Comment from anabelle

Excellent

This is fabulous, jmdg 1954. You've given the full last few issues of his life in just a few words. He's beyond caring now, so we may as well cheer! :-)

Best of luck in the contest.

Regards, anabelle

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009

thanks anabelle, John

Comment from pugdogy

Excellent

great job!!! this was a nice and humorous little poem. I enjoyed taking the time to read this. the picture you have chosen to use works perfectly. good luck in the contest and keep up the good job!!!

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009

Thank you pugdogy, John

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

jmdg1954,

This had a nice flow. I wish you the best in the contest.
The descriptive words you chose were very good.

I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009

Thanks Oatmeal for the kind review

Comment from Abba Lin

Excellent

Hi jmdg, lol that was cute and funny... It made me laugh out loud... You know I tried to come up with something witty, So heres mine.. I'm not going to post it because there will be so many better (like yours)! HERE LIES JOHN LONGGONE..HE AIN'T WHAT HE USED TO BE... Love Lin

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Lin, you should have entered the contest... thanks for those kind words John

Comment from Sally Carter

Excellent

Superb! Three cheers indeed for Marty, for inspiring this bit of fun. Still, I am glad he is imaginary. Good luck with this one in the contest.
Sally

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Thanks Sally

Comment from volunteer angel

Excellent

Now that's a sight that would make anyone laugh! Drunks can sure be funny! I wrote one about a cat with a beer and had a picture on it with the cat sitting with the remote in his hand and a beer beside him. LOL Great job!
V.A.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Thank you for those kind words.... John

Comment from ArtGal

Excellent

ROFL!!! So funny and I would certainly say that the beer did the poor guy in. I love, falling down drunk he just had his final beer, lol. Btw, my father, brother and nephew are all named Marty but none of them like beer! I enjoyed.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Thanks ArtGal... John

Comment from Melba

Exceptional

Embarassing way to go out, wearing your wife's brassiere. He should not climb a tree in his wives underwear while he's still drinking to much. Now he'll never enjoy another beer.

Good luck,
Melba

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Thats for sure, thank you John

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is a funny epitaph. You have done a good job. I hope you did well in the contest. I have been on fanstory for a year and consider myself a baby writer, come late to the field. I am happy with any votes, my goal is to win a contest.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

I've only been here 4 months and have LOTS to learn thanks for the kind words and being a fan, John

Comment from EXMAN. nffc

Excellent

Three cheers indeed! Good to see you are having some fun. Now that is a seriously drunk gentleman. What size was the brassiere I wonder?
Nice to catch up again jmdg.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2009

---

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009

Size doesn't matter they say??? thanks John