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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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I liked this piece I liked the humor expressed in the ending very well done and good luck in the contest regards Fuller

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Fuller,


    Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, Carol
Comment from anabelle
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Cute story, Carol. The poor boy. Here he's trying to be James Dean and the waitress shuts him right down.

Best of luck in the contest.

Regards, anabelle

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Anabelle,


    Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, Carol
Comment from resilke
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Thank you for sharing your story. This is well written and to the point. I like the image and focus on the Bible--good focal point. Lots of dialogue always helps to enhance a story as you've used. Good character development. Lots of memorable moments. Good ideas. Creative. Entertaining. Keep writing. All best

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    resilke,


    Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Sally Carter
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A charming little story Carol, and what a smart little girl that one is! (Not to mention the waitress of course.)
Great fun, accomplishes such a lot in 300 words, and manages to paint four great portraits in one tale.
Excellent entry, I am sure, and I wish you luck with it.
Sally

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Sally,

    Thank you so much for your kind comments. I greatly appreciate the thoughts. smiles, Carol
Comment from bayoupoet
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Carol, this is an absolutely endearing story. It is so well written and your characters were very real and natural. Good luck in this contest. You are a natural!
sandra

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Sandra,

    Thanks again for stopping by and reading my story. It was fun to write and I am glad you enjoyed. Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
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What a great little story. Guess guys are dumb so we'll take pity on them and try to make them feel better, but that gets old after awhile. lol. Great job.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Joy,

    Yes, sometimes it most certainly does. I appreciate that you enjoyed the little story. Smiles, Crol
Comment from Jnetgame
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I enjoyed this well written scene. I may be wrong, but it is my understanding that the contest requires ONLY dialogue. The other entries I have read have nothing but dialogue. Good luck.

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Jnetgame,

    When I joined the contest, it didn't actually say that and others had written a story as well. Oh, well I enjoyed writing the story and hope you at least enjoyed reading it. Smiles, CArol
Comment from fionageorge
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Oh, Carol, how sweet is that? I really got into this, and wondered what little Beth was asking, and how her daddy would answer. I absolutely love the last line. It is a saying I often use 'Only a mother could love it'.
Warmest regards, Marijke

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Marijke,

    Yes, I do too! Thanks for reading and enjoying my little story. Appreciate the comments. Carol
Comment from Trybuck
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Sisters can be so innocently mean. I believe the 5 yr old is a little too smart for her age. Enjoyed this one very much. Well done, Buck

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Buck,

    I've got a three year old grand daughter who thinks she's a teenager with the words that come out of her mouth...they grow up way to fast these days. Smiles, Carol
Comment from vandawalker
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A precious moment story. I can see the action and the characters are well described. I always appreciate your first paragraphs; they are always so descriptive and never fail to draw my interest. The dialogue makes this story real. Good writing and very humorous.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2010
    Vandawalker,

    That was a wonderful comment and something I really appreciate hearing. I struggle, searching for the right setting in my stories and then the remainder of the story seems to flow easy. Knowing that the extra care is appreciate makes me feel good. Smiles, Carol