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Comment from Blaidd Drwg
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Gert, what a heart warming love poem. How sad tho, that he is to lose his love, and yet, how magnificent that he would give his life for her.

John

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2009

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    John I'm glad you loved the poem, I imagined my 89 yr old parents, 62 yrs married and never apart. How difficult it will be for one of them. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from Irrelevant
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This was a very moving piece. There is much depth in this as I let the words take me into such a love for a moment. This to me speaks of a deep and long love that has survived many storms. A wonderful write. Nicely done :)

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2009

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    Irrelevant

    Thanks for the wonderful comments. I am so glad that you enjoyed the poem. Thanks again Carol
Comment from RebelRose
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Ah, so much said in so few words. It makes me think of the nursing home in our area. I visit there sometimes and I also work at a hospital. This scene is played out so often in those settings. Good poetry, well written.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    RebelRose

    Thanks for the kind review. I am glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from Alexander E Poet
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love the Picture This is has a most excellent flow throughout and easily carries you through the piece. The imagery is great,No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see.Alexander QQ...


 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    Alexander
    Thanks for the kind review. Glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from Paradox Tremors
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Man. this almost brought a tear to my eyes. To have loved for so long and then to lose your life's love is so sad. A great write my friend.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    Paradox

    Thanks for the wonderful review. I greatly appreciate it.
    Carol
Comment from --Turtle.
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I think that is the essence of love, I liked this short poem. The kind of short poem you read, and then sigh. Simple, to the point, It made me think of my grandparents, and the day my grandmother died. The only time I saw my grandfather cry... though it's bitter sweet, as I also fondly remember that was also the day explained when he died, he wanted us to have him cremated and to sprinkle him on grandma. I'm not so sure grandma would approve, she used to yell at him he was a crazy old man sometimes.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    Turtlestage I've missed you. I wrote this poem thinking of my 89 yr old parents, 62 yrs married and never apart. Can't imagine what one will do with out the other. Carol
Comment from jackiesmuse
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Very beautiful and so touching. Loved the picture you chose to go with it.

A lifetime shared,

His last breath he would give,

Holding hands,

Praying she might live.

Best wishes in the contest with this fine entry.

:-) Jackie

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    Jackie

    Thank you so much. I related this to my parents. I don't know how one will exist with out the other after 62 years of marriage. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from learning_to_write
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THis is beautiful, and so very sad. It was very emotional and read beautifully. Best of luck in the contest, this is a lovely love poem.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    learning to write

    I based it on my parents married 62 years. I can't imagine how one will exist without the other. Thanks again Carol
Comment from perunest
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The depth of the love expressed here
is infathomable. Such sadness of the end
of a life, yet joy in the love it expressed
until the end. You've done a wonderful
job with this piece. Good luck in the
contest! Carolyn

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
    Carolyn

    Thank you so much for the kind review. Drawing from ones experiences in life tend to make my writing more emotional for me. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from minopavlic
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The bond of a true love and friendship is always cherished,and in your poem you've beautifully captured the essence of that bond.


Warmly
No_obstacle

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2009

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    no obstacle

    This poem was based on my elderly parents who have been married 62 years and never apart. I can't imagine what will happen when one of them dies. Thanks again Carol