Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Life's Lessons 101"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ....
I can't help smiling as I visualise you eating for two and teaching too, as you say. There is just one small change to suggest ...
* You have - my swollen belly .... animals have bellies and people have stomachs or tummies, as they are usually called.
Thank you for sharing this with us ... and for the smile!
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Hullo Carol ....
I can't help smiling as I visualise you eating for two and teaching too, as you say. There is just one small change to suggest ...
* You have - my swollen belly .... animals have bellies and people have stomachs or tummies, as they are usually called.
Thank you for sharing this with us ... and for the smile!
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Nanette,
Been away for a long time but appreciate the kind support..Carol
Comment from vandawalker
Very cute and imaginative.I had a professor that actually read aloud children's books to her unborn child. You've got the formula for success in short story writing. Nice writing!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Very cute and imaginative.I had a professor that actually read aloud children's books to her unborn child. You've got the formula for success in short story writing. Nice writing!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from sgalletti
Yay Carol! Another wonderful flash fiction and this time on "animal crackers"--one of the prompts. You must hate "blind" like me???? However, you definitely ARE teaching others how to write prose in this style...I love it! Sue
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Yay Carol! Another wonderful flash fiction and this time on "animal crackers"--one of the prompts. You must hate "blind" like me???? However, you definitely ARE teaching others how to write prose in this style...I love it! Sue
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
Comment from Writeaway...
Great tale Begin Again, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested from the beginning, excellent job, keep writing!!! :)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Great tale Begin Again, I found no spags whatsoever and was kept interested from the beginning, excellent job, keep writing!!! :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Jakey,
Will try to do better when I return...Smiles, Carol
Comment from grassroots08
"After all, I was eating for two and teaching too!" I would have stopped at eating for two. Both statements are obvious, but eating for two we expect to hear. Maybe teaching could be worked in earlier or not at all. This is only my suggestion and it is your piece after all. I love the way you set this up and it flowed very well, friend. P.S. Ignore all previous remarks!!! LOL Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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"After all, I was eating for two and teaching too!" I would have stopped at eating for two. Both statements are obvious, but eating for two we expect to hear. Maybe teaching could be worked in earlier or not at all. This is only my suggestion and it is your piece after all. I love the way you set this up and it flowed very well, friend. P.S. Ignore all previous remarks!!! LOL Cheers, Don
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from tati
Thank you for sharing this delightful to read story, Carol. What a wonderful idea of "feeding" Jack. I did so common things to my two baby sons before they were born, made them listen to beautiful songs. I admire your great imagination and intelligence.
With love, tati, August 19, 2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you for sharing this delightful to read story, Carol. What a wonderful idea of "feeding" Jack. I did so common things to my two baby sons before they were born, made them listen to beautiful songs. I admire your great imagination and intelligence.
With love, tati, August 19, 2010
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from RebelRose
Very nice flash fiction. Do you know what I enjoyed most about this post? The fact that you had time to slip into some fiction and relax a little. When I saw that you had posted something, I feared that another 'bad luck' event had wedged itself into writing fodder. I am happy to see that you appear to be back to your old self. I know all your trials are probably not completely behind you but you seem to have at last been able to see some peace. Hang in there, girlfriend.
Patty
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Very nice flash fiction. Do you know what I enjoyed most about this post? The fact that you had time to slip into some fiction and relax a little. When I saw that you had posted something, I feared that another 'bad luck' event had wedged itself into writing fodder. I am happy to see that you appear to be back to your old self. I know all your trials are probably not completely behind you but you seem to have at last been able to see some peace. Hang in there, girlfriend.
Patty
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
You used very few words but created a nice story. I wonder how many mother talk to their unborn babies. I hear that is the first step in bonding. I used to love those animal cracker but I haven't had one in year. Thanks for bringing back the memories.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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You used very few words but created a nice story. I wonder how many mother talk to their unborn babies. I hear that is the first step in bonding. I used to love those animal cracker but I haven't had one in year. Thanks for bringing back the memories.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Beth,
Those were special moments in my life..Music, late nights, and telling my unborn child about my hopes and dreams...that animal crackers weren't bad either. Smiles, Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story about an expectant mother talking with her child still in the womb. It has very good mamory and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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This is a very well written story about an expectant mother talking with her child still in the womb. It has very good mamory and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Charlie,
I was in search of a bit of calm and reassuring moment last night and the thought of a peaceful moment with mother and child seemed to fit the bill. Thank you...Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from Trybuck
Never too early to start talking to the baby and realize he or she is a person.
I liked -- sweet taste teased my taste buds
---- eating for two and teaching too
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Never too early to start talking to the baby and realize he or she is a person.
I liked -- sweet taste teased my taste buds
---- eating for two and teaching too
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 19-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
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Buck,
Thanks for enjoying my short story and for the kind comments. I truly appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
