phrase winter's chilly breath. I enjoyed the metaphor in the last line: "waving a rainbow of hope." Your poem is an excellent entry in the Tanka Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. It was my pleasure to read and review your nature Tanka poem.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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shelley kaye,
your poem is beautifully written. Your Tanka is in great form and syllable count. Your words paint a picture in the readers head of autumn. Marvelous use of personification with the phrase winter's chilly breath. I enjoyed the metaphor in the last line: "waving a rainbow of hope." Your poem is an excellent entry in the Tanka Poetry contest. I wish you good luck in the contest. It was my pleasure to read and review your nature Tanka poem.
Melissa.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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thanx missy! :)
Comment from Sandy P.
A beautifully written tanka - letting the reader feel Fall's first chill all the way through winter's fierceness. Well done and well expressed.
Sandy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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A beautifully written tanka - letting the reader feel Fall's first chill all the way through winter's fierceness. Well done and well expressed.
Sandy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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thanx sandy! :)
Comment from Trybuck
Autumn arrived in full bloom
And Mr Winter will be here soon
Blowing his icy cold breath
Spreading his famous white death
Well done with your tanka, Buck
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Autumn arrived in full bloom
And Mr Winter will be here soon
Blowing his icy cold breath
Spreading his famous white death
Well done with your tanka, Buck
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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thank you buck :)
Comment from Joyce Laura Bailey
Shelley, This is a beautifully descriptive Tanka.
Each line flows perfectly to the next. I
particularly loved the last line.
Joyce Laura Bailey
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Shelley, This is a beautifully descriptive Tanka.
Each line flows perfectly to the next. I
particularly loved the last line.
Joyce Laura Bailey
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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thank you joyce :)
Comment from bhogg
Hi Shelley - I didn't even bother with the syllable count. As late as I'm reading, I'm sure it's been counted. All I did was read and enjoy. Love the imagery of leaves falling like tears, chilly breath, winter on the way, but hope in the end. Lots of stuff for such a short piece! Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Hi Shelley - I didn't even bother with the syllable count. As late as I'm reading, I'm sure it's been counted. All I did was read and enjoy. Love the imagery of leaves falling like tears, chilly breath, winter on the way, but hope in the end. Lots of stuff for such a short piece! Regards, Bill
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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lol thanx bill! :)