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Comment from Healing
As always you deliver. I love the way you write and throughlly enjoy reading all your writings. Very well done. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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As always you deliver. I love the way you write and throughlly enjoy reading all your writings. Very well done. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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Healing
Your praise is awesome. I can't thank you enough for reading and enjoying my writing. I value your words and appreciate the stars. Carol
Comment from frazzledauthor
You set out the conflict and got to the resolution in short order!! I think that skill is one thing that makes a good writer. It is a skill I still have to develop. Good job. And I'd love to read about the friendship that developed between these two men.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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You set out the conflict and got to the resolution in short order!! I think that skill is one thing that makes a good writer. It is a skill I still have to develop. Good job. And I'd love to read about the friendship that developed between these two men.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
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frazzledauthor
This was about my son and though he did get passed the drinking, he still struggles with a broken heart. We have written the rough draft of a novel about 5 yrs his life and his friends (young adults). Thank you for your interest and for the review. Carol
Comment from peggles
Hello,
How clever is this? Foxed me a bit a first then when I went back to the beginning, I caught what had happened.
To put so much into a short piece is brilliant
Well done
Peggles
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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Hello,
How clever is this? Foxed me a bit a first then when I went back to the beginning, I caught what had happened.
To put so much into a short piece is brilliant
Well done
Peggles
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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Peggies
Thanks so much for the kind review. Glad you appreciated the story. Carol
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Whoa!
This is a great 100 word story. You met the challenge perfectly.
I can see why it is recognized as an all time best.
Good mix of dialog, and description.
The last 2 lines are the best, and the most chilling.
Great, great job.
Kathryn
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Whoa!
This is a great 100 word story. You met the challenge perfectly.
I can see why it is recognized as an all time best.
Good mix of dialog, and description.
The last 2 lines are the best, and the most chilling.
Great, great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Kathryn This, unfortunately, happen to my son with his fiance. After 4 years, wedding planned, well...he has moved past the drinking but he struggles to heal his heart. As a mother, I too found it chilling. Thanks for the wonderful review. Carol
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Hi Carol,
Oh, no! I'm sorry. I'm glad he has moved past the drinking. Getting over a broken heart is very difficult, and I think in general, men have a more difficult time of it because they tend not to talk about it to other people, while we women, get together, and chat about it, and cry about it, until we get it all out.
I hope he heals soon, and doesn't give up on love. That's the key. So many people become bitter and give up on love forever, but then, they never overcome it, and they never find the joy of a new love.
Kathryn
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Kathryn He is a wonderful young man...with the romantic bones of his mom.
Unfortunately, he has many friends that are girls, but he doesn't give them a chance. He keeps looking for Emily in everyone else...That was her real name.
I hope when the real one comes along, she will knock his socks off and not give him a chance to think about the other one. Thanks Carol
Comment from Solrac
In one hundred words you told the story of 10,000 words. I saw the man, I saw the intruder, I saw the traitor, I saw the grief and I liked the story. Excellent,
Solrac
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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In one hundred words you told the story of 10,000 words. I saw the man, I saw the intruder, I saw the traitor, I saw the grief and I liked the story. Excellent,
Solrac
Comment Written 16-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2009
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Solrac This was based on my son and his fiance....unfortunately. He has moved past the drinking but still struggles with his heart. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from zlp22
Great story. Really gets to the point. Good luck in the contest. I guess every man who gets hurt ends up in the bar drinking.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009
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Great story. Really gets to the point. Good luck in the contest. I guess every man who gets hurt ends up in the bar drinking.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009
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Zip After 4 years and planning a wedding, he wasn't prepared at all. He has moved past the drinking but his heart still struggles to heal. Thanks again for the review. Carol
Comment from Summer Falls
Your title breaks the heart and when I read on, it shattered. The pain of betrayal is horrible. You depicted this well. The pain being drowned in the bottle is so sad. You told a story in 100 words, so well done. Whew. I never knew 100 words could pack such a punch. OUCH.
Summer
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Your title breaks the heart and when I read on, it shattered. The pain of betrayal is horrible. You depicted this well. The pain being drowned in the bottle is so sad. You told a story in 100 words, so well done. Whew. I never knew 100 words could pack such a punch. OUCH.
Summer
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Summer I, unfortunately, got the story from my son. His fiance did this to him. He has moved past the drinking but he struggles to heal his heart. Thanks again. Carol
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That is hopeful. At least he quit the drinking. Healing a heart does take longer. Time will heal it, time and someone who will make him smile again. What a sad story.
Summer
Comment from lola29
Carol, you always write such unforgettable stories. This was, althought brief, was so sad. Your a great writer because you always evoke an emotion from me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Carol, you always write such unforgettable stories. This was, althought brief, was so sad. Your a great writer because you always evoke an emotion from me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Lola
Thank you so much for the kind thoughts. From one writer to the other, I certainly appreciate knowing you like what I do.
Thanks again Carol
Comment from RebelRose
This is a good story told in a few words but it does a good job of conjouring up images of how the story played out. Well written.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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This is a good story told in a few words but it does a good job of conjouring up images of how the story played out. Well written.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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RebelRose
Thanks so much for the kind review. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from tati
Dear Carol,
It must be a very hard task to tell a story in 100 words, but you did it admirably while fulfilling the requirements of the contest. Sad indeed, this kind of tragedy does happen on some people's lives.I love the line: Devastated, James tried to drink his sorrow away. Alexis's face was at the bottom of every glass. Tears filled his eyes ... Good luck in the contest! tati (August 15, 2009)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Dear Carol,
It must be a very hard task to tell a story in 100 words, but you did it admirably while fulfilling the requirements of the contest. Sad indeed, this kind of tragedy does happen on some people's lives.I love the line: Devastated, James tried to drink his sorrow away. Alexis's face was at the bottom of every glass. Tears filled his eyes ... Good luck in the contest! tati (August 15, 2009)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Tati This was my son's story. Was with the girl 4 yrs, wedding planned, etc. and pow...He has moved past the drinking but I worry how he struggles with healing his heart. Thanks for the review. Carol
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So sad ... How's he now? All the best for him, Carol. With prayers and love from your friend, tati.
