Hoagie to go
A thandwich to go...23 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
You just reviewed one of my pieces, so I thought I'd return the favor. Congrats on the win!! Very clever how you hinted at what normally would be an "S" word with the very last line, and your description line was very cute too
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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You just reviewed one of my pieces, so I thought I'd return the favor. Congrats on the win!! Very clever how you hinted at what normally would be an "S" word with the very last line, and your description line was very cute too
Comment Written 01-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Thank you Judian for reading one of mine, feel free to read others as I like to learn from other writers. John
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Back atcha!
Comment from anabelle
LOL! Nicely done. I'm always awed by people who can write stories without one letter such as 's'. Just look at how many times this review alone has it. :-0
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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LOL! Nicely done. I'm always awed by people who can write stories without one letter such as 's'. Just look at how many times this review alone has it. :-0
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 11-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2010
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anabelle, it took a little time to think about it, but once I did, it worked. It can be done... thank you for the review and many good thoughtz. I kinda did it again. Thank you... John
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You're very welcome, John.
Comment from amada
I like this fast and feisty work. The action was unbelievable, I could see the hoagie with the pepperoni, lettuce, tomato, oil...You name it. Besides, it made me hungry for a hoagie too!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I like this fast and feisty work. The action was unbelievable, I could see the hoagie with the pepperoni, lettuce, tomato, oil...You name it. Besides, it made me hungry for a hoagie too!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I'd be happy to make one for you some day! Thank you for reading and positively commenting, I appreciate it. John
Comment from missy98writer
Writer,
You're short fiction story is well written. You did a wonderful job not using the letter S. The food sounded yummy. Cool photo of what looks like a deli. Good dialogue. Your entry is an excellent one for the writing prompt. Good luck in the voting booth.
Missy.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Writer,
You're short fiction story is well written. You did a wonderful job not using the letter S. The food sounded yummy. Cool photo of what looks like a deli. Good dialogue. Your entry is an excellent one for the writing prompt. Good luck in the voting booth.
Missy.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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missy, thanks for reading and commenting on my story...
Comment from sgalletti
Lots of fun entry!!! Loved the creative use of hoagies for content and adding all the fixings without using a single "s"! Great response to the prompt. Sue
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Lots of fun entry!!! Loved the creative use of hoagies for content and adding all the fixings without using a single "s"! Great response to the prompt. Sue
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Sue, I had fun writing it also... Thanks for the positive comments....
Comment from OldVet
I don't even try to come up with something like this. I like Ss.
Good Job! Good Luck!
Suggestions:
"Hey[,] kid, what'll it be?" "Alrighty[,] pal.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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I don't even try to come up with something like this. I like Ss.
Good Job! Good Luck!
Suggestions:
"Hey[,] kid, what'll it be?" "Alrighty[,] pal.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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OldVet... Thanks for those corrections and also for taking the time to read and comment on this.
Comment from Sasha
You did a pretty good job with this one. I can't even write my name without using an "S". This is a great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best. Thanks for using my photo to illustrate it.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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You did a pretty good job with this one. I can't even write my name without using an "S". This is a great entry for the contest and I wish you all the best. Thanks for using my photo to illustrate it.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Smurphgirl...
Comment from patmedium
Question ... What is provolone and what is a hoagie? Please explain for this foreigner! Well written and interesting. Pat.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Question ... What is provolone and what is a hoagie? Please explain for this foreigner! Well written and interesting. Pat.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Pat.. Thank you for reading and commenting on my story. Provolone is a typically "sharp" italian cheese and a hogie is similar to a "submarine" sandwich, a 6-8 inch long sandwich generally made on crispy Italian bread.
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Many thanks for satisfying my curiosity. Pat
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. You certainly kept within the rules of no "S" Very clever and amusing. I wouldn't have guessed you could do it without using the letter.
dj
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. You certainly kept within the rules of no "S" Very clever and amusing. I wouldn't have guessed you could do it without using the letter.
dj
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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D.J. Thank you for stopping to read and comment on my story...
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from Thesis
This is a good entry for the "Life without the letter S" contest. It was short, but told a story in a very succinct manner.
Good luck in the voting booth. - Thesis
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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This is a good entry for the "Life without the letter S" contest. It was short, but told a story in a very succinct manner.
Good luck in the voting booth. - Thesis
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thank you for reading and commenting. The contest was for 25-50 words thats why it may have appeared short. Mine was I think 48 words. Thanks again....
