A Curvy Letter Got the Boot
Write without the letter S6 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
Oh, I bet you had a great time writing this one Helvi. With the premise of the contest, you very cleverly gave your entry an interesting twist to the theme. I loved it!
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Oh, I bet you had a great time writing this one Helvi. With the premise of the contest, you very cleverly gave your entry an interesting twist to the theme. I loved it!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
Comment from KeepSmiling
This is clever! Great rhyme and rhythm, the poem has a fun "bounce." Thanks for the chuckle. Good luck in the voting booths!
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This is clever! Great rhyme and rhythm, the poem has a fun "bounce." Thanks for the chuckle. Good luck in the voting booths!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
Comment from anne1204
Very cute and clever. This was a tricky contest and hard to write without the S. Your poem has a good flow and good humor. Good luck in contest. Anne 1204
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Very cute and clever. This was a tricky contest and hard to write without the S. Your poem has a good flow and good humor. Good luck in contest. Anne 1204
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
Comment from G. Moore
Better rhythm. Nice work. One small thing: spelling on dum(b)founded. No big deal. It was also nice that you are not only open to criticisms but amend your (small) mistakes. Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Better rhythm. Nice work. One small thing: spelling on dum(b)founded. No big deal. It was also nice that you are not only open to criticisms but amend your (small) mistakes. Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
Hi G.Moore,
I've re-written the poem for better rhyme. The new editon is below. I hoping you will re-review and perhaps raise my rating. I always listen to the reviews I receive and try to do a better job. Hope you like the new version.
Thanks for your time.
The writer
A curvy letter got the boot
Before the tall lean "T".
I can't explain the "Y" of it,
Or how it came to be?
Economizing everything
Can render to much clout.
Dumfounded I can't comprehend,
What some IQ threw out.
Comment from gramalot8
Cute idea. But not quite without the "S" as asked. See the word Swerves. But I liked your style and the idea. Keep up the good work.
Curvy letter did the trick. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Cute idea. But not quite without the "S" as asked. See the word Swerves. But I liked your style and the idea. Keep up the good work.
Curvy letter did the trick. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
Hi Gramalot8,
After reading your review I re-wrote the whole thing without anything that resembles an "S". Below is the new version that I hope you will review again and perhaps change my rating. Thank you for steering me in the right direction.
A curvy letter got the boot
Before the tall lean "T".
I can't explain the "Y" of it,
Or what fact made it be?
Economizing everything
Can rule dumfounded clout.
My poor mind can't quite comprehend
What some IQ threw out.
Thank you for your time
Comment from jackpeg
I'll bet it was fun writing this. I think you fudged on the rules, using the dollar sign for the forbidden S, but I won't tell any one. You did use an actual "S" though, in the next to last line. Tsk, tsk.
On the second version. Now THAT is a poem! Very much better, in fact, it makes me wonder why you didn't submit it in that electric format in the first place. Really great, attention getting meter and smooth rhymes.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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I'll bet it was fun writing this. I think you fudged on the rules, using the dollar sign for the forbidden S, but I won't tell any one. You did use an actual "S" though, in the next to last line. Tsk, tsk.
On the second version. Now THAT is a poem! Very much better, in fact, it makes me wonder why you didn't submit it in that electric format in the first place. Really great, attention getting meter and smooth rhymes.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
Hi jackpeg,
After reading your review I re-wrote the whole poem without anything that resembles an "S". Below is the new version that I hope you will review again and perhaps change my rating. Thank you for steering me in the right direction.
A curvy letter got the boot
Before the tall lean "T".
I can't explain the "Y" of it,
Or what fact made it be?
Economizing everything
Can rule dumfounded clout.
My poor mind can't quite comprehend
What some IQ threw out.
Thank you for your time
The Writer
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I just did review it. Great make-over!
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Thanks so much for coming back and doing another review.. Late night writng does not pay off. I don't know what I was thinking at the time. Thanks for waking me up so I could do this the right way. I appreciate it very much. Blessings from, The Writer
