Viewing the World With Fresh Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "First Day of School"The fifteen Years of My Life
38 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a realistic way a child would think. It is very well written in the manner a child would relate what he felt and what he saw. Sounds like he's already picked up on the girl thing.
Ralf LOL
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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This is a realistic way a child would think. It is very well written in the manner a child would relate what he felt and what he saw. Sounds like he's already picked up on the girl thing.
Ralf LOL
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review. It was fun writing that I enjoyed talking to him at that age.
Comment from Susan Larson
How sweet snd special that you wrote a story about your grandson and his reaction to his first day of school. I hope you find other stories to write about and share.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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How sweet snd special that you wrote a story about your grandson and his reaction to his first day of school. I hope you find other stories to write about and share.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you Susan. I appreciate the review and comments. I usually channel my own younger self when writing stories. This was first attempt of getting into my grandson's mind.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Usually at pre-school everybody likes everybody. I think that's great. You did a great job describing how this little felt. I could even see it on his face. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Usually at pre-school everybody likes everybody. I think that's great. You did a great job describing how this little felt. I could even see it on his face. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thanks for the review and comments. The contest was nine years ago when I wrote this. It is a revived piece.
Betj
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Beth, it is a wonderful little piece and I loved it. You have indeed managed to write the story in the voice of your grandson. How cute. And now he's eighteen. Where do the years go. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Awe, Beth, it is a wonderful little piece and I loved it. You have indeed managed to write the story in the voice of your grandson. How cute. And now he's eighteen. Where do the years go. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and great comments. I'm glad you liked my little sotry.
Beth
Comment from patcelaw
Some children do find the first day of school is stressful, while others seem to love the idea of being free for a spell from their parents. My husband said on the first day of school he did get sick to his stomach and threw up.
Patricia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Some children do find the first day of school is stressful, while others seem to love the idea of being free for a spell from their parents. My husband said on the first day of school he did get sick to his stomach and threw up.
Patricia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I was very outgoing before I started to school. The first day I started to become introverted. It took me a while to get over it.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, Did you get your grandson's permission to tell this story before you posted it here, where hundreds of people on FanStory, might see it? He did say, even when he was six, that he didn't see why grown-ups had to tell everybody everything that he said, (though I don't blame you, he sure was a cutey-pie.)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Dear Beth, Did you get your grandson's permission to tell this story before you posted it here, where hundreds of people on FanStory, might see it? He did say, even when he was six, that he didn't see why grown-ups had to tell everybody everything that he said, (though I don't blame you, he sure was a cutey-pie.)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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LOL No one asked my permission to tell all those tales on me when I was kid so it's my turn. Cole with have his turn when he has his own kids. Thanks for the review and commets.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It sounds like what a child might say or think. My daughter
latched on to a little boy her first day. He was a good looking light skinned negro boy. She liked his tan. If we gave our children the chance there would be no prejudice in this world. Well done, Beth. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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It sounds like what a child might say or think. My daughter
latched on to a little boy her first day. He was a good looking light skinned negro boy. She liked his tan. If we gave our children the chance there would be no prejudice in this world. Well done, Beth. Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thanks Nancy, I appreciate the review and I loved you comments. You are so right about prejudice. Kids pick up the prejudice from their parents. It is sad they they learn some things that are bad from us.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
He's a handsome young fellow. Your story is well-written, interesting, very realistic great child's POV. I could feel the child's fear empathize with him. The comment about maybe even a zillion was perfect, it added to the realism. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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He's a handsome young fellow. Your story is well-written, interesting, very realistic great child's POV. I could feel the child's fear empathize with him. The comment about maybe even a zillion was perfect, it added to the realism. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing this. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Alli Johnston
I remember as a kid I hated telling my parents anything because the next thing I knew another family member was asking me about it! Such a cute story, thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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I remember as a kid I hated telling my parents anything because the next thing I knew another family member was asking me about it! Such a cute story, thank you for sharing
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review and comment. I guess all children much feel that way. I did. Parents get a good laugh out of what their children say and can'r resiste sharing it.
Beth
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a cute grandson you have! So sweet to find a girl he liked on day one of school. Children are precious little people, and they give us much fun in life.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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What a cute grandson you have! So sweet to find a girl he liked on day one of school. Children are precious little people, and they give us much fun in life.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Children are indeed precious. He not so little any more but he is still precious to me.
Beth
