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Comment from Readywriter52
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Jenna heard a scream, saw a man lurking, and then a hand touched her. I think I might have scream and fainted too. I guess her husband didn't understand her.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2009

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    Readywriter

    Thanks for the great review. Glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from Razz
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Very well done. I liked it a lot. You made it very real, I could alomst see the stupified expression on the face of the husband.

Good entry and good luck.
Razz

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2009

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    Razz

    Thanks for the kind review. It was a fun little thing to attempt to write a story in so few words. Glad you enjoyed it.

    Carol
Comment from nora arjuna
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hi carol. an interesting entry. but mind you, not only women. i know a few men who can't stand blood too. wish you lots of luck with this.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2009

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    Arjuna

    Thanks for reading and reviewing my little short story. I appreciate it very much. It was a fun thing to write. Carol
Comment from percival86jack
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What a great little vignette! You drew me in then embarrassed me for not guessing where you were going with it! A good chuckle! Percival

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2009

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    Percival Never to embarrass only to surprise...I am glad that you enjoyed the little story. Carol
Comment from Helen Tan
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I have this thing about imagining danger...it happens often on streets when I think I hear footsteps following me, my heart races. Too much CSI but I guess it's better to be alert, safe than sorry.

Good luck in the contest.

Her bleeding husband stood there, confused. "Women and blood! It's only a cat scratch."
Men, they just don't know what really goes through a woman's mind. But we women do let our imagination run wild at times.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2009

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    Helen

    Thanks for the review. And for enjoying the little bit of fun I had with the story. I love CSI too!

    Thanks again Carol
Comment from Laidy
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this made me laugh really loud! i thought this was a good write. i'd give you a 6 if i had one. i thought it would end different. but that was exciting, hilarious.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2009

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    Laidy

    Thanks so much for the kind review. I am glad it made you laugh. It's difficult to write a story in 80 words and have much punch to it. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from shygirl21
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he he I really enjoyed this story, I could never do something like this! I take way to long to get a point across lmao, but you really nailed this and brought the excitement up fast.

Another fab job!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

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    Pamela

    Thanks...I didn't think I could do it either...Should have seen me cut, clip, cut, clip, rewrite. But I had fun! Carol
Comment from dmjones
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I'm a little behind on reviewing been so busy at work. I liked this also. 80 words is hard and it was done well. I am wondering who the man in the bushes is though.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2009

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    DMJones

    The man in the bushes was her husband trying to save the cat from the storm outside. He screamed when he got scratched...thus the blood on his arm when he came in the back door. Thanks so much...It is hard to put all that into a few words. Carol
Comment from Sarabran
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Very nice. I was really scared. I was surprised when it ended up being the husband with only a cat scratch. You did a great job with this story of only a few words. Sarabran

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2009

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    Sara

    Thanks for the kind review. It was a bit of fun to write. Thanks again Carol
Comment from eliz100
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This story is well-written and does not have any SPAG's. It is an exciting and fun read. And it meets the contest requirements.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
    Eloiz

    Thanks for the read. It was a fun little thing to do. Thanks again. CArol