POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Sittin' an' a Rockin'"When I dabble at things.....
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Comment from Toller
I'm not a fan of blues music, but I liked your poem. It has good rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Great job and good luck in the contest!
Ashley
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2009
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I'm not a fan of blues music, but I liked your poem. It has good rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Great job and good luck in the contest!
Ashley
Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2009
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Toller
I thank you for appreciating the poem just for what it is...I wrote it and I'm not a fan of blues either. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Wow! You really did an amazing job with this bluesy song. You told a whole story and it all seemed to flow gracefully with ease. Well done. The best to you, my friend. Cheers, Whizpurr ^-^
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Wow! You really did an amazing job with this bluesy song. You told a whole story and it all seemed to flow gracefully with ease. Well done. The best to you, my friend. Cheers, Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
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Whizpurr
Thank you so much for the kind comments. I greatly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from fayesh
Really well executed lyrics that tell a story. I could almost hear a blue grass element to the words. This could do well with a band that has a banjo strumming along.
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Really well executed lyrics that tell a story. I could almost hear a blue grass element to the words. This could do well with a band that has a banjo strumming along.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
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fayesh
Thanks so much for your kind review. I greatly appreciate it.
Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from RonDye
I really like the first verse and choirs but the rest is a bit over done and sometimes not very original. The first one is great just try to stiffen up the rest.
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I really like the first verse and choirs but the rest is a bit over done and sometimes not very original. The first one is great just try to stiffen up the rest.
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
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Ron
Thank you for the review. You suggest it is not very original...Would you care to explain that?
Comment from LYLE
Begin Again,
I thought it was a good song lyric, perhaps a little more country than Blues, but what do I expect from a toothless
old drunk? But, evidently, the young lady saw something.
This is like reading O'Henry, with a twist at the end.
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2009
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Begin Again,
I thought it was a good song lyric, perhaps a little more country than Blues, but what do I expect from a toothless
old drunk? But, evidently, the young lady saw something.
This is like reading O'Henry, with a twist at the end.
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
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Lyle
I'm not sure who or what o"Henry is but I thank you for the kind words. Anything with a twist at the end should be okay.
Thanks for the review, Carol
Comment from Sloughi
A really great piece of writing. Well thought out and constructed. Maybe it is just me but as I read it I could hear the voice of Johnny Cash! Like I said maybe it is just me! Good luck in the competion and thank you for this pleasurable read
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A really great piece of writing. Well thought out and constructed. Maybe it is just me but as I read it I could hear the voice of Johnny Cash! Like I said maybe it is just me! Good luck in the competion and thank you for this pleasurable read
Comment Written 07-Oct-2009
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Sloughi
Another reader said the same thing...Myst be that toothless smile...Johnny Cash sang about a girl named sue, a car and one piece at a time, all those "just a little off" songs. And the writer is probably "Just a little off" too. Thanks for the review. CArol
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The pleasure was all mine!
Chrissie
Comment from Veoto
Wow! That was just awesome! I would absolutely love to hear this put to music. I can't find a single thing wrong with this piece. Keep up the amazing work.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2009
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Wow! That was just awesome! I would absolutely love to hear this put to music. I can't find a single thing wrong with this piece. Keep up the amazing work.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2009
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Veoto
Thanks for the encouragement. I appreciate the review. Carol
Comment from skye
Pure country... sad, filled with lost love, booze, depression, hunting, food, a new gal, and life again.
Your words could make somebody rich.... on the country circuit.
Very well done.
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Pure country... sad, filled with lost love, booze, depression, hunting, food, a new gal, and life again.
Your words could make somebody rich.... on the country circuit.
Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2009
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Skye
You think! It was just something that popped into my head. I don't know music and my dogs might howl if I tried to sing anymore...Frogs would even croak. Thanks so much for the review. CArol
Comment from jmyron
A prime example of 'this too shall pass.' in a country sort of way. Is it a true story? If so, good luck in your new relationship. Stop drinking though, it'll work out better. If it was fiction, ignore last comments.
John
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A prime example of 'this too shall pass.' in a country sort of way. Is it a true story? If so, good luck in your new relationship. Stop drinking though, it'll work out better. If it was fiction, ignore last comments.
John
Comment Written 06-Oct-2009
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John
I am not and have not ever been a toothless person sitting on a porch drinking booze...not even in my nightmares. Thanks for the review...I think! Smiles, Carol
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Good to hear.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
IMO, you've written a great little song. You don't normally see happy endings in a blues song, but I like the way this one turns out. Have you got music for it, too?
Good luck in the contest - sherry
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2009
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IMO, you've written a great little song. You don't normally see happy endings in a blues song, but I like the way this one turns out. Have you got music for it, too?
Good luck in the contest - sherry
Comment Written 06-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2009
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Sherry
You got to be kidding. I didn't even know what I was doing when I wrote it. Music...not even a hum. Thanks for the review. Carol