Comment from Summer Falls

Excellent

OOOH, Carol, excellent twist at the end! The more I read of your stuff, the more I am impressed. This moved along well, captivating me at the beginning and keeping me reading--faster and faster- until I dropped my jaw at the end.
Summer

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Summer That's what I wanted to hear. It's hard with flash fiction to get a whole story in and still surprise the reader. Thanks you for the wonderful review. I can't tell you how thrilled I am. Thanks again. Carol

reply by Summer Falls on 17-Aug-2009

You are welcome, Carol!
Summer

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2009

Summer...If you have time, I beefed up the ending a little. I'd like to know your opinion. Thanks so much. Carol

reply by Summer Falls on 18-Aug-2009

Very believable ending, Carol. I like it! Nice change.

Comment from Gary D. Hardy

Excellent

WAIT...... Where's the rest? Thats what I call writing. Edge of your seat writing. Good job. I'll be looking for your next installment. Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Joefrank

Thanks so much for reading and for the kind review. If I caught your attention and held it...I am happy. Thanks again Carol

reply by Gary D. Hardy on 17-Aug-2009

Your very welcome.

Comment from Belinda

Excellent

Poor James. He has been set up again by his own boss. To have lost his love to him is like a second 'death' for James, Interesting flash fiction, Carol, good entry to the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Belinda

Thanks for the review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Carol

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Great story. I really like the dialog; it comes off natural. It's also very well written, I found no spags. Great job.

Fred

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Fred

Thanks so much for the kind review. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks again CArol

Comment from PrincessinPurple

Excellent

Wow, this is definantly a good story. I like how you written James. You made me care about his character in this story, even though it's not that long.

I would like to read more about James. I want to see what happens when James congratulate the bride and groom.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Princess I think Carrie will faint. Colin's going to swallow real hard. James can deck him and than pick up the bride....She'll get an annulment and they'll live happily ever after. I think that 's how fairy tales go....

Thanks for the review. I am glad you enjoyed it. Carol

Comment from darkgreennights

Excellent

No No James do not congratualate the bride and groom do a Dustin Hoffman out of the graduate lol. Though I must say nine months is not very long to mourn the man you love, meet someone else and marry him so maybe he is better off! as you can see I enjoyed the chapter lol

Kathleen

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 Comment Written 17-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009

Kathleen I wanted to say she'd had a thing with Colin before hand and then James won her heart...but I don't have enough room. It would make more sense I think. Maybe I'll take another look at it. Thanks for the review, Carol

reply by darkgreennights on 17-Aug-2009

I still think she should have waited lol, but it makes for good storytelling!