Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Buried At Sea"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
38 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
just a short story with a very good ending for the main person in this write. For she accomplished her goal. Leaving behind what she believed that tortured her.This was well written and a pleasure to write a review for... John
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009
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just a short story with a very good ending for the main person in this write. For she accomplished her goal. Leaving behind what she believed that tortured her.This was well written and a pleasure to write a review for... John
Comment Written 26-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009
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John
Thanks for reading this piece of flash fiction. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Smiling at you Carol
Comment from Slush Pile
[Smiling, Carrie started the golf cart and drove away. It was a day for new beginnings.]
Yeah, but heck, I think I would have kept the porsche!
Smiles :-)
Slush Pile
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009
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[Smiling, Carrie started the golf cart and drove away. It was a day for new beginnings.]
Yeah, but heck, I think I would have kept the porsche!
Smiles :-)
Slush Pile
Comment Written 26-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2009
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Slush Pie
I struggled with sending the Porsche over the side but then I would have had to stand there and toss each thing over...Besides Carrie had enough money...She'd probably feel real good buying herself a new one. Smiles Carol
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh, this is really excellent reading. So clever that you kept the punch line till the end - had me completely fooled. Go Carrie!! And I don't think I would have guessed this was a "words" challenge without the author notes. Fluent writing that really caught my attention from the first word, and didn't spot any spags. Sally
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Oh, this is really excellent reading. So clever that you kept the punch line till the end - had me completely fooled. Go Carrie!! And I don't think I would have guessed this was a "words" challenge without the author notes. Fluent writing that really caught my attention from the first word, and didn't spot any spags. Sally
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Sally So glad you enjoyed this little story. It was fun to write. Thanks for the review. CArol
Comment from BJean
This is a good flash fiction story that really portrays abandonment and those emotions. Starting over is so necessary one way or another. Good job Jean
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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This is a good flash fiction story that really portrays abandonment and those emotions. Starting over is so necessary one way or another. Good job Jean
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Jean
Thanks so much for reading my little story. Appreciate it. Have a great day. Sending a smile your way. :) Carol
Comment from Sarabran
an outstanding read. I really enjoyed reading this flash fiction story, You did such a wonderful job with it. The imaginary was perfect. I can just imagine the emotions that this woman was feeling.. Sarabran
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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an outstanding read. I really enjoyed reading this flash fiction story, You did such a wonderful job with it. The imaginary was perfect. I can just imagine the emotions that this woman was feeling.. Sarabran
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Sarabran
Thank you for the awesome review. My character connected with you and I am so glad. Thanks and have a great day!
Sending you a smile :) Carol
Comment from AnnaLinda
Begin Again,
Your "Buried at Sea" story seemed so carefree and then, bingo, reality hits hard. You have mastered the contest requirements and in the process you have created a very picturesque piece. Complete with 'raging water,' crumbling earth (hers)and you did not disappoint us; you have slipped in your 'new beginnings' of hope.
This is so well done,
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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Begin Again,
Your "Buried at Sea" story seemed so carefree and then, bingo, reality hits hard. You have mastered the contest requirements and in the process you have created a very picturesque piece. Complete with 'raging water,' crumbling earth (hers)and you did not disappoint us; you have slipped in your 'new beginnings' of hope.
This is so well done,
SweetLinda
Comment Written 24-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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SweetLInda
I am pleased that you enjoyed the little story. It was fun to write. Thanks again for the kind review.
Carol
Comment from MJMuraco
Your story has a lot to say in a short version. You did a great job creating the emotion and the ending was positive. Nice job and good entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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Your story has a lot to say in a short version. You did a great job creating the emotion and the ending was positive. Nice job and good entry for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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MJMuraco
Thanks for reading and reviewing this short story. I appreciate it. Carol
Comment from jodim
I love the way you built up the plot to have a happy ending, and then the surprise. Excellent writing, enjoyable and I didn't spot any mistakes. Good luck! jodim
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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I love the way you built up the plot to have a happy ending, and then the surprise. Excellent writing, enjoyable and I didn't spot any mistakes. Good luck! jodim
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2009
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Jo
Thanks so much for the kind comments. I greatly appreciate them Carol
Comment from Belinda
What a waste... that's my materialistic side of me speaking. But in a rage, might be it is understandable for this woman to throw everything away to really start a new life. Interesting story...
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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What a waste... that's my materialistic side of me speaking. But in a rage, might be it is understandable for this woman to throw everything away to really start a new life. Interesting story...
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Belinda
No way could I personally do it in real life...Sell it...I'd need the money!! Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from adewpearl
Wow, I bet that guy wished he had waited a bit longer to have his indiscretions found out!! She not only pushed his car off the cliff but all his other precious belongings. Only difference between her and me is that I would have sold all that stuff to fund my own fun! LOL This is an excellent story that stays within the word limit and uses the required words seamlessly. Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Wow, I bet that guy wished he had waited a bit longer to have his indiscretions found out!! She not only pushed his car off the cliff but all his other precious belongings. Only difference between her and me is that I would have sold all that stuff to fund my own fun! LOL This is an excellent story that stays within the word limit and uses the required words seamlessly. Brooke
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Brooke That is so funny! Belinda just told me that was such a waste and I said personally I would have sold it and kept the money....Wonderful! Thanks for the laugh and the review. Carol
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You know the end of The Titanic where the old woman throws the multimillion dollar jewels into the ocean? I still think that was the single stupidest move in film history!!!!!
