Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "In Flick'ring Light Bells Toll"An extended story in poem form
22 total reviews
Comment from findingmyroom
Time is such a vast but quickly-passing thing in your Wandering Man series. The way I understand it, 10 years or more has gone by, and your characters spent it happily but almost aimlessly. I don't understand this line:
I willed my world to stroll.
?Just asking?
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Time is such a vast but quickly-passing thing in your Wandering Man series. The way I understand it, 10 years or more has gone by, and your characters spent it happily but almost aimlessly. I don't understand this line:
I willed my world to stroll.
?Just asking?
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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lol, now you single it out, it does sound a bit naff! I meant he made walking his entire focus/existence, but I'm no longer sure it sounds right. I'm about to go through all ten chapters addressing issues, and that may be one of them! Thank you :-)
Mike
Comment from shy1250
OK, at this point I'm afraid, since I already read the last chapter and at that point you're alone. So right about the bottom feeders becoming something beautiful and right when love joins them. As we love, we realize our purpose; without it, we roam discontent and frustrated. Meter again friendlier to the ear, word usage perfect, picture perfect--this is words, but this is art. later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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OK, at this point I'm afraid, since I already read the last chapter and at that point you're alone. So right about the bottom feeders becoming something beautiful and right when love joins them. As we love, we realize our purpose; without it, we roam discontent and frustrated. Meter again friendlier to the ear, word usage perfect, picture perfect--this is words, but this is art. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Shy, you're giving me a very big head this Sunday night in humid London. You're totally right about love and its direction-giving properties. It's what we all seek, I think, in whatever form it may take, even if we don;t always realise of admit it!
Mike
Comment from sopranodebs
Hi Mike, nice piece. A nice, easy and progressive read. Good imagery, delicate and soft interpretation of emotional place, amidst a dark desolate environment minus of humanity. Great work, well done. No typo's
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Hi Mike, nice piece. A nice, easy and progressive read. Good imagery, delicate and soft interpretation of emotional place, amidst a dark desolate environment minus of humanity. Great work, well done. No typo's
Comment Written 20-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Thank you :-). I'm so glad you took the time to appreciate my poem and leave me your thoughts. I'm having a great time writing this series.
Mike
Comment from gramalot8
Reedleflump, this was a very vivid imagery. I loved the concept of writing the chapters within the bones of the poem. Good flow of words. I really liked the artwork your chose to accompany your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Reedleflump, this was a very vivid imagery. I loved the concept of writing the chapters within the bones of the poem. Good flow of words. I really liked the artwork your chose to accompany your poem.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Thank you :-). This series of poems was something a little different for me. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
Again, a masterpiece! I can't get enough of the 'Wandering Man'. He is now ensconced in my blood. The picture is so appropriate and exactly how I see him. Keep writing. Love it, love it, love it. :0)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Again, a masterpiece! I can't get enough of the 'Wandering Man'. He is now ensconced in my blood. The picture is so appropriate and exactly how I see him. Keep writing. Love it, love it, love it. :0)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Deb :-)))). I love that there are people following the poem, it makes writing it all the more worthwhile. I'm thrilled you're still enjoying it!
Mike
Comment from patmedium
WOW ... I had wondered. THIS is bang on form, friend. Marvellous.
and t'ward the peals of travesty
we wandered with our souls.
THIS is absolutely wonderful, Mike. Paints great images in my mind's eye. Pat. xx
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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WOW ... I had wondered. THIS is bang on form, friend. Marvellous.
and t'ward the peals of travesty
we wandered with our souls.
THIS is absolutely wonderful, Mike. Paints great images in my mind's eye. Pat. xx
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Thank you! I'm really enjoying getting myself back into the mindset for the wandering man. I'm about half way through drafting the next chapter. It may end in a dark place indeed, but I haven;t yet finally decided.
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
Mike, Love the alliteration, particularly like the palms/psalms pairing
you describe the passage of time beautifully as well as their blossoming love relationship
so much for the happy interlude - trouble lies ahead - what a way to keep me hanging!!! Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Mike, Love the alliteration, particularly like the palms/psalms pairing
you describe the passage of time beautifully as well as their blossoming love relationship
so much for the happy interlude - trouble lies ahead - what a way to keep me hanging!!! Brooke
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Thank you :-). Next chapter is on its way soon, hopefully. I was a little worried I'd not be able to carry on with this after the longish gap, but with a little work I sonn found my groove :-)
Mike
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I'm glad you found your groove and that you have the good sense to remind us of what happened last in that little summary :-)
Comment from Judian James
Damn, I have no sixers for you. The very first verse is outstanding and it only gets better from there! What a gift you have, Mike. XVII is superb. Hell,it's all SUPERB
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Damn, I have no sixers for you. The very first verse is outstanding and it only gets better from there! What a gift you have, Mike. XVII is superb. Hell,it's all SUPERB
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Jude :-). I wrote that first verse alone, then it was a week before I continued, and I just couldn't pen anything that matched it in my mind, so in the end I just went with things and it turned out fine. You always know how to say the things I need to hear :-)
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
Nice to see you continuing the tale FINALLY Mike, ha, ha.
So soooooooth mate, rolled off the tongue effortlessly, loved the alliteration and the visuals were extremely powerful. I could see Tim Burton having a field day with this story mate, definitely one he'd be drawn to. What more can I say mate, You Da Man!! Love Reading Ya...
Now I'm off to watch some Footy, catch you later mate.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Nice to see you continuing the tale FINALLY Mike, ha, ha.
So soooooooth mate, rolled off the tongue effortlessly, loved the alliteration and the visuals were extremely powerful. I could see Tim Burton having a field day with this story mate, definitely one he'd be drawn to. What more can I say mate, You Da Man!! Love Reading Ya...
Now I'm off to watch some Footy, catch you later mate.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Ah, it would definitely be cool to see what Tim Burton made of my tale! Yeah, I had quite a gap before this one, but I'm finding a little more time available to write again (at last!) so hopefulyy I'll be able to polish off the wandering man's tale. Thanks for the frickin' great review, Hitch. I hope the footy's explosive!
Mike
Comment from ~Dovey
Wow, Mike. This is fantastic. I have apparently found this saga late and will have to backtrack and read the prelude to this story. This is most excellent work. I especially enjoyed this last passage:
Somewhere ahead, humanity
had dug itself a hole,
and t'ward the peals of travesty
we wandered with our souls.
I look forward to reading more.
Kim
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Wow, Mike. This is fantastic. I have apparently found this saga late and will have to backtrack and read the prelude to this story. This is most excellent work. I especially enjoyed this last passage:
Somewhere ahead, humanity
had dug itself a hole,
and t'ward the peals of travesty
we wandered with our souls.
I look forward to reading more.
Kim
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Kim! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it, and flattered you've signed up to read the rest. I shall endeavour not to disappoint :-)
Mike
