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Comment from BethShelby
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This is almost too touching to be funny. It is so like a child to want to help and thinking the tooth fairy might give him something for a contribution. I hope those teeth were loose before he took them out. LOL

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Beth,

    Our city is one of the highest unemployment rates including me as a statistic...I needed to find a silver lining in Tommy..Smiles to you
Comment from Soulester
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Ouch! Tommy really wanted to help, didn't he? Poor baby. Glad to see this is fiction. It really is amazing what kids will come up with, isn't it? Everybody knows the tooth fairy has lots of money and will never let you down. LOL Cute idea--good luck in the contest! Mary

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Mary,

    Glad you enjoyed the little story. I appreciate the comments. Smiles to you..
Comment from Nicnac
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Aw - sweet!
Little Tommy doesn't realize his Mom gives the tooth fairy the money. hee hee

I enjoyed your short story, Carol. It has a nostalgic feel of the innocence of children and their hopefulness to make all things right.

An enjoyable read. :)
Nic

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    NIc

    Thanks so much for the kind review and for enjoying the story. Our city has one of the highest unemployment rates right now..including me and my honey as one of the statistics...Needed to find a bit of a silver lining I guess...Smiles to you..
Comment from Jnetgame
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Cute story. I think this is both well written and original. I'm glad the boy found a way to help (or at least he thought he did). Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Jmetgame,

    Thank you for your kind review. Smiles to you...
Comment from Metal Head
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I find it almost impossible to critique these 100 word stories. Instead all I can do is indicate how much I thought of it.

A nice story indeed.

Michael D

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Michael,

    Thank you for your kind review and comments. Smiles to you
Comment from Perp Ihebom
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This is a good short piece with a light-hearted tone around it. It paints a picture of poverty that has afflicted a family. A bit of humor is added in the last paragraph. Good luck

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Perp,

    Glad that you enjoyed this one. I appreciate the comments. Smiles to you,
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi writer,

I know this is supposed to be humorous but I find it quite sad. I guess the humor is in the prayer that Tommy said, asking the tooth fairy for help. That is very original and sweet. Good luck in the contest....chey

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Chey,

    Our city is one of the highest in unemployment. Unfortunately my honey and I are part of those statistics. I guess I was looking for some kind of silver lining ...smiles to you...
Comment from Penpal
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This is precious, and not only does it have humor, but it's laced with real life circumstances that pull at the reader's heart. The ending also gives a twist and is ironic that poor Tommy wants to help, but we all know who the tooth fairy really is. Well done

Pen

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Pen,

    Thanks for the kind review and comments. Smiles to you,
Comment from Agrona
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I think I'm missing the humor here. It's a rather sad and heartfelt story. Is it supposed to be funny that mom IS the tooth fairy? Not sure, but I didn't laugh, I'm sorry.

It's a very cute story, I just think it doesn't quite fit into the humor category. ;)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    Agrona

    Our city is one of the highest unemployed which my honey are part of those statistics...I was reaching for a bit of silver llining so to speak. Thanks!
Comment from jmdg1954
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As with other stories... children and there innocence make for great stories...
I don't know if this is true or not, but all-in-all and very good entry into the contest..
Good luck,
John

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2010


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
    John,

    Thank you for the wonderful review. Part of it is very close to the truth...Thank you...Smiles to you,