Shoes
a walk for love101 total reviews
Comment from storymama
This is interesting to read. To be honest, it sounds kind of like a country song and I kept expecting to hear music playing along with it. Perhaps a music video. Well done. God bless you.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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This is interesting to read. To be honest, it sounds kind of like a country song and I kept expecting to hear music playing along with it. Perhaps a music video. Well done. God bless you.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank U so much.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Irrelevant
You sum of the journey very well throughout and left me thinking that we sometimes have to press on, even if the shoes we're wearing aren't to our liking...lol. Just my impressions. I enjoyed this :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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You sum of the journey very well throughout and left me thinking that we sometimes have to press on, even if the shoes we're wearing aren't to our liking...lol. Just my impressions. I enjoyed this :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank u. And ur review certainly wasn't irrelevant.
Comment from Aussie
Interesting play with words. Searching for your soul mate. I thought your poem did swing along - just like walking. and I enjoyed your walk for love.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Interesting play with words. Searching for your soul mate. I thought your poem did swing along - just like walking. and I enjoyed your walk for love.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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I thank U much. Glad u enjoyed it.
Comment from RazberryBullet
I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the focus on and the repetion of 'she will open doors for me'.
I liked this line especially: How hard the wind blows
'pends on which way I'm walkin'. So true!!!...Built me some walls/she will open doors for me :)
Lovely!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the focus on and the repetion of 'she will open doors for me'.
I liked this line especially: How hard the wind blows
'pends on which way I'm walkin'. So true!!!...Built me some walls/she will open doors for me :)
Lovely!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Well, I must say I enjoyed ur review. Thank U so much.
Comment from PoetSpirit
And find her you will, it's never too late to walk for love. Beautifully written poem, great style.
Best wishes, Emily
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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And find her you will, it's never too late to walk for love. Beautifully written poem, great style.
Best wishes, Emily
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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I thank U from my heart.
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you're welcome
Best wishes, Emily
Comment from The Underdog
This was a rather interesting poem, Victor, with a nice flow to it. I'm still not sure, though, if the title "Shoes" is the right one - it's not about shoes, is it?
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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This was a rather interesting poem, Victor, with a nice flow to it. I'm still not sure, though, if the title "Shoes" is the right one - it's not about shoes, is it?
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Im a deceptive little bugger. Thanks.
Comment from mountainwriter49
This is a very interesting and delightful poem of one's search for that one special person. I like the positive resolve of the poem's last four lines. Well written. Thanks for sharing. -ray
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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This is a very interesting and delightful poem of one's search for that one special person. I like the positive resolve of the poem's last four lines. Well written. Thanks for sharing. -ray
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank U Ray. It's always nice when a fellow male writer likes the poetry.
Comment from bkrighter
Victor, great job. The poem has an earthy realism--a walkin' man, seeking her, but not waiting on her, the one who will open doors for him. Very nicely told with a comfortable rhythm.
I did wonder about the comma after "want to become what" but it did not affect my enjoyment of this piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Victor, great job. The poem has an earthy realism--a walkin' man, seeking her, but not waiting on her, the one who will open doors for him. Very nicely told with a comfortable rhythm.
I did wonder about the comma after "want to become what" but it did not affect my enjoyment of this piece.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank U Steve, and I may change that.
Comment from skye
This is well written, with powerful images of love and loss, longing and the will to seek for what is lost.
The lines are short, easy to read, making the reader jump from line to line to get to the ending.
Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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This is well written, with powerful images of love and loss, longing and the will to seek for what is lost.
The lines are short, easy to read, making the reader jump from line to line to get to the ending.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank U Salt Lake City!
Comment from Plotosaurus
A nice way of capturing the search for a soulmate. The poem flows well and there is good visual imagery throughout. Also could use of the vernacular. Best of luck with your writing and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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A nice way of capturing the search for a soulmate. The poem flows well and there is good visual imagery throughout. Also could use of the vernacular. Best of luck with your writing and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank U so much, I do appreciate it.
