Hello, Operator
A little song'll do it35 total reviews
Comment from shirley31
oh how wonderful original i appreciate this and guess what i love the beatles, i really enjoyed this musical feast with the operator!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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oh how wonderful original i appreciate this and guess what i love the beatles, i really enjoyed this musical feast with the operator!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you Shirley for going back into the archives and pulling a few out, I honestly appreciate it. I'm also very happy you enjoyed this little poem and granted me a six star. I remember it beingfun to write, racking my brain for lines in song I enjoy. Thank you again... John
Comment from RobinWrites
This is wonderful. I love the play on song lines that lead to a sweet birthday message to his mother. Didn't see where this was going, but it made my day. Thanks,
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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This is wonderful. I love the play on song lines that lead to a sweet birthday message to his mother. Didn't see where this was going, but it made my day. Thanks,
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you Robin for reading and your positive comments, John
Comment from kchitti
well i must say that this was very creative! i also love, and knew, all of the song references -- so you obviously have great taste in music. ha.
however. I thought the ending wasn't believable at all. not conceivable to me that she would not recognize her sons voice until he identified himself. not after speaking that long. and yes, even if she is an operator who talks to thousands. secondly, she would have hung up after line two, if she was real. :-)
but that doesn't mean I didn't enjoy it. honestly I would leave off the last two lines and perhaps have the operator hang up -- then 'Timmy' could mutter to himself another song lyric that says something funny or poignant. I'd leave off the 'mother' and birthday angle.
just my two cents. I do wish you the best of luck, and of course keep listening to wonderful music (I have no worries about that, though)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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well i must say that this was very creative! i also love, and knew, all of the song references -- so you obviously have great taste in music. ha.
however. I thought the ending wasn't believable at all. not conceivable to me that she would not recognize her sons voice until he identified himself. not after speaking that long. and yes, even if she is an operator who talks to thousands. secondly, she would have hung up after line two, if she was real. :-)
but that doesn't mean I didn't enjoy it. honestly I would leave off the last two lines and perhaps have the operator hang up -- then 'Timmy' could mutter to himself another song lyric that says something funny or poignant. I'd leave off the 'mother' and birthday angle.
just my two cents. I do wish you the best of luck, and of course keep listening to wonderful music (I have no worries about that, though)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you kchitti for reading and your comment.. I understand your dilemna with the ending and I also like your recommendation of adjusting the ending... thanks, John
Comment from Metal Head
Delightful, simply delightful.
I recognised only a few of the lyrics, but, considering my user name, that's probably no surprise.
I've said this to a couple of other contest entries; I feel this deserves to be in with a shout of winning. A great read that conforms to the intended contest rules.
Best of luck
Michael D
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Delightful, simply delightful.
I recognised only a few of the lyrics, but, considering my user name, that's probably no surprise.
I've said this to a couple of other contest entries; I feel this deserves to be in with a shout of winning. A great read that conforms to the intended contest rules.
Best of luck
Michael D
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Metal Head I appreciate you reading my story and for the positive comments you gave me... now go listen to some oldies wouldya!! thanks again my friend
John
Comment from Rama Rao
LOL.
You got me fooled, I must admit.
I thought the guy was crazy singing songs over the telephone.
The twist in the tale makes the story very interesting. I must also congratulate you on this experiment of converting the lines from songs into dialogues.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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LOL.
You got me fooled, I must admit.
I thought the guy was crazy singing songs over the telephone.
The twist in the tale makes the story very interesting. I must also congratulate you on this experiment of converting the lines from songs into dialogues.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Ramarao, thank you for reading my story and for the positive comments. I very much appreciate it. John
Comment from adewpearl
My son has this kind of sense of humor - sounds like the kind of prank he'd play except I would recognize his voice right away - I enjoyed your fun with lyrics of songs from my era :-) Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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My son has this kind of sense of humor - sounds like the kind of prank he'd play except I would recognize his voice right away - I enjoyed your fun with lyrics of songs from my era :-) Brooke :-)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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I guess our era... great music wasn't it? Thanks for reading my story and commenting on it. I truly appreciate it. John
Comment from Carol D Parker
What a blast! I had fun reading this
and remembering all those songs. Great
ending and a terriffic piece of work.
He must have disguised his voice.
It takes me back to when I was a
telephone operator. This is a great
entry. Good luck
Delora
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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What a blast! I had fun reading this
and remembering all those songs. Great
ending and a terriffic piece of work.
He must have disguised his voice.
It takes me back to when I was a
telephone operator. This is a great
entry. Good luck
Delora
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Delora.. thank you for reading my story and also for the positive comments... John
Comment from BlueJamme
Hi jmdg,
I liked the idea and it was a clever story to do, but I'm not sure that a mom wouldn't recognise her own Son's voice.
Nevertheless, although I figured out the ending pretty quickly, it was still an entertaining read - and now I have HELP in my mind!
BlueJamme
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Hi jmdg,
I liked the idea and it was a clever story to do, but I'm not sure that a mom wouldn't recognise her own Son's voice.
Nevertheless, although I figured out the ending pretty quickly, it was still an entertaining read - and now I have HELP in my mind!
BlueJamme
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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BlueJamme... thank you for reading and reviewing my story. The son disguised his voice... it's a fiction story to have a little fun with in the contest. HELP isn't a bad song to hum through the day no, is it? Thanks again... John
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Indeed it isn't. I'm a big Beatles fan, but I just didn't want it in my head before bedtime. I've now cleared the blockage through listening to the album. Oh, how our words send out long and life affecting ripples!
BlueJamme
Comment from patmedium
Excellent... funny and full of fond memories, too... that just goes to show how old I am, doesn't it?
Congratulations on a good write and good luck. Pat.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Excellent... funny and full of fond memories, too... that just goes to show how old I am, doesn't it?
Congratulations on a good write and good luck. Pat.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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Pat... maybe we could both "rock around the clock" at some point. Thanks for reading my story and for commenting. John
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Wish I could, pal... too darned disabled now! LOL. Pat.
Comment from TexAnn
This is a nice one! Seems there is a song for everything, nice incorporation! I liked how you easily put the prompt to the song.
Good luck, TexAnn
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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This is a nice one! Seems there is a song for everything, nice incorporation! I liked how you easily put the prompt to the song.
Good luck, TexAnn
Comment Written 23-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
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TexAnn, from Belgium... wow, thank you for reading my story and for the kind review. John
