Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Mother Dust"An extended story in poem form
118 total reviews
Comment from jgirlie152
This is an extremely well written poem, revealing what is going on in this world in our time. The wandering man can go anywhere is this world, a world difficult to understand.
Greed, lust, power, leaking poison unable to be held back
have all become what is breaking our world apart. Looking forward to your new book, and I thank you for being forthright, speaking without fear of what the world is today.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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This is an extremely well written poem, revealing what is going on in this world in our time. The wandering man can go anywhere is this world, a world difficult to understand.
Greed, lust, power, leaking poison unable to be held back
have all become what is breaking our world apart. Looking forward to your new book, and I thank you for being forthright, speaking without fear of what the world is today.
Joan
Comment Written 24-May-2011
reply by the author on 25-May-2011
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Thank you, Joan :-). This series of poems became a real labour of love for me, pulling together many of my most commonly used themes. I was thrilled to receive the seal of quality - it's the encouragement I need to start getting my work out to publishers.
Mike
Comment from krdeering
Mike--I'm glad I decided to read a bit more. I hopped all the way back to the beginning so I could get the gist of the story better. This is SUCH an excellent introduction. It conjures up all the right and ugly images that play on all of the senses. I was going to cite a favorite line, but I have too many. Not that I enjoy the picture a bit. But the writing is divine.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2010
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Mike--I'm glad I decided to read a bit more. I hopped all the way back to the beginning so I could get the gist of the story better. This is SUCH an excellent introduction. It conjures up all the right and ugly images that play on all of the senses. I was going to cite a favorite line, but I have too many. Not that I enjoy the picture a bit. But the writing is divine.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2010
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I'm so complimented that you decided to go back and read the earlier chapters :-). This opening piece was one of those 'magic' poems, the ones you write that feel so easy then, when you look back at them, seem so complex you think 'did I write that?' My biggest fear while writing this whole series has been that I'll steadily lose the quality of writing. I think I wobbled a little in places, but that'll be fixed soon :-)
Thank you so much!
Mike
Comment from Christian Andre
A strong write and great beginning of an epic book...
an easy flow...
good form...
my fav. lines:
" Eventually the land was dry,
no creature found a mate.
The world, in all its innocence,
fell victim to our hate. "
sounds like our future to come (in a nut shell)
" I only know that I must seek
a purpose where I can.
Through desolation's aftermath,
I am the Wand'ring Man. "
a great way to end this piece...
very relative write in nature...
good work...
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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A strong write and great beginning of an epic book...
an easy flow...
good form...
my fav. lines:
" Eventually the land was dry,
no creature found a mate.
The world, in all its innocence,
fell victim to our hate. "
sounds like our future to come (in a nut shell)
" I only know that I must seek
a purpose where I can.
Through desolation's aftermath,
I am the Wand'ring Man. "
a great way to end this piece...
very relative write in nature...
good work...
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Christian :-). I'm so glad you've decided to do bck and start from the beginning; it gives my currently promoted conclusion far greater meaning. Thank you for the fantastic comments. Not many poets write dark on Fanstory, so I like to try and redress the balance a little!
Mike
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you are most welcome for the reveiw...
I tend to write a bit on the dark side as well...
and you are right not a lot of us write in that sort of context...
you should check out my book that I am working:
http://www.fanstory.com/christian_andre
( if you have some time )
leave a reveiw or two if you like...
Comment from shy1250
You do a beautiful job of giving us a vision of a world stripped, scorned, finally done with our abuse, leaving one soul alone and wandering. No errors or suggestions. Forgive the brief review--chafing at the bit to get to the next chapter! later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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You do a beautiful job of giving us a vision of a world stripped, scorned, finally done with our abuse, leaving one soul alone and wandering. No errors or suggestions. Forgive the brief review--chafing at the bit to get to the next chapter! later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Shy. I really appreciate your reading through like this. It gives the last part context, obviously, and me a thrill to know somebody is interested enough to want to read the whole story. This was the poem that kicked it all off, after so many people wanted more!
Mike
Comment from Diny
Had to go back and start from the begining- WOW I forgot how much I liked epic poetry- stories in verse- Reminds me of some my dad used to recite- Thanks for the memories- Write on-Di
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Had to go back and start from the begining- WOW I forgot how much I liked epic poetry- stories in verse- Reminds me of some my dad used to recite- Thanks for the memories- Write on-Di
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Di :-). I was really taken with the idea of writing an epic story in a poem. I think there are two more chapters to go, pending the characters proving me wrong, of course!
Mike
Comment from babylonia
mike,
i love it! LOL i only hate that i haven't read it before now. it says so much in such few words. i can't wait to read more.
great job
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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mike,
i love it! LOL i only hate that i haven't read it before now. it says so much in such few words. i can't wait to read more.
great job
love,
barbara
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Woo! I got so many great responses to this one, and I'm really happy to have yours added to it, Barbara :-). I'm having a blast writing this series!
Mike
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mike,
it's really cool to read as well. glad you are writing it.
love,
barbara
Comment from honeytree
The art work suited these very creative words written here. We have not been wiped out on earth yet.
If the earth can't be rid of hate, we can seek love from God and fellow man. The most important word is love. When we love someone and we know we are loved in return is very special
If we could get rid of hate and seek love and helping others we have a chance to be in heaven when we die.
Great Writing.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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The art work suited these very creative words written here. We have not been wiped out on earth yet.
If the earth can't be rid of hate, we can seek love from God and fellow man. The most important word is love. When we love someone and we know we are loved in return is very special
If we could get rid of hate and seek love and helping others we have a chance to be in heaven when we die.
Great Writing.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Honeytree. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading my poem. We can only hope people withh learn not to hate.
Mike
Comment from hotstuff
Mike, this poem is amazing. It really does highlight the horror of nuclear weapon use. Very frightening to contemplate. I once read that the only things able to survive nuclear attack would be ants and cockroaches? Don't know how accurate this is.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Mike, this poem is amazing. It really does highlight the horror of nuclear weapon use. Very frightening to contemplate. I once read that the only things able to survive nuclear attack would be ants and cockroaches? Don't know how accurate this is.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I'd heard that too. I remember reading a Simon R Green story where his characters end up in the distant future and the whole world is ruled by different types of cockroach; nasty! Thank you for the great review :-)
Mike
Comment from cscalia99
What a great piece of work! I'm a novice when it comes to poetry but, I am certainly a fan of "The Wandering Man" and will certainly look for him...well...wandering :-)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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What a great piece of work! I'm a novice when it comes to poetry but, I am certainly a fan of "The Wandering Man" and will certainly look for him...well...wandering :-)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for this fantastic review :-). I have part 2 up now and I'm currently writing part 3. I'm really enjoying working on this story :-)
Mike
Comment from smileycloud
hey
the scattered rhyme is very appealing
wow; what thoughts here are vividly portrayed; a very good image of the really lifelike character
the last stanza is my favourite
a good write
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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hey
the scattered rhyme is very appealing
wow; what thoughts here are vividly portrayed; a very good image of the really lifelike character
the last stanza is my favourite
a good write
have a smiley day
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I am having a smiley day, thanks to a slew of wonderful reviews, this one included :-). Thank you for your encouraging words!
Mike
