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Comment from Readywriter52
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Collin really played James. No wonder he didn't James to see Carrie. Collins had planned to marry her. Collins deserves everything he got.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2009

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2009
    Readywriter

    I almost forgot about this one! I agree wholeheartedly! Thanks for the review and have a great day. CArol
Comment from Laidy
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i felt like i was reading a movie scene here. i liked this. i liked the 'undercover' feeling. it was so real. and the writer wrote it so well. great job here. -laidy

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

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    Laidy

    Thanks for the kind review. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my work. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Donovan
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You must read this and think...dang I am really good at this, becasue if you don't you should. Great plot and well deveoloped in just a few words. I always like it when I am surprised. I liked this a lot, or maybe it is just your cute picture.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
    Donovan I write what I enjoy and hope that others will enjoy it too. I doubt the a picture of an old lady will sway anyone...but thank you for reading, enjoying and offering your kind comments. Carol
Comment from zlp22
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Great story, loved the ending. I would like to know what happened to the groom. This was a setup like no other. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

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    Zip

    I hope he got his just desserts!!! Thanks so much for the kind review. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from shygirl21
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whoa! Helluva story! You gotta develop this into a book, seriously, was awesome. I love how it was half dialgoue and half narrative without being obvious about it. When it was dialogue the story was really well written and you could picture everything, and the same with the narrative. Instead of telling us the story, you showed us. (something I CANNOT do to save myself lmao)

Great job carol!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
    Pamela

    Awesome...you blew me away girl. This particular story just jumped into my head when I decided to write for the contest. I'm not sure where it even came from...but I'll take it. Thanks so much for the awesome review. Carol

    Or was that pity because you made me cry so much the past few days???LOL
reply by shygirl21 on 21-Aug-2009
    DEFINITELY not pity, it was fan-daby-dosy!
Comment from patwannabe
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Carol, another great but stinky story. It leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Your subject was great, the way you put it together was masterful, but I didn't like it. I guess even FBI Directors can be skunks, right? Maybe that's why the story stinks, huh? Good job, pat

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2009

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    Pat

    It goes to show that there are good people and there are bad people in every walk of life. Colin was one of the bad ones.

    Thanks for reading the story. I appreciate the review.

    Carol
Comment from Mengleoh67
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Ohhh an excellent story!! Great character development with such a minimal amount of wordage and the storyline was classic without being trite. An excellent job.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2009

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    Mengleoh

    Thanks for the kind review. I certainly appreciate your comments. CArol
Comment from NightWriter
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"Playing By The Rules" is a strong contender in this contest. Well written with lots of powerful dialogue to move this flash fiction. Well done.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2009

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    NightWriter

    Thanks so much for the awesome review. Greatly appreciate your words even if I don't win, knowing someone appreciated what I wrote is well worth it.

    Carol
Comment from anne1204
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Very Good Nice to read some flash fiction without someone turning into a vampire or alien. There are enough real monsters in life as your story proves. Good writing. Anne 1204

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2009
    Anne I couldn't agree with you more. Thanks for the review. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from Cairn Destop
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Something tells me the smuggling case just took a backseat to the personal problems of our undercover agent. Loved the way the director tried distracting him and how it didn't work. Did not spot any SPAG while reading.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2009

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    Cairn

    I agree. Wonder what the new bride has to say to her groom about the change in events....Thanks for the review and the kind comments. CArol