POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "If Tomorrow Never Comes"When I dabble at things.....
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Comment from Laidy
wow, this was an amazing write. i liked the throughness of your words and the impression it puts on the readers mind. hope you all get through this rough time.
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wow, this was an amazing write. i liked the throughness of your words and the impression it puts on the readers mind. hope you all get through this rough time.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Laidy
Thank you for your kind and gracious words. I greatly appreciate them..Carol
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Begin again.
I am so sorry to hear about your Mums diagnoses, most family's have been touched bye Cancer and most of us can understand the pain, worry that it can cause.
I thought your poem expressed feelings so very well. I love your opening verse it is strange how such a shock can make us see things in quite a new way, as if seeing for the first time, especially when given hope. I remember after a heart problem a few years back (I did not expect to recover, however thankfully I did)I made a short flight for a holiday, up in the clouds it was as if I had never flown be4....I was over whealmed bye the beauty.
My thoughts are with your mum, your self and your family.
This lovely poem was full of emotion and expressed hope and faith with great clarity.
Steve
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Dear Begin again.
I am so sorry to hear about your Mums diagnoses, most family's have been touched bye Cancer and most of us can understand the pain, worry that it can cause.
I thought your poem expressed feelings so very well. I love your opening verse it is strange how such a shock can make us see things in quite a new way, as if seeing for the first time, especially when given hope. I remember after a heart problem a few years back (I did not expect to recover, however thankfully I did)I made a short flight for a holiday, up in the clouds it was as if I had never flown be4....I was over whealmed bye the beauty.
My thoughts are with your mum, your self and your family.
This lovely poem was full of emotion and expressed hope and faith with great clarity.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Steve
Thank you so much for your kind and gracious review. I appreiate it very much. Carol
Comment from Joan E.
I am sorry to learn of your mother's recurring illness and hope that writing this poem brought you some solace. I always admire the multi-word acrostic; its length adds to the difficulty of the challenge, but you seemed to handle it with ease, and in rhyme no less. I also admired your "door" and "battle cry" metaphors and your personification of "cancer" and "sorrow" along with your declaration of faith. I wish you and your family strength in this difficult time.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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I am sorry to learn of your mother's recurring illness and hope that writing this poem brought you some solace. I always admire the multi-word acrostic; its length adds to the difficulty of the challenge, but you seemed to handle it with ease, and in rhyme no less. I also admired your "door" and "battle cry" metaphors and your personification of "cancer" and "sorrow" along with your declaration of faith. I wish you and your family strength in this difficult time.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Joan
Thank you so much for your kind and gracious words. We were told this afternoon that the doctor believes it is some type of a cluster and has not spread as far as they can tell. Removal will be done as an outpatient (Can you believe that?) They will cut about 5 inches on her upper right chest above her breast. I am simply amazed. Talking to him today (And he is a great doctor, really patient friendly) he was really calm, almost unconcerned. Nothing to worry about he said. Easy for him! But it was very encouraging and I will think only good thoughts. Thanks so much...Carol
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How remarkable that the surgery can be done as an outpatient and that her doctor is so confident. My husband basically had a radical mastectomy when he was twelve to remove a melanoma, and here he is over 50 years later with no recurrence. That was then with limited knowledge and methods, and today with modern medicine your mother can expect such a good outcome. I'm glad you can rest a little easier.
-Joan
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I've never heard of such a thing so I am skeptical. I really would like her to get another opinion. But my daughter is a physcician's assistant and assures me that is it is this cancer that the cells remain in a bundle or comething like that, he probably can just cut it out. I shall place my trust in God and pray the doctor also puts his in our Lord's hands. Have a great day. Carol
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I am sure her doctor's confidence comes from his knowledge and experience and that he would never encourage you and your family if he had any doubts, because that could lead to malpractice. Rest assured that your mother is in good hands. -Joan
Comment from medicnate
I am truly sorry to hear the news about your mom. This is a great poem, very interesting to read and clever in wording. There is a nice pace to it and each line draws the reader to the next. Once again, great job.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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I am truly sorry to hear the news about your mom. This is a great poem, very interesting to read and clever in wording. There is a nice pace to it and each line draws the reader to the next. Once again, great job.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
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medicnate
Thank you so much for your kind comments. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from LadyBrendragon
You are very far from slaughtering this. It has a slightly irregular meter which gives a sharper, biting feel to it which goes well the emotions that you are conveying. Nicely done.
