Comment from TT7Z

Good

Nice work. The rhyming is good. Flowed well, but confusingly done. Rearrange by subject used will help overall message flow. You have captured the anxiety of those who suffer from allergies well. Thank you.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2010

Thank You for the kind review. It was greatly appreciated.

Comment from Shirley B

Excellent

How cute! Mother Nature can be a real pain in the butt sometimes. In the second line check your spelling of 'your' I think in this case, it might be 'you're' as in you are! I loved the pattern of this poem. Great job. Shirley

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2010

Thank you correction made. Thank You for your kind words.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I think your just grand - you're
Mother Nature, take my hand
Mother Nature, take a look - add comma for direct address
I suffered from awful allergies like this for decades until I just lost them several years ago. I really identified with your speaker - excellent humor and rhyming couplets. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2010

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2010

Your help is always welcome I have fixed the little probles as you stated. Thank you for your help and kind words.