In The Attic
childhood dreams15 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
The "dreams" may be "gone" but the poet can remember the "keeper of childhood dreams" and write about them and bring them back for others to enjoy. Congratulations on the win!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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The "dreams" may be "gone" but the poet can remember the "keeper of childhood dreams" and write about them and bring them back for others to enjoy. Congratulations on the win!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you. Because you reviewed this, I went and reread it. Noticed that my photo is gone, so need to find a new picture. I enjoyed writing it but the picture "made" the piece.
Comment from bard owl
How sad when childhood is left behind. Your imagery is terrific and I can see why you placed in this contest. I have some toys that my grandchildren have outgrown and it is sad, but life goes on and offers new beginnings in another stage. Thoughtful read, Sherry. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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How sad when childhood is left behind. Your imagery is terrific and I can see why you placed in this contest. I have some toys that my grandchildren have outgrown and it is sad, but life goes on and offers new beginnings in another stage. Thoughtful read, Sherry. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Hi LInda,
Sorry it took me so long to thank you for your kind review and congratulations on my poem, In The Attic. My sister (mamadeb) & I have not been on site much lately. We started a freelance writing business in December and are getting so much work that there is little time left for our "fun" writing :(
I did manage to post one flash fiction today - first in a long time, but hopefully not the last.
I did want to get back with you and say thanks for reviewing.
Have a great afternoon - sherry
Comment from Annmuma
This work made me a little sad!! But it's certainly easy to see why it won the contest. Excellent presentation and profound thought. Congrats. ann
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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This work made me a little sad!! But it's certainly easy to see why it won the contest. Excellent presentation and profound thought. Congrats. ann
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Hi Ann - Sorry it took me so long to thank you for your kind review and congratulations on my poem, In The Attic. My sister (mamadeb) & I have not been on site much lately. We started a freelance writing business and are getting so much work that there is little time left for our "fun" writing :(
I did manage to post one flash fiction today - first in a long time, but hopefully not the last.
I did want to get back with you and say thanks for reviewing.
Have a great afternoon - sherry
Comment from Realist101
Hi Sherry, congratulations! I love your poem, it is so reminisent. I need to dig around my mothers attice and look at my old toys...thanks for jogging my memory.Susan
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Hi Sherry, congratulations! I love your poem, it is so reminisent. I need to dig around my mothers attice and look at my old toys...thanks for jogging my memory.Susan
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Hi Susan - Sorry it took me so long to thank you for your kind review and congratulations on my poem, In The Attic. My sister (mamadeb) & I have not been on site much lately. We started a freelance writing business in December and are getting so much work that there is little time left for our "fun" writing :(
I did manage to post one flash fiction today - first in a long time, but hopefully not the last.
I did want to get back with you and say thanks for reviewing.
Have a great afternoon - sherry
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Hi there, you are welcome! What do you do as freelance writing? Sounds like a good business. I sure wish you all the best Sherry!! :) Susan
Comment from el twelve
the poem is suppose to be four lines not five. it all
flows other than the dreams gone at the end. it may be
for effect but didn't flow. thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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the poem is suppose to be four lines not five. it all
flows other than the dreams gone at the end. it may be
for effect but didn't flow. thanks for sharing
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Hi el twelve - thanks for taking the time to read my poem. It would be nice, however, if you would take a look at the rules of the contest before "reviewing" - you are TOTALLY wrong - per the contest rules:
"Line 1 - 2 syllables.
Line 2 - 4 syllables.
Line 3 - 6 syllables.
Line 4 - 8 syllables.
Line 5 - 2 syllables. "
FIVE lines, not the four you said in your review. Sorry that you didn't like it and didn't read the rules - sherry
Comment from RADIO
Love the thoughts of this.
Toys and dreams in the attic
that we cannot throw out.
Thank God there's such a little space
to climb in. My wife can't make it
and that's good, she's one of those
throw everything away people.
Keep eating donuts.
Radio
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Love the thoughts of this.
Toys and dreams in the attic
that we cannot throw out.
Thank God there's such a little space
to climb in. My wife can't make it
and that's good, she's one of those
throw everything away people.
Keep eating donuts.
Radio
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Radio, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Have a Merry Christmas - sherry
Comment from missy98writer
sherrygreywolf,
You've written an enjoyable poem "In the Attic" for the cinquain poetry contest. The syllable count is perfect. Your cinquain conjured up searching in the attic to find "keeper of childhood dreams". I liked the art work and color scheme you used. A five star cinquain poem and a great entry for the contest.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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sherrygreywolf,
You've written an enjoyable poem "In the Attic" for the cinquain poetry contest. The syllable count is perfect. Your cinquain conjured up searching in the attic to find "keeper of childhood dreams". I liked the art work and color scheme you used. A five star cinquain poem and a great entry for the contest.
Melissa.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, missy98writer, for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you liked it.
Have a Merry Christmas - sherry
Comment from Angelite
Its short and sweet and a little sad, but personally I see it as a contradiction. The dreams are safe in the toy box and whether they are hidden under layers of cobwebs and dust the dreams are still there waiting to be picked up again one day.Some dreams just become memories and i wish you good ones.
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Its short and sweet and a little sad, but personally I see it as a contradiction. The dreams are safe in the toy box and whether they are hidden under layers of cobwebs and dust the dreams are still there waiting to be picked up again one day.Some dreams just become memories and i wish you good ones.
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Comment Written 22-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, Angelite, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Dreams and the memories of them are not quite the same thing ... I had bunches of dreams (both as a child and later) that I am just no longer able to acheive. Things like age, lack of talent or opportunity, etc can sometimes get in the way. That is what I was trying to get across. Sorry you didn't like it
Have a Merry Christmas anyway - sherry
Comment from unbridledspirit
Very nice poem. Says what many people feel when they look back on childhood memorabilia and think about what they once thought that they would do as a child but which never came to pass as an adult. Some look back on "dreams gone" with regret! Nice work.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Very nice poem. Says what many people feel when they look back on childhood memorabilia and think about what they once thought that they would do as a child but which never came to pass as an adult. Some look back on "dreams gone" with regret! Nice work.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, unbridledspirit, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. You picked up on the thoughts I was trying to get across.
Have a Merry Christmas - sherry
Comment from RavenShrift
I really like this poem, and the accompanying picture is a nice touch. I think this is a theme that anyone can relate to. It's almost.... sad.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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I really like this poem, and the accompanying picture is a nice touch. I think this is a theme that anyone can relate to. It's almost.... sad.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2009
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Thanks, RavenShrift, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. I was aiming for a bit of melancholy.
Have a Merry Christmas - sherry