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You are very far from slaughtering this. It has a slightly irregular meter which gives a sharper, biting feel to it which goes well the emotions that you are conveying. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
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Lady Brendragon
Thank you so much for the kind review. Meter I have to leave totally to some one else...but I wrote from my heart. I am glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from Mischief's Momma
This is a lovely poem Carol, and I am sorry about your Mom's recent diagnosis.
this was a long acrostic on a lovely phrase - well done. The only matter on form is that acrostics are not supposed to rhyme I think.
Hold onto the One you have found, He will never fail you :)
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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This is a lovely poem Carol, and I am sorry about your Mom's recent diagnosis.
this was a long acrostic on a lovely phrase - well done. The only matter on form is that acrostics are not supposed to rhyme I think.
Hold onto the One you have found, He will never fail you :)
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Sharon
I don't know the rules so I just wrote what I felt. It's okay even if they don't accept it...I liked it. Thanks for the review and kind comments. Carol
Comment from Sloughi
I absolutely loved this piece of writing. The context held me so strongly and the rhyme and rythem was perfect. Thank you so much for this pleasurable read
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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I absolutely loved this piece of writing. The context held me so strongly and the rhyme and rythem was perfect. Thank you so much for this pleasurable read
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Sloughi
Thank you for your kind words and for enjoying my poem. I greatly appreciate it.
Carol
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
You may not consider yourself a true poet, but this poem is terrific.
Not only an acrostic with a great subject, but you've also made it rhyme, and so it flows like a traditional poem.
I'm very sorry to hear about your mother and I hope all will be well. In the meantime, good luck in the contest with this incredibly well written and moving piece.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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You may not consider yourself a true poet, but this poem is terrific.
Not only an acrostic with a great subject, but you've also made it rhyme, and so it flows like a traditional poem.
I'm very sorry to hear about your mother and I hope all will be well. In the meantime, good luck in the contest with this incredibly well written and moving piece.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Kat
Thank you so much for the encouragement. I always feel comfortable when writing my stories, but poems and all the rules scare me. Or maybe it's just because I expose so much of my emotions in the poems. Thank you for the kind review. It is greatly appreciated. CArol
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I love this poem. It is very emotive and contains a message of hope, no matter what the situation is. The acrostic worked very well. kudos
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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I love this poem. It is very emotive and contains a message of hope, no matter what the situation is. The acrostic worked very well. kudos
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Perp
I am so glad that my poem touched you as it touched me. The purpose of writing is for others to enjoy. I am glad you did. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
A true poet I am not and I have probably slaughtered the proper construction of this poem...suggestions for its improvement are welcomed. Never cut yourself down. You are a wonderful poet and I love reading your work, it brightens my day. I will pray for your mother. I'm trying to decide on my answer for the PM, my time is tight. I'm trying to find a way to do it. You are important to me.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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A true poet I am not and I have probably slaughtered the proper construction of this poem...suggestions for its improvement are welcomed. Never cut yourself down. You are a wonderful poet and I love reading your work, it brightens my day. I will pray for your mother. I'm trying to decide on my answer for the PM, my time is tight. I'm trying to find a way to do it. You are important to me.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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Barbara
Thanks of r the morale booster. Don't worry about the PM if you are busy. You can help me whenever I get it finished and posted on the site. Or maybe when I finish you can do a quick read...suggestions on story line. Just don't try to cram into your busy schedule. Thanks so much. Carol