Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Hope Reborn"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
31 total reviews
Comment from RobinWrites
This is another short story of mis-direction and surprise. I saw the fiery redhead as a mermaid off the Irish coast, tempting an onlooker. I love the way you pen your stories.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
This is another short story of mis-direction and surprise. I saw the fiery redhead as a mermaid off the Irish coast, tempting an onlooker. I love the way you pen your stories.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Thanks for the constant encouragement. I truly appreciate it.
Smiles, CArol
Comment from Colette
Hi Carol,
I haven't been around for a while, so it is even easier
to see your progress and I lived your story, plenty to
give the imagination a tweak. Great end, wasn't expecting
that.
Keep well and keep writing.
Colette
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
Hi Carol,
I haven't been around for a while, so it is even easier
to see your progress and I lived your story, plenty to
give the imagination a tweak. Great end, wasn't expecting
that.
Keep well and keep writing.
Colette
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Colette,
Life hasn't let me enjoy doing what I love very much either. I had one day to myself and saw suneagle's contest...decided to write a short for each of his prompts. Glad you enjoyed this one. Your awesome stars and appreciation of the little short warms my heart. Thank you! Take care...Smiles, Carol
Comment from bookishfabler
Now this one is promising. I like th etwist at the ending. It starts out kind of magical, dreamlike, and you are quickly sent to the hospital. and it is a good thing. LOL. Great job. You are quite good at these.
hugs book
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
Now this one is promising. I like th etwist at the ending. It starts out kind of magical, dreamlike, and you are quickly sent to the hospital. and it is a good thing. LOL. Great job. You are quite good at these.
hugs book
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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bookish,
As of late I don't get much time that I can call my own, so it was fun to write these little shorts and find that everyone enjoyed them. Thank you...Smiles, Carol
Comment from MJMuraco
Beautiful! I know we are supposed to write more criticism but your story truly touched me. The artwork is great along with the presentation.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
Beautiful! I know we are supposed to write more criticism but your story truly touched me. The artwork is great along with the presentation.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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MJ
Knowing that you enjoyed the short short story and took something away from it is the greatest reward I could receive. Thank you...Carol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ....
This is a well-written short, short story which I enjoyed reading. Your well-chosen and descriptive words provide vivid imagery for your readers. It reminds me of a short poem I wrote a while back ... about a man who saw the beautiful Nurse and thought he had died and was in Heaven ... until he saw the needle in her hand and he knew he was still on earth.
Thank you for sharing this with us. There is nothing to suggest changing.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
Hullo Carol ....
This is a well-written short, short story which I enjoyed reading. Your well-chosen and descriptive words provide vivid imagery for your readers. It reminds me of a short poem I wrote a while back ... about a man who saw the beautiful Nurse and thought he had died and was in Heaven ... until he saw the needle in her hand and he knew he was still on earth.
Thank you for sharing this with us. There is nothing to suggest changing.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Nanette,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment from melyuki
ooh deep and fascinating story sis, took me to a dark place and then transported me back to the light where candles relight each new day.another brilliant little tale from your interesting mind... sending smile and big hugs from mel x0xxx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
ooh deep and fascinating story sis, took me to a dark place and then transported me back to the light where candles relight each new day.another brilliant little tale from your interesting mind... sending smile and big hugs from mel x0xxx
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Sis,
So far behind and falling further with each day...Thanks for being there! Smiles, Sis
Comment from IndianaIrish
Another well-written flash fiction story, Carol, with great conflict and resolution. Are you going to use one of the other suggestions to enter the contest?
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
Another well-written flash fiction story, Carol, with great conflict and resolution. Are you going to use one of the other suggestions to enter the contest?
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Karyn,
When time only allows me a few short hours to do what I love...I snatched the prompts and wrote away. Glad you enjoyed...
Smiles, Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
A wonderful little story. I loved the mermaid turning into the nurse. Seems like the nightingale syndrome. Great job with this one.
His eyes open(opened), amazed at her fiery red hair.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
A wonderful little story. I loved the mermaid turning into the nurse. Seems like the nightingale syndrome. Great job with this one.
His eyes open(opened), amazed at her fiery red hair.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Joy,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
You are so good at these surprise endings. Even in a micro fiction story you can evoke a feeling of dread in this reader. I'm glad it ended well with that poor guy waking up, hospital or no hospital! Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
Hi Carol,
You are so good at these surprise endings. Even in a micro fiction story you can evoke a feeling of dread in this reader. I'm glad it ended well with that poor guy waking up, hospital or no hospital! Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Chey,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This was interesting to read and had a good twist at the end. You are so good at writing these short stories. I enjoy reading them.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
This was interesting to read and had a good twist at the end. You are so good at writing these short stories. I enjoy reading them.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
Sorry for being so far behind...had to steal a few minutes this morning to thank everyone. I truly appreciate your encouragement and constant support. Smiles, Carol