POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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28 total reviews
Comment from MAMONIA
I've never seen such a work before, but to be sure, I am delighted to see what you have done with this poem. The picture with the words express everything. You left nothing for chance. It is beautiful and I loved your wonderful poem. Congrats!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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I've never seen such a work before, but to be sure, I am delighted to see what you have done with this poem. The picture with the words express everything. You left nothing for chance. It is beautiful and I loved your wonderful poem. Congrats!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Mamonia,
I am flattered that you enjoyed this poem. Thank you so much for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
One of the beautiful today'1 great symmetry and rhyming. Awesome treat to read.
Take hold my hand,
Together, let's expand our boundaries[ love them]
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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One of the beautiful today'1 great symmetry and rhyming. Awesome treat to read.
Take hold my hand,
Together, let's expand our boundaries[ love them]
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Kashif,
I am glad you connected with this poem. Hand in hand, we can all make this a better world. Smiles, Carol
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Thanks for the kind review and beautiful comments:)
With best wishes
K
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I do not know the rules of the tetractys poems, but this line 'Take hold my hand,' to me is missing a word, if it's not, then to me it sounds forced. You are the poet not me, so if I'm wrong, I'm sorry.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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I do not know the rules of the tetractys poems, but this line 'Take hold my hand,' to me is missing a word, if it's not, then to me it sounds forced. You are the poet not me, so if I'm wrong, I'm sorry.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010
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Barbara,
I am limited in syllables so I had to word it that way...a little poetic license. Thanks...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sally Carter
Love this one Carol.
The whole idea you have used is clever - growing, expanding with every line. Then, in that last line, the natural break after the internal rhyme of "hand" and "expand", those additional words which emphasise the human potential to stretch just that little bit further.
I would not have believed so much could have been said and implied in just 13 words. I applaud you!
Kind regards. Sally
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Love this one Carol.
The whole idea you have used is clever - growing, expanding with every line. Then, in that last line, the natural break after the internal rhyme of "hand" and "expand", those additional words which emphasise the human potential to stretch just that little bit further.
I would not have believed so much could have been said and implied in just 13 words. I applaud you!
Kind regards. Sally
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Sally,
Thank you for your wonderful thoughts and comments. It's always a pleasure to know someone else enjoys my poetry...regardless how simple it is. smiles, Carol
Comment from bayoupoet
This poem is very lovely, Carol with so much said in so few words. It is a pleasure to read for you and I wish you the best of Luck in the contest!
Blessings,
sandra
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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This poem is very lovely, Carol with so much said in so few words. It is a pleasure to read for you and I wish you the best of Luck in the contest!
Blessings,
sandra
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Sandra
Another vote of confidence from you, my friend...Thank you so much...Carol
Comment from AnnaLinda
Begin Again,
Your Tetractys is very inspiring and in great form! I has a great message and presentation. I especially liked your
ending line and in particular these last 3 words:
"expand our boundaries"
Linda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Begin Again,
Your Tetractys is very inspiring and in great form! I has a great message and presentation. I especially liked your
ending line and in particular these last 3 words:
"expand our boundaries"
Linda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Linda
Thank you so much for reading, enjoying and offering such nice comments about my little poem. Smiles, Carol
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You are welcome!
Comment from flygirl254
Your poem made me smile. It evokes a sense of adventure and permission. I like that the person in the poem is not only giving the advice to "reach beyond your limits", but is also giving an invitation to become partnered in the endeavor, thus excluding loneliness from someone's life. I think this is a wonderful poem that gives a great message to those willing to listen. Good job and good luck in the contest my friend!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Your poem made me smile. It evokes a sense of adventure and permission. I like that the person in the poem is not only giving the advice to "reach beyond your limits", but is also giving an invitation to become partnered in the endeavor, thus excluding loneliness from someone's life. I think this is a wonderful poem that gives a great message to those willing to listen. Good job and good luck in the contest my friend!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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flygirl
Thank you...people have had different variations of what the poem means but mostly they get the idea...reaching out not only helps someone but it gives you something as well...either friendship or in love. Thank you for the wonderful review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Realist101
Hi Carol, this is great! I saw this photo and almost chose it for Sweet Linda's contest, but you have this perfectly matched, with your words and the picture "going hand in hand" :) "together" the key...Very enjoyable Carol!! Susan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hi Carol, this is great! I saw this photo and almost chose it for Sweet Linda's contest, but you have this perfectly matched, with your words and the picture "going hand in hand" :) "together" the key...Very enjoyable Carol!! Susan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Susan
Thank you so much for your generous comments and thoughts. I always appreciate hearing from you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from --Turtle.
I read this Tetractys, and thought it was inspirational, a good happy working together sort of feel. Good poem, good topic, solid presentation. I liked this, Carol, good job.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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I read this Tetractys, and thought it was inspirational, a good happy working together sort of feel. Good poem, good topic, solid presentation. I liked this, Carol, good job.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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turtle
Hurrah! Thanks for the good job! I appreciate it! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Carol ...
This is well written and attractively presented and, of course, your syllable count of 1-2-3-4-10 is as required for the Tetractys format.
There is much that could be read in and behind your well-chosen words and I certainly enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing this with us and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Hullo Carol ...
This is well written and attractively presented and, of course, your syllable count of 1-2-3-4-10 is as required for the Tetractys format.
There is much that could be read in and behind your well-chosen words and I certainly enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing this with us and I wish you well in the Contest.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2010
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Nanette.
Awesome...Glad you enjoyed my poetry...I really appreciate the kind comments. Carol