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Comment from Suzie B
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Wonderful Carol...this piece was perfect..i understood his need to destroy the one thing that marred the beauty of his memory. Well done again.
Hugs my friend.
Suzie

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Suzie

    Once again, I must tell you how much I appreciate that you understood why he had to destroy the house. There have been many who have not. I am so happy that you got it!!!

    Thanks again

    Carol
Comment from c_lucas
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It would be very healing to destroy anything that reminded you of pain and hurt. Unfortunately ridding yourself of the painful memories is virtually impossible. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Charlie

    Thanks for the review. He was taking the thorns from the rose garden and leaving the beauty. Guess that's why it's fun to write...It doesn't always have to conform to life. Carol
reply by c_lucas on 21-Sep-2009
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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You did an excellent job. That must have been a horrible place for that child. I can't even begin to imagine how it must have hurt, to burn it like that. You did a wonderful job with the emotion and using the words. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Barbara

    Thank you..you have redeemed me. Some wondered why he would burn the house. I looked at it as if he was removing the thorns from his rose garden. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from Sunie617
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What started as beautiful scenery later sent chills up and down my spine. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Very well written, look forward to maore of your work.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Sunie

    Glad you enjoyed the story and that you were surprised withthe ending. Makes reading more interesting I think. Thanks for the kind review. CArol
reply by Sunie617 on 21-Sep-2009
    You are very welcome.
Comment from lola29
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Carol, you've written another fabulous story with a surprise ending. I always enjoy reading your work. You are such a professional in every way.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Sweet Lola

    You flatter me so....Shhh (keep it up)...it will be our secret! I decided he needed to destroy the thorns and just keep the beautiful solitude of the rose garden. Glad you like it! Take care. Carol
Comment from Belinda
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We (at least me) cannot predict what disappointment and hatred can urge someone to do. So... I was aghast reading the ending. You always manage to surprise me, Carol...

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Belinda

    I think he was thinking that destroying the evil or removing the thorns from the roses so to speak would leave the peaceful garden and the pleasant memories. Thanks for the kind review. CArol
reply by Belinda on 21-Sep-2009
    Seems that I missed that nuance... sorry.
Comment from anne1204
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Wow. So Sad everyone is writing sad stories. They are good but sad. Very good descriptions of places and emotions. I enjoyed reading it. Anne 1204

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Anne

    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I felt that he was putting closer to the pain. Taking the thorns from the rose garden so to speak. Leaving only peace and solitude. Thanks again Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
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Wouldn't we all love to do exactly that to the places that carry those horrid memories. I know that I would. I thought this was a wonderful piece.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

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    Joy

    Thanks so much for the kind review. I figured he wanted to remove the thorns from the rose garden he found so much peace in. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Serri
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Sad story, nice use of the words given for the contest. I especially liked "breach the peace he found here." From a peaceful place, returning to a painful place, all in one setting was told in simple language with a powerful message about what it sometimes takes to heal.

Picture entails grief, as well. Loved this, great job, good luck in the ocntest! Serri

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Serri Greatly appreciate you kind comments and review of my story. Figured he needed to remove the thorns from the rose garden, I guess. Thanks so much. Carol
Comment from SherryHo
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A very well written story. Complete and detailed in so few words. Pain oozes from every word.

You are a gifted story teller. Good luck in the prompt!

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Sherry

    I am humbled by your gracious response. Thank you so much for enjoying and appreciating my story. Carol