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Comment from fictionwriter
Poor dogs take the blame for so many things, from the stink of the fart to stealing the chocolate. I loved this, just like two little kids. great job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Poor dogs take the blame for so many things, from the stink of the fart to stealing the chocolate. I loved this, just like two little kids. great job.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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A belated but deeply felt thank you...Smiles, Carol
Comment from L.lora
Short, sweet, mysterious--
all the elements to hold
your reader's interest in
this smooth flowing story.
Superb narratives and
excellent dialogues...love
the surprise ending. no nits
or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Short, sweet, mysterious--
all the elements to hold
your reader's interest in
this smooth flowing story.
Superb narratives and
excellent dialogues...love
the surprise ending. no nits
or spags. Lora
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Lora,
Thank you so much...Carol
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Begin again, this brief story is pregnant with numerous qualities of fiction. It grabs attention. holds that interest with suspense deals with character descriptions and a has a dab of humor. This is truly quality in a nutshell.
Don
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Begin again, this brief story is pregnant with numerous qualities of fiction. It grabs attention. holds that interest with suspense deals with character descriptions and a has a dab of humor. This is truly quality in a nutshell.
Don
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thanks so much for your continued support...Carol
Comment from Colette
This little piece caused a giggle within me. I could
identify with those two scallywags and that chocolate
was more than a body child or adult could resist.
Well done.
Colette
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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This little piece caused a giggle within me. I could
identify with those two scallywags and that chocolate
was more than a body child or adult could resist.
Well done.
Colette
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Colette,
That's for sure...If there is chocolate to be had, my mouth is wrapped around it. Smiles...Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is really cute, but chocolate can be deadly to dogs. It's one of those things they are NOT supposed to eat. Your short story is very cute and was fun to read.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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This is really cute, but chocolate can be deadly to dogs. It's one of those things they are NOT supposed to eat. Your short story is very cute and was fun to read.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
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Barbara,
I know that they say chocolate is deadly for our four legged friends but I have had several who followed their owner's cravings and stole my hiddeen treats...Maybe my love for chocolate and them saved us all. LOL Smiles, Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Carol,
Oh I really loved this chapter so well written and what a great ending.
I wonder if you have time to read a very short story I wrote it's in my portfolio
The Determined Squirrel.
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hello Carol,
Oh I really loved this chapter so well written and what a great ending.
I wonder if you have time to read a very short story I wrote it's in my portfolio
The Determined Squirrel.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Gert,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from jadapenn
Is this Frankie related to our other Frankie? Now these twins are mischievous and then blaming everything on the poor doggie. I bet they've been chomping all the chocolates all the time.
Well penned. luv jada
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Is this Frankie related to our other Frankie? Now these twins are mischievous and then blaming everything on the poor doggie. I bet they've been chomping all the chocolates all the time.
Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Jada,
Thank yo as always...smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Rama Rao
Brilliant.
You built up the suspense in a space of about 100 words and the ending was grand.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Brilliant.
You built up the suspense in a space of about 100 words and the ending was grand.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Ramarao,
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Carol,
Cute story, which certainly rings of two mischeifous little boys and I wonder how many times a child's poor pet has taken the blame. Your story flows nicely and the scene is clear and easily envisioned. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hi Carol,
Cute story, which certainly rings of two mischeifous little boys and I wonder how many times a child's poor pet has taken the blame. Your story flows nicely and the scene is clear and easily envisioned. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
Comment from IndianaIrish
Do people really keep chocolate in the attic ... and it doesn't melt? LOL I would hate to have to scamper up to the attic for a chocolate fix. That poor puppy...I bet he gets blamed for everything with those twins. A fun story, Carol, and I enjoyed it.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Do people really keep chocolate in the attic ... and it doesn't melt? LOL I would hate to have to scamper up to the attic for a chocolate fix. That poor puppy...I bet he gets blamed for everything with those twins. A fun story, Carol, and I enjoyed it.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Indy,
People like me keep chocolate everywhere...but it wasn't from the attic ...the trunk was just a decoy at the begining of the story..a treasure you know...Smiles, CArol
