Garden Compromise
A garden compromise29 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
What a great compromise - we teach our children to share, so this seems like one fantastic idea. I love your friendly take on this contest about food, and I was delighted by your story of this speaker who learns to be generous, not rude, with the animals in her neighborhood. Great cadence and rhyme enhanced this thoughtful and fun story poem for me. brooke :-)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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What a great compromise - we teach our children to share, so this seems like one fantastic idea. I love your friendly take on this contest about food, and I was delighted by your story of this speaker who learns to be generous, not rude, with the animals in her neighborhood. Great cadence and rhyme enhanced this thoughtful and fun story poem for me. brooke :-)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2009
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Thank you so much Brooke, for such a great review. I appreciate your comments and I'm glad you enjoyed this. It was a fun contest. I do have a garden, which is where the idea and inspiration came from to write this, and unfortunately all the critters are eating their share and more. At least they won't go hungry...LOL...
BellaSpirit
Comment from Mariea
What a delightful piece and how well you've addressed the writing prompt. I thoroughly enjoyed.
Flow - good fluid movement
Structure - well constructed and developed
Rhyme - consistent throughout
Rhythm - smooth easy flow
Regards Mia
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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What a delightful piece and how well you've addressed the writing prompt. I thoroughly enjoyed.
Flow - good fluid movement
Structure - well constructed and developed
Rhyme - consistent throughout
Rhythm - smooth easy flow
Regards Mia
Comment Written 08-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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What a nice review, thank you so much. I love when I can see exactly what it is that the reader likes or dislikes. I appreciate your comments and review very much. Have a great day!
BellaSpirit
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Your poem was fun to read. I think it would be something either and adult or child could enjoy. I particularly like the ending. It's a great lesson to teach a little one about sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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Your poem was fun to read. I think it would be something either and adult or child could enjoy. I particularly like the ending. It's a great lesson to teach a little one about sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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Thank you so much, Pantazis. I appreciate your reading and your thoughtful comments.
BellaSpirit
Comment from MariJo
I love your poem about your garden. It flows so well & really fun to read. Is it really your garden? It would make a delightful children's poem/story. It has an excellent choice of words that fit beautifully for a garden with a lot of imagery. I wouldn't change a thing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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I love your poem about your garden. It flows so well & really fun to read. Is it really your garden? It would make a delightful children's poem/story. It has an excellent choice of words that fit beautifully for a garden with a lot of imagery. I wouldn't change a thing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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Why, thank you so much, MariJo. Yes, it is my garden and the lil critters are eating their fair share and more. LOL...I appreciate your kind comments and review and I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.
BellaSpirit
Comment from Phil Kitom
An excellent poem with a good story
that not only meets the needs of
the contest, but also will go to
the hearts of animal lovers.
They will very much appreciate the
change from one of attack, to one
of provision. Well done and good
luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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An excellent poem with a good story
that not only meets the needs of
the contest, but also will go to
the hearts of animal lovers.
They will very much appreciate the
change from one of attack, to one
of provision. Well done and good
luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you Phil. I'm glad you liked my poem. I appreciate your kind comments and review very much.
Bellaspirit
Comment from mmichelle97219
Yep a little for them to save soem for you. I thought this was a clever interpretation of the contest theme. A very poetically told story. Good luck in the voting booth.
happy writing
Michelle
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Yep a little for them to save soem for you. I thought this was a clever interpretation of the contest theme. A very poetically told story. Good luck in the voting booth.
happy writing
Michelle
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you so much Michelle. This was a fun contest to write for. Your comments and review are appreciated very much.
BellaSpirit
Comment from Rabianabian
Great poem! I really liked this one. You can really tell the flow of the story and the feelings of the main character really come out. And I loved the ending! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Great poem! I really liked this one. You can really tell the flow of the story and the feelings of the main character really come out. And I loved the ending! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you Rabianabian. I'm glad you liked my little garden poem.
BellaSpirit
Comment from Toller
I like the ending of the poem. I grow vegetables, and the wild animals do get their share. I wish they wouldn't, but my scarecrow and my dogs are pretty useless.
This poem is very creative. It has great rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Good luck in the contest!
Ashley
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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I like the ending of the poem. I grow vegetables, and the wild animals do get their share. I wish they wouldn't, but my scarecrow and my dogs are pretty useless.
This poem is very creative. It has great rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Good luck in the contest!
Ashley
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Hi Toller, yes, it's hard to keep those little critters out of the garden. They seem to come out in herds. Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked this.
BellaSpirit
Comment from Soulester
This is a most enjoyable, light-heartred humorous poem, BellaSpirit! It contains vivid descriptions and a creative solution to the problem of garden critters. Very well done! Mary
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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This is a most enjoyable, light-heartred humorous poem, BellaSpirit! It contains vivid descriptions and a creative solution to the problem of garden critters. Very well done! Mary
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Why, thank you Mary. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and review very much and I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
BellaSpirit
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes a creative and original approach to the contest which I enjoyed it made me smile very well done and good luck regards Fuller
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Yes a creative and original approach to the contest which I enjoyed it made me smile very well done and good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you so much Fuller. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem and that it brought a smile to your face. I appreciate your reading and reviewing.
BellaSpirit
