Foxtales From The Front Porch
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The A-Team Cake and Old Buster Dog"Stories told from the heart
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Comment from hotstuff
This is such a lovely story. What fond memories you have and it brought back loads for me too. Those were the days when my kids were little, such a joy. How time flies.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2010
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This is such a lovely story. What fond memories you have and it brought back loads for me too. Those were the days when my kids were little, such a joy. How time flies.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2010
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Thanks! Drive-in Banshees is another recollection. You can scroll down my portfolio to the bottom and hit search to find this. Enjoy!
Comment from Mastery
An absolutely wonderful story here, foxtale...It is good because it's true, but moreover in the way it is written. The description of the cake as ordered is priceless. Good parents saved the day too.. love it. If I had a six, it would be yours, foxtale.. admire your talent....Bob
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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An absolutely wonderful story here, foxtale...It is good because it's true, but moreover in the way it is written. The description of the cake as ordered is priceless. Good parents saved the day too.. love it. If I had a six, it would be yours, foxtale.. admire your talent....Bob
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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thanks, I appreciate the kind words.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story full of action and suspense. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
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This is a very well written story full of action and suspense. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
Comment from WRITER1
Those of us who have dogs can relate to this very well. The cake was a stroke of genius. Good job. We had a dog who had helped herself to thanksgiving turkey as the guest entered the room. How embarrassing.
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Those of us who have dogs can relate to this very well. The cake was a stroke of genius. Good job. We had a dog who had helped herself to thanksgiving turkey as the guest entered the room. How embarrassing.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
Comment from DrCarter2001
Nice job on this; a funny story overall and well-told. You used a nice introduction and the conclusion is short and reflective on the story. The only suggestion I would make is to remove the dialogue tag modifiers like "lamely suggested" and just use "said", or better yet, try to remove the dialogue tags as much as possible and use action or narrative to break up the dialogue.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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Nice job on this; a funny story overall and well-told. You used a nice introduction and the conclusion is short and reflective on the story. The only suggestion I would make is to remove the dialogue tag modifiers like "lamely suggested" and just use "said", or better yet, try to remove the dialogue tags as much as possible and use action or narrative to break up the dialogue.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2009
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thanks. In fact that modifier does seem lame! LOL.
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I kept the rights to this so Fanstory said it was ok to post here. Can you believe it, but that first sentence you remarked upon as a nice intro was CUT by the editor when this was published in the Front Porch periodical. He needed room to post the old hollywood slick of the A Team. While it was good to see those rascals again, he cut my words. HE CUT MY WORDS! Get him, Mad Dog Murdock!
