Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Afraid of the Dark"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
36 total reviews
Comment from RobinWrites
The images of my children and their bedtime protectors floated through my mind as I read this. I believe everyone needs a little Fred in their lives. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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The images of my children and their bedtime protectors floated through my mind as I read this. I believe everyone needs a little Fred in their lives. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Robin,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from allinmyhead
This one just made me laugh out loud with memories. I did almost the same thing to cure my son of his fear of monsters under the bed. I made him a 'monster neutralizer' out of aluminum foil and also gave him a stuffed toy to talk to. It worked ! This story brought it all back. Hadn't thought about it for years.
Yours might be fiction, but these things really do happen.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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This one just made me laugh out loud with memories. I did almost the same thing to cure my son of his fear of monsters under the bed. I made him a 'monster neutralizer' out of aluminum foil and also gave him a stuffed toy to talk to. It worked ! This story brought it all back. Hadn't thought about it for years.
Yours might be fiction, but these things really do happen.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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allinmyhead,
Thank you for enjoying my story and I am glad that it brought back good memories. I, too, gave my son a big hairy blue monster...resembled a biker with chains and bandana, absolutely ugly, but it did the trick. A few years ago we were at a garage sale together and someone else had one...of course, he had to buy it. Thank you for the kind words. Smiles, Carol
Comment from bookishfabler
Again very cute story. I honestly don't know how to review these. I never really come across shorts this short except now. To me they are more of a scene than a story. But, I think you got a lot of info in a small bos=dy of work. No nits
hugs book
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Again very cute story. I honestly don't know how to review these. I never really come across shorts this short except now. To me they are more of a scene than a story. But, I think you got a lot of info in a small bos=dy of work. No nits
hugs book
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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bookish,
Though I enjoy writing long stories where I can really develop the characters and situations, I do enjoy the challenge of writing something in a limited framework too. Thanks for the review...Carol
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me too, though my shorts are longer than these, I love writing them tooo.
hugs Heidi
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Suneagle said they had to be 100 to 110 words so even though these weren't in the contest I tried to follow his rules...Thanks Heidi for enjoying. Smiles to you,,Carol
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no problem, your welcome
Comment from MJMuraco
Your story is touching and it was ironic for me that his name is Fred. That is my husband's name and his Dad's name. This story touched my heart.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Your story is touching and it was ironic for me that his name is Fred. That is my husband's name and his Dad's name. This story touched my heart.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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MJ,
I am glad that the story could take on a personal note for you..It meant something to me as well, My som had this ugly stufed monster that looked like a cross between a biker and an alien...It was his safety net. A few years ago, we found its twin at a garage sale...now that he's all grown up...of course he bought it. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
This is short and sweet and well thought out. It is also realistic because what you have said in this very short story is something that would really appeal to a little child.
There is just one change to suggest ...
* You have - and trudged toward bed. I think this would read more smoothly as - and trudged towards (as we say in standard English) his bed.
I would put Daddy and Dad with capital letters.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Hullo Carol ...
This is short and sweet and well thought out. It is also realistic because what you have said in this very short story is something that would really appeal to a little child.
There is just one change to suggest ...
* You have - and trudged toward bed. I think this would read more smoothly as - and trudged towards (as we say in standard English) his bed.
I would put Daddy and Dad with capital letters.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Nanette,
Thanks for continuing to offer your suggestions and support. They are greatly appreciated. Smiles, Carol
Comment from melyuki
ah nothing nicer than a cuddly toy given with love from your Daddy, when you are alone and frightened of the dark. a cuddly toy that brings joy to a little heart. you have painted a feel good emotional picture for us Sis... in your very short and sweet story of love and kindness between father and son. great wording, and beautiful imagery.. hugs from Little sis. xxxx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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ah nothing nicer than a cuddly toy given with love from your Daddy, when you are alone and frightened of the dark. a cuddly toy that brings joy to a little heart. you have painted a feel good emotional picture for us Sis... in your very short and sweet story of love and kindness between father and son. great wording, and beautiful imagery.. hugs from Little sis. xxxx
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Sis,
As always, I thank you...Smiles and hugs, Sis
Comment from sugardog
Ahhh...sweet piece of micro fiction. I enjoyed this warm, cuddly little tale. I remember sleeping with stuffed animals and it did make me feel safer. You always write such heartwarming stories. Nice job on keeping it tight and interesting! This is good practice-I should be writing some too :) Hope you are well and having a nice summer! Dana
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Ahhh...sweet piece of micro fiction. I enjoyed this warm, cuddly little tale. I remember sleeping with stuffed animals and it did make me feel safer. You always write such heartwarming stories. Nice job on keeping it tight and interesting! This is good practice-I should be writing some too :) Hope you are well and having a nice summer! Dana
Comment Written 20-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Dana,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
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You're welcome an boy do I understand the time/writing thing!!! I'm not here much lately either... Take care, Dana
Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh, what a great Daddy to remember Fred and bring him to help his son deal with the dark. I love the line that he always keeps one eye open! Great flash.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Oh, what a great Daddy to remember Fred and bring him to help his son deal with the dark. I love the line that he always keeps one eye open! Great flash.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Karyn,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent short story well scripted.
I liked the way the young boy felt assured. He had his dad's smile and a one eyed Fred to dispel his fears of monsters. What else could he ask for?
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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An excellent short story well scripted.
I liked the way the young boy felt assured. He had his dad's smile and a one eyed Fred to dispel his fears of monsters. What else could he ask for?
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Ramarao,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment from Shirley B
Great story and great imagery. I could just picture this all in my head. This micro story is filled with so much love and trust, it made me feel good just to read it. I kind of wish I could feel the way that little boy does after he got his Dad's toy. Thank you for sharing, Shirley
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Great story and great imagery. I could just picture this all in my head. This micro story is filled with so much love and trust, it made me feel good just to read it. I kind of wish I could feel the way that little boy does after he got his Dad's toy. Thank you for sharing, Shirley
Comment Written 19-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
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Shirley,
My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
