POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Dreams Lost"When I dabble at things.....
83 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
The picture tells it all again a women doesn't marry for different reason what ever it is it brings sadness thats what I get from your lines.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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The picture tells it all again a women doesn't marry for different reason what ever it is it brings sadness thats what I get from your lines.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2009
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Cookie
This one was for my daughter..her marriage is crumbling. Carol
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I'm so sorry to hear that did everything turn out ok.
cookie
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Still pending...indecision is horrible!
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Stay on prayin grounds I will be praying they make the correct decison.
Comment from jaded831
Your well written poem, moved me. Such power in so few words. I could feel the happiness in the fist line, the
pain in the second, tied together with skill.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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Your well written poem, moved me. Such power in so few words. I could feel the happiness in the fist line, the
pain in the second, tied together with skill.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2009
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Jaded
Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I appreciate when someone else understands and feels what I am trying to express. Thanks again. Carol
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My name is Carol too.
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Carol Nice to become your friend...Another coincidence...I am finishing and re-releasing a story in the next few days...The title is Jaded. Take care, my friend. Always, Carol
Comment from krishna0306
peferct short poem, conveying all waht its expected to! thanks a lot for sharing dear friend, simply loved these lines, especially the summer/winter usage.
i am sorry to see the background (i mean what made you wriet this) . have seen it everywhere nowadays. may god bless all of us and take to the land of true dreams.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2009
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peferct short poem, conveying all waht its expected to! thanks a lot for sharing dear friend, simply loved these lines, especially the summer/winter usage.
i am sorry to see the background (i mean what made you wriet this) . have seen it everywhere nowadays. may god bless all of us and take to the land of true dreams.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2009
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Krishna
Thank you for the review and your kind comments. I greatly appreciate you taking the time and sharing your thoughts. Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
How well this revelation has bee
captured in this poem carol. In such
few words it demonstrates the joy
and expectation in a Summer of dreams
only to be shattered by a winter of
heartbreaking chill...
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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How well this revelation has bee
captured in this poem carol. In such
few words it demonstrates the joy
and expectation in a Summer of dreams
only to be shattered by a winter of
heartbreaking chill...
Comment Written 12-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Phil
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I always appreciate hearing from you. Take care - Carol
Comment from Adri7enne
Sad little haiku, Begin Again. Guess it's more the rule than the exception these days. Still, it's a chilling realization. Congratulations on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Sad little haiku, Begin Again. Guess it's more the rule than the exception these days. Still, it's a chilling realization. Congratulations on winning the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Adri7enne
Thank you so much for the kind review. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Brindle.T
Its always difficult to critique pieces of work as short as this, and this iece is no exception.
I find no connection however between the first line and the lines that follow it...?
But hey! You won the contest, so who am I to judge...lol
A nice piece
Well done and congratulations
Tony
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2009
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Its always difficult to critique pieces of work as short as this, and this iece is no exception.
I find no connection however between the first line and the lines that follow it...?
But hey! You won the contest, so who am I to judge...lol
A nice piece
Well done and congratulations
Tony
Comment Written 11-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2009
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summer wedding bliss (daughter was ecstatic getting married)
winter sorrows chill the soul (problems froze the love)
hearts unmendable (broken hearts because it can't be fixed)
Sorry you didn't understand..I guess it's always in the eye of who is reading at the time. Thank you for the review.
Carol
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Ahhh, now I have it...Very clever.
Tony
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Thank you!
Comment from Aussie
Your Haiku moved me; three short lines to sum up your daughter being jilted at the alter of her dreams. I congratulate you on your overall win because you deserved it. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2009
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Your Haiku moved me; three short lines to sum up your daughter being jilted at the alter of her dreams. I congratulate you on your overall win because you deserved it. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2009
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Aussie
I am thrilled with your review. Thank you so much. CArol
Comment from Clouddancer
Hm...happiness short lived in a perfect 5-7-5 syllable count. Well written and thought provoking haiku that encompasses nature and emotion. nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Hm...happiness short lived in a perfect 5-7-5 syllable count. Well written and thought provoking haiku that encompasses nature and emotion. nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Clouddancer
High school sweethearts who are now all grown up and approaching 30. One still wants to be a kid and the other has moved on. Unfortunately, her heart hasn't!! Thanks for the kind review. Carol
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Time heals all things...bless her.
Comment from Oatmeal
BEGIN AGAIN,
I hate to tell you but this is Senryu and not Haiku. Haiku theme is always nature. Senryu is human emotion. The line count was correct.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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BEGIN AGAIN,
I hate to tell you but this is Senryu and not Haiku. Haiku theme is always nature. Senryu is human emotion. The line count was correct.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Oatmeal
Thanks for your review. I am not a poet and just happened to write this because it meant something to me. Below is the rules I was given for the haiku. Thank you. Carol
It's often about nature but we are keeping the topic open. Write about nature, feelings, or experiences - whatever you feel will work - that follows this format.
Comment from joan marie
We never know the why. It isn't our time not until we are with Him. I had a love die and I still don't understand why he had to die at 45 years old. But it isn't my place to make those decisions. Only to live with them. joan marie
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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We never know the why. It isn't our time not until we are with Him. I had a love die and I still don't understand why he had to die at 45 years old. But it isn't my place to make those decisions. Only to live with them. joan marie
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Joan Marie Even in sorrow, if we truly believe we must accept that fact that the reasons are know only to God and it is not ours to question why. Thanks for the review. CArol