Stories and Poems for the Holidays
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Valentine Day Fiasco"Holiday musings.
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Comment from Queenise
I got a good chuckle out of this one. It seems to be happening more and more these days, the husband leaving that is. Not the other parts. Good flow,dramatization,descriptions. Queenise
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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I got a good chuckle out of this one. It seems to be happening more and more these days, the husband leaving that is. Not the other parts. Good flow,dramatization,descriptions. Queenise
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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It is true so many of my friends have suffered heartbreak from their mates. I glad you got a chuckle. Thanks for the review and comments.
Beth
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Mine too. I only chuckled at the funny parts. Queenise
Comment from zydecosal
Oh my goodness! What a disaster that turned into a blessing. I can just imagine the look of shock on her face when all this was taking place. You did a great job telling the story and tell your friend to push her ex into the pool. I don't understand how a husband, and her best friend, could do this, but it happens. Selfish fits the bill.
Sally
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Oh my goodness! What a disaster that turned into a blessing. I can just imagine the look of shock on her face when all this was taking place. You did a great job telling the story and tell your friend to push her ex into the pool. I don't understand how a husband, and her best friend, could do this, but it happens. Selfish fits the bill.
Sally
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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wow!,Thanks ever so much for the coveted six. It really appreciate the review and nice comment. Her ex-husband didn't survive long after that episode. He had a heart attack and died.
Beth
Comment from patwannabe
Beth, I'm having trouble with my computer, so until my new part comes, I don't trust it. I'll do my best.
This was an incredible story. Oh, my goodness, what a disaster.You did a wonderful job portraying it.
I'm going to make some comments here that really have nothing to do with your story, but when I read that she was so concerned about Valentine's Day, and not the absolute fact that her husband had left her, I happened to realize how much emphasis is beng put on Valentine's Day everywhere. The way it's going, it's going to rival Christmas. Seemed like every other sentence at the Olympics was "Valentine's Day" (exaggerating, of course). What's the big deal? The flower industry? Just seems kinda odd. Wonder where "they" are going with this. These statements are all rhetorical, just thinking out loud.
Loved your story, no revisions needed, no spag, good structure. pat
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Beth, I'm having trouble with my computer, so until my new part comes, I don't trust it. I'll do my best.
This was an incredible story. Oh, my goodness, what a disaster.You did a wonderful job portraying it.
I'm going to make some comments here that really have nothing to do with your story, but when I read that she was so concerned about Valentine's Day, and not the absolute fact that her husband had left her, I happened to realize how much emphasis is beng put on Valentine's Day everywhere. The way it's going, it's going to rival Christmas. Seemed like every other sentence at the Olympics was "Valentine's Day" (exaggerating, of course). What's the big deal? The flower industry? Just seems kinda odd. Wonder where "they" are going with this. These statements are all rhetorical, just thinking out loud.
Loved your story, no revisions needed, no spag, good structure. pat
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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You are right. Valentine Day is the biggest for the Candy and card industry. We had breakfast with our kids at Cracker Barrel. That was our celebration.
Beth
Comment from lola29
Oh my gosh, what a scary thing to have happened. But, at least she was compensated, as you say, very richly. I'm glad she's getting a convertible.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Oh my gosh, what a scary thing to have happened. But, at least she was compensated, as you say, very richly. I'm glad she's getting a convertible.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the review and nice comments.
Happy Valentine Day!
Beth
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
A bright coloured convertible seems to me like a much better deal than George anyway.
This is the sort fo scenario that one could laugh at later, but at the time actually sounds quite horrendous.
Well told.
Juliette
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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A bright coloured convertible seems to me like a much better deal than George anyway.
This is the sort fo scenario that one could laugh at later, but at the time actually sounds quite horrendous.
Well told.
Juliette
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the review and the nice comments. I agree. I think she came out better off.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is hilarious. I laughed and laughed. It was either that or cry. Similar things happen to me all the time, especially raising four sons. If you don't laugh, somebody would probably lose their life.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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This is hilarious. I laughed and laughed. It was either that or cry. Similar things happen to me all the time, especially raising four sons. If you don't laugh, somebody would probably lose their life.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thanks for the review. I love your comments. LOL. I know exactly what you mean. I'm usually writing about my own misfortunes brought on by my four kids.
Beth
Comment from missy98writer
BethShelby,
Great story for this Valentine's Day. Not everyone's February 14 is hearts and flowers. I like the way you retold your friends bad day. I found myself laughing at her mishap. I think Jeannie has the better end of the deal, a cheating man for a new car. This story is proof that fact is stranger than fiction. You picked great art work of Smurphgirl. I like to use anything she does. Angelheart, and Visionary Poet also do awe inspiring art work. I enjoyed reading your non-fiction story.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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BethShelby,
Great story for this Valentine's Day. Not everyone's February 14 is hearts and flowers. I like the way you retold your friends bad day. I found myself laughing at her mishap. I think Jeannie has the better end of the deal, a cheating man for a new car. This story is proof that fact is stranger than fiction. You picked great art work of Smurphgirl. I like to use anything she does. Angelheart, and Visionary Poet also do awe inspiring art work. I enjoyed reading your non-fiction story.
Melissa.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Melissa, Thank you so much for the lovely review. I have used Smurphgirl's work a lot as well as Angelheart. I don't remember if I've used Visionary Poet's work. I'll check it out.
Happy Valentine Day!
Beth
Comment from Mrs Jones
Truth is always more fascinating than fiction. LOL. This actually was funny. I like the calm way she just let the car roll. Well told Beth.
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Truth is always more fascinating than fiction. LOL. This actually was funny. I like the calm way she just let the car roll. Well told Beth.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Rose, Thank you so much for the review. I thought it was funny when she told the story.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from WRITER1
At least everything turned out for the best. A new life new planters I could live with that. After all who wants to sit and stare at those things he built.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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At least everything turned out for the best. A new life new planters I could live with that. After all who wants to sit and stare at those things he built.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you for the review and the nice comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from Belinda
Thank goodness it did not happen to you, Beth. Not that I don't symphatize with your friend. You describe the happening so vividly, and it is such a fiasco. You are such a skillful writer.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank goodness it did not happen to you, Beth. Not that I don't symphatize with your friend. You describe the happening so vividly, and it is such a fiasco. You are such a skillful writer.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2010
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Thank you Belinda, I really appreciate your review and comments.
Cheers,
Beth