Redemption
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Arriving Home"One Man's Return From Hell
28 total reviews
Comment from janeae
Bill, I'm reading all of the chapters and they are great! FS has shown you how good they are...I just wanted to add my two cents...would you check out the paragraph that starts out,"There was no need for any further introduction"...I read it as Beth is talking. She says,"How can I...Beth is all I have left"...Don't you mean, Lael? Ignore if I'm wrong. Thank you so much for writing. jane
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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Bill, I'm reading all of the chapters and they are great! FS has shown you how good they are...I just wanted to add my two cents...would you check out the paragraph that starts out,"There was no need for any further introduction"...I read it as Beth is talking. She says,"How can I...Beth is all I have left"...Don't you mean, Lael? Ignore if I'm wrong. Thank you so much for writing. jane
Comment Written 20-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2010
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You are not wrong, and I salute your eagle eye. Hard to believe that got through. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from marcii
Well he had given the guy an option and the guy had to mention his daughter, so he died very painfully and slowly, understandable for a story, don't know how I would feel if this was true life.
This chapter was very good, still great descriptions.
Marcii
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Well he had given the guy an option and the guy had to mention his daughter, so he died very painfully and slowly, understandable for a story, don't know how I would feel if this was true life.
This chapter was very good, still great descriptions.
Marcii
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2010
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Thank you so much marcii. Not many people take the time to truly catch up. Much appreciated.
Comment from humpwhistle
Once again you demonstrate confidence and purposeful writing. Your ducks are in a row. You know your plot and where it is headed. Most heroes of this genre tend to be a bit more tight-lipped. Dropping clues about their pasts but not going into so much exposition in a single setting.
Just an observation. I'm sure you know what you're doing.
I'll stay tuned.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Once again you demonstrate confidence and purposeful writing. Your ducks are in a row. You know your plot and where it is headed. Most heroes of this genre tend to be a bit more tight-lipped. Dropping clues about their pasts but not going into so much exposition in a single setting.
Just an observation. I'm sure you know what you're doing.
I'll stay tuned.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Hi Lee - if I knew what I was doing, I would have to find a new personal motto. "Ignorance Can't Stop Me". Thanks for reading and your great observation. Regards, Bill
Comment from acvguard11
good job...i really enjoyed reading this piece of works..great job and dont let others discourage you if you love to write......keep writingg
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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good job...i really enjoyed reading this piece of works..great job and dont let others discourage you if you love to write......keep writingg
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2010
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Thank you for reading and for your kind words. Writing a book has been a challenge. Most of what I've written have been non-fiction stories, so this is an experiment in process.
Comment from Sally Carter
I enjoyed this very much, Bill.
My - Dax is a man you would want to have on your side, isn't he!
I liked the hint of a romance in the offing. How girly is that? All this drugs and killing stuff, and I am thinking of the romance. Sorry!
I didn't understand this phrase: Is it US terminology?
Can you give her a 10,000 foot level discussion
I get the idea, but never heard it before.
The hard truth about Dax was all the more powerful being explained in such a cosy domestic setting. Softened though by him dreaming about it ever since. A complicated character, and very interesting.
This is turning out a very good book, Bill. Very enjoyable.
Warm wishes to you.
Sally
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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I enjoyed this very much, Bill.
My - Dax is a man you would want to have on your side, isn't he!
I liked the hint of a romance in the offing. How girly is that? All this drugs and killing stuff, and I am thinking of the romance. Sorry!
I didn't understand this phrase: Is it US terminology?
Can you give her a 10,000 foot level discussion
I get the idea, but never heard it before.
The hard truth about Dax was all the more powerful being explained in such a cosy domestic setting. Softened though by him dreaming about it ever since. A complicated character, and very interesting.
This is turning out a very good book, Bill. Very enjoyable.
Warm wishes to you.
Sally
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Hi Sally - as always I appreciate your reading and reviewing. It is US termninology. If you were up in the air 10,000 feet and looked down on something, you couldn't tell every detail, just the basics.
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Ah, right! Get it now. Very apt now you have explained it. I shall store that one away in my general information file...
:~) S
Comment from FredCollingwood
Arrrrghggghhh. What a way to die! I found myself cringing when he shot him in the upper leg and then ... well you know. Excellent, Bill.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Arrrrghggghhh. What a way to die! I found myself cringing when he shot him in the upper leg and then ... well you know. Excellent, Bill.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Thanks Fred - he wanted to contract out to Mathew, but he was booked! I really appreciate the compliment of the 6. Regards, Bill
Comment from Fireshadow
Bill, this is an excellent, well penned narrative with strong and credible dialogue that flows and reads smoothly. The characterizations are also credible and the storyline interesting. Didn't find any spag errors. very well done, my friend.
Amarillys
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Bill, this is an excellent, well penned narrative with strong and credible dialogue that flows and reads smoothly. The characterizations are also credible and the storyline interesting. Didn't find any spag errors. very well done, my friend.
Amarillys
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Thanks Amarillys - I very much appreciate you stopping by to read and for your kind and generous feedback. Regards, Bill
Comment from patmedium
If I was them, I'd move him into the main house! Nothing like a guard dog under the roof! LOL.
You write powerfully and clearly. It's a pleasure to read. Pat.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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If I was them, I'd move him into the main house! Nothing like a guard dog under the roof! LOL.
You write powerfully and clearly. It's a pleasure to read. Pat.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Love the guard dog analogy. Thanks for reading, Pat.
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It's a pleasure. xx
Comment from Shirley McLain
I can feel the tension building. Your characters are very strong and the dialogue is excellent. You held my attention all the way through the chapter and left me wanting more. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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I can feel the tension building. Your characters are very strong and the dialogue is excellent. You held my attention all the way through the chapter and left me wanting more. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Thank you for reading. It should start picking up pace now. I appreciate your support! Regards, Bill
Comment from Thesis
Very good chapter with good character development. The revelation on how Dax dealt with the Ambassador's son was eye opening to the women, probably making them feel better that they had a man who could protect them staying in the barn. - Thesis
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Very good chapter with good character development. The revelation on how Dax dealt with the Ambassador's son was eye opening to the women, probably making them feel better that they had a man who could protect them staying in the barn. - Thesis
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Thanks T. I'm glad that you read and enjoyed. Regards, Bill
