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Homeless Incarnation

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Comment from babylonia
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i'm so glad you were able to take care of your faith back then. i know it helped you in the long run. this is a wonderful story. i know you have given us bits and pieces of it before but one can never give the whole story in a small piece. best of luck with this one.
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2009
    Thank you for a very kind review. It did not win the contest.
reply by babylonia on 13-Dec-2009
    that's too bad but it is still very good.
Comment from Diny
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the most precious homeless child was christ-WOW well said- and felt- and what a joy to know others think of the homeless that way too as precious- thanks for this one this year-Di

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
    Thanks for a great review; I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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Great write and entry into the contest, Al. A good, solid piece of work. I like the charitable and compassionate tone of the writing...though many things stir my heart, being homeless is right up there near the top. I think you have captured well the spirit if Chistmas here. Good luck in the contest. Love, Susanne

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2009
    Thank for your review; I didn't win the contest.
Comment from Sasha
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This is a lovely story and a true example of the spirit of Christmas. I like the simplicity and gentle nature of this story. Simple but so true and something we all need to think about when we are sitting in our warm homes this Christmas. Very well written.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Thank you for understanding what I wanted to convey and for a good review.
Comment from Jordan Rose
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thanks for sharing this story. It was nicely written and the content was wonderful. I love the connection between working with the homeless and Mary & Joseph's search for lodging. Good luck with the contest. Jordan

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Yes, that has always been preeminent in my mind, soul, and faith. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from LauraKatherine
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Well written essay. I really like the parallel between Mary and Joseph's homelessness on the night of Christ's birth, and the homeless people at the shelter. If only there had been homeless shelters in Bethlehem...

It seemed to me that your work there was not just for those particular homeless ones, but (symbolically) for the Virgin and St. Joseph, too. How beautiful to think that you sang carols, much like the angels heralded Christ's birth.

If I had one minor quibble about the essay, it's that the first paragraph is a little lengthy. Still, it is necessary for setting up the situation you found yourself in each Christmas Eve, so that's just me being overly picky. (I tend to be picky quite often.)

Later that night, when the Infant Christ was placed in the Manger during Mass, I thought of those homeless people and how God the Son especially loves them, for His life on earth started out as one of them. (wonderful observation...as Jesus said later, the Son of Man has no place to lay his head.)

Great essay. Best of luck in the contest. I really enjoyed this! LK

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Thanks for a good review. Yes, I am still learning to write short prose works; I tend to be verbose. Writing haiku has cured that of me in poetry, but I am still working on prose. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from adewpearl
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At the daytime shelter where I serve breakfast, there is a 15-20 minute "service" immediately following breakfast time, and so many of the people there stay for this voluntary option and love to sing hymns and listen to the devotions most attentively. I believe this spiritual food is just as important to some as the pastries and cereals we serve. This story is most thoughtful, Alvin. Brooke

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Yes, both one's body and soul need nourishment. Thank you for understanding so well what I wanted to convey.
Comment from Annmuma
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What a selfless way to spend those hours - working in a homeless shelter. In so many ways,though non tangible, we are all homeless without a real love in our lives. Good luck. ann

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Thanks for understanding well what I wanted to convey and for a good revieew.
Comment from kingskid
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Your entry brought back many memories for me. We use to go to Midnight mass when I was a teenager. It was really such a special service. I continued to go during my early adult years, but then we went to a different church, so haven't been for a good few years. We go to the traditional church service on christmas day.
Loved your account.
Blessings and good luck
kingskid

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Thanks for a good review; I am glad the poem had an anamnestic effect on you.
Comment from tteach
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I've always thought that you were a sweet, caring man. No I know for sure, as Oprah might say.

I see the stories on TV, and I've thought about volunteering, but I've never followed through. I admire those who willingly give up "family" time to help those in need.

I did volunteer at a retirement home for several years. the seniors looked forward to those precious minutes that I was able to simply sit a "be" with them.

Your story is a true Christmas story.
terry

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2009
    Yes, I have done volunteering at a nursing home at well. It can be quite rewarding. Thanks for a great review.