The Fisherman
A naval patrol boat encounters a fisherman13 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
I love it! Of course you led us to think our heroes were introduced immediately, and you described them well, too. But held the prize back for the end. Crafty, crafty. You old writing devil.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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I love it! Of course you led us to think our heroes were introduced immediately, and you described them well, too. But held the prize back for the end. Crafty, crafty. You old writing devil.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
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Hey! Less of the old! I am merely well-experienced. Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it
Comment from Pen&Ink
This is great, snodlander! I loved the conversation between Lee and the old fisherman. It came across as very authentic. Great little twist at the end. No flaws that I could detect. Congratulations on your award.
Ray
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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This is great, snodlander! I loved the conversation between Lee and the old fisherman. It came across as very authentic. Great little twist at the end. No flaws that I could detect. Congratulations on your award.
Ray
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Congratulations on your win. You caught me with that twist at the end.I didn't know you could find crabs out in the ocean.
A very engaging yarn!
Giddy
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Congratulations on your win. You caught me with that twist at the end.I didn't know you could find crabs out in the ocean.
A very engaging yarn!
Giddy
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you. I saw a documentary where armies of crabs migragted across the ocean floor, chased by fleets of trawlers. Till then I thought they just lived in rock pools
Comment from Fish
Great story! I really enjoy your prose
style... very casual, yet detailed and
not over-detailed.
One part kind of threw me...
'The navy patrol boat battled through the waves towards the small boat'
Maybe, instead of 'boat' you should have written
'small object' or whatever, because you're telling
what it is before the reader knows what it is...
Anyway, insignificant within the overall story.
Great writing! And, remember: don't stop till
they kill you or you kill them all.
fish
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Great story! I really enjoy your prose
style... very casual, yet detailed and
not over-detailed.
One part kind of threw me...
'The navy patrol boat battled through the waves towards the small boat'
Maybe, instead of 'boat' you should have written
'small object' or whatever, because you're telling
what it is before the reader knows what it is...
Anyway, insignificant within the overall story.
Great writing! And, remember: don't stop till
they kill you or you kill them all.
fish
Comment Written 18-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thanks. I did go through and kill a few of the repeating 'boats', but that one slipped through. Glad you liked it
Comment from MissMerri
Hahahaha! I LOVE your stories. This is a definite winner in anyone's book. So clever and funny, but then you're always funny aren't you? Well written as usual, too. You do know how to capture the reader's attention and never let it go. I was hooked from first word to last.
Congratulations on winning this contest's first prize. I thought this was a difficult one, but you did it so well.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Hahahaha! I LOVE your stories. This is a definite winner in anyone's book. So clever and funny, but then you're always funny aren't you? Well written as usual, too. You do know how to capture the reader's attention and never let it go. I was hooked from first word to last.
Congratulations on winning this contest's first prize. I thought this was a difficult one, but you did it so well.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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You're very kind, thanks. Not all my stories are funny, though some people seem to find humour in even my darker tales. Glad you liked it.
Comment from c_lucas
This is well deserving of your award. I enjoyed the read and had a good laugh over the ending. This is very well written with excellent imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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This is well deserving of your award. I enjoyed the read and had a good laugh over the ending. This is very well written with excellent imagery.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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You're very kind, thank you
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bellringer
Excellently told story with a message: Do not judge by appearances! The writing was very clear and believable. You totally surprised me with the ending. Congratulations on your win--well deserved. Best wishes, Hector
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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Excellently told story with a message: Do not judge by appearances! The writing was very clear and believable. You totally surprised me with the ending. Congratulations on your win--well deserved. Best wishes, Hector
Comment Written 17-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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You're very kind. Thanks for your review. I was totally surprised by the win too
Comment from Maxine Kendall
I really enjoyed reading your story. The characterization is wonderful... very descriptive. I felt I was right there on the ocean with them. I had quite a chuckle at the ending. Loved it!
Well done and congratulations on your win.
Maxine.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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I really enjoyed reading your story. The characterization is wonderful... very descriptive. I felt I was right there on the ocean with them. I had quite a chuckle at the ending. Loved it!
Well done and congratulations on your win.
Maxine.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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You're very kind, thank you. Glad you liked it.
Comment from samandlancelot
I see why you won this contest. I love how you took the old man and made him a modern fisherman. Very surprised at the ending. Well done!
Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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I see why you won this contest. I love how you took the old man and made him a modern fisherman. Very surprised at the ending. Well done!
Patricia
Comment Written 17-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2010
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Thanks. Glad you liked it
Comment from WRITER1
This was excellent. He had those guys really going. Just imagine that old boat filled with the latest technology available today. Really good.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2010
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This was excellent. He had those guys really going. Just imagine that old boat filled with the latest technology available today. Really good.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2010
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You're very kind, thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
