Belated Gratitude
A poem strictly for the birds.25 total reviews
Comment from Alaskastory
'Belated Gratitude' amazingly meets the contest requirement to be short and no s. Hard to do, I'm sure. You did it with an amusing story.
Thanks again, MissM.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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'Belated Gratitude' amazingly meets the contest requirement to be short and no s. Hard to do, I'm sure. You did it with an amusing story.
Thanks again, MissM.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2010
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Thank you Miss A, for your kind review, and for taking time to read this little poem. It was a challenge, but fun too.
Comment from P. G. Simpkins
how sweet, the little bird listens patiently to us at times and we listen back, lovely, and a cute image, short and sweet well done : )
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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how sweet, the little bird listens patiently to us at times and we listen back, lovely, and a cute image, short and sweet well done : )
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I'm glad you came by to read this.
Comment from abeetle
That is so sweet. I always enjoy reading your writting. You have such a sweet, kind way with words. Very expressive. I bet it was difficult to not include "s". Good luck in the contest! This is a winner!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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That is so sweet. I always enjoy reading your writting. You have such a sweet, kind way with words. Very expressive. I bet it was difficult to not include "s". Good luck in the contest! This is a winner!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Oh! Thank you SOOOO much for your very kind words, and for the six stars too! You are so generous. I'm very grateful for this good review, and I'm also glad you liked the little poem for the birds. Abundant thanks and always, Love, M.
Comment from percival86jack
"Life Without The Letter 'S'"! Sounds easy but I'll bet it's not! I'm going to toddle off now and give it a try! LOL Cheers, Jack
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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"Life Without The Letter 'S'"! Sounds easy but I'll bet it's not! I'm going to toddle off now and give it a try! LOL Cheers, Jack
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Many thanks, Jack. It is not easy, you're right. How did you do? Thanks for reviewing this little bird poem. ^*^
Comment from MizKat
Your poem is darling. The rhyme and flow are wonderful. The story it told is great. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. It's a nice contest entry. Best wishes. Kat
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Your poem is darling. The rhyme and flow are wonderful. The story it told is great. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. It's a nice contest entry. Best wishes. Kat
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much Kat. I'm glad you found it enjoyable. I liked your review too, so we're even. : )
Comment from Carol D Parker
Excellent. So lovely to read with that perfect rhythm. I listen to the doves in the morning and they always sound like they're saying something and if I listen hard enough I can understand. Everybody has this ability; we just need to stop, stay silent and listen. I love your poem. You might want to change the 2nd verse, first line. The meter is a little tricky. You could make it perfect if you wrote it somewhat like this: "ALL my HAPPY life I've heard." Or, "All my QUIET life I've heard." You can use any descriptive, 2-syllable word. You're perfectly welcomme to use either suggestion. I always allowed my students to use my changes. Some got published. Expert work here. I only gave you 5 stars because of that tricky meter, but when you fix it, let me know and I'll give it to you. Good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Excellent. So lovely to read with that perfect rhythm. I listen to the doves in the morning and they always sound like they're saying something and if I listen hard enough I can understand. Everybody has this ability; we just need to stop, stay silent and listen. I love your poem. You might want to change the 2nd verse, first line. The meter is a little tricky. You could make it perfect if you wrote it somewhat like this: "ALL my HAPPY life I've heard." Or, "All my QUIET life I've heard." You can use any descriptive, 2-syllable word. You're perfectly welcomme to use either suggestion. I always allowed my students to use my changes. Some got published. Expert work here. I only gave you 5 stars because of that tricky meter, but when you fix it, let me know and I'll give it to you. Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Many thanks for this helpful and constructive review. I guess it depends on how the reader places the accents, but I did change that line, and hope it seems better to you. Thank you so much for your kind comments.
Comment from wierdgrace
such a great poem, and for the contest no using the letter s, this must have been hard, I read the poem, then checked for errors, the poem was great, smooth, and excellent writing, hope you get many votes, it should
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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such a great poem, and for the contest no using the letter s, this must have been hard, I read the poem, then checked for errors, the poem was great, smooth, and excellent writing, hope you get many votes, it should
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thnks so much for your kind words about the poem. I hope you're right! LOL
Comment from nancyjam
Terrific job - this sweet
poem without an "s" - I like the
story line - rhyme and meter are
good also. good luck in the
contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Terrific job - this sweet
poem without an "s" - I like the
story line - rhyme and meter are
good also. good luck in the
contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thank you for this very gracious review of my poem and for the good wishes too.
Comment from Bellringer
Very nice poem with a particular charm. You gave us a quality piece to enjoy , while, at the same time fulfilling the requirements of this writing prompt. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Very nice poem with a particular charm. You gave us a quality piece to enjoy , while, at the same time fulfilling the requirements of this writing prompt. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thank you so much for your kind review of my bird poem. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from Anne Elizabeth
Hi- this is a cute poem! You have made me see birds in a new way, so good job. Your thought was expressed very clearly, and your poem flows very well. Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Hi- this is a cute poem! You have made me see birds in a new way, so good job. Your thought was expressed very clearly, and your poem flows very well. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the birdie poem. :^)
