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Comment from kylielynn
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an interesting story. Nice ending. I would be the one writing the revenge and not acting it as well. Best of luck in the contest and with your future writings.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2010
    lylielynn,

    Thank you so much for all your kind words. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from Readywriter52
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This is a tragic story. It appears that no one really won. A man and two dogs are dead. It's too bad that people have to resort to violence.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2010
    Actually the man and the two dogs weren't dead...He imagined it all in his head...and let his pen build the story like he wanted it to be and not how it really was. Thank you so much. Carol
Comment from adewpearl
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arsenic-laced - add the hyphen
So, Jason is writing various scenarios of revenge he wish he could carry out and poisoning Tyrone's dog is one plan and attacking Tyrone and his dog with pitbulls is an alternative plan? That part confused me a bit, that he was attacking the dog after he had already poisoned it. But then the ending, I think, cleared that up for me. You've stayed within the strict contest word limits and you've incorporated the required contest words well. Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2010
    Brooke,

    Thanks for the wonderful review. Seems like I can't find time to be on this site like I really want to be...Appreciate all your support. CArol
Comment from thorney
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Hi there. A moving story. You were restrained by the word count, so you were unable to express just how evil you felt Tyrone was. The loss Jason felt for his friend must have been tremendous, if he felt the life of a dog was worth that of a man.

Good Flash Fiction, well written.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards, Pete.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2010
    thorney,

    Thank you very much for reading and for commenting. Carol
Comment from LadyWave
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I thought this was a great story that kept me engaged from beginning to end. You drew me in with the intrigue at the very beginning. Great twist at the end.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2010

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2010
    LadyWave,

    I thank you for your time and for your kind comments. Carol