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Comment from Readywriter52
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Children love to torment each other. They need to grow up before they begin to enjoy each other company. Tommy and Kelly probably never thought they would get married.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Readywriter It was a lot to put into a few short words but I hope it came off okay. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from PoesyPoet
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Ahaaa! They probably loved each other from the start. That's young love for you. I thought this was really nice to read and hope it wins the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    PoesyPoet Thank you for such a kind review. It challenging to get a lifetime into 150 words. I appreciate your review. CArol
Comment from c_lucas
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This is a very well written story showing a love/hate relationship. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Charlie

    Thanks for the review. Trying to cram a life time of feelings into 150 words was a project. Take care
    Carol
reply by c_lucas on 30-Jul-2009
    You're welcome, Dawn. Charlie
Comment from Slush Pile
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Ahhhhh, this is so cute! I love the way you did this. It should get extra stars for having such a great ending, too. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Slush Pile

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Slush Pile I am so pleased that you enjoyed the ending from I hate you to I do. I appreciate your review. Carol
Comment from JMRoland
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Hi Begin Again,

Nice story, and I am especially taken with how you managed to span the years from child to grownup so effectively and with so little wording. All required words in place also. Great job. Good luck in the contest.

JMR

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    JMR Thank you for the review. I thought it was quite a challenge to put a lifetime of feeling in a few short words too. I appreciate your review. Carol
Comment from Rain Chapman
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This is a really unique and wonderful take on the prompt words. Instead of being a crime story it's a love one. I love it! In a few short words you've captured years of history. Excellent job.
Lorraine :)

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Lorraine

    Thanks for the kind review. It was difficult to cram a lifetime into so few words. Even amazed myself. Thanks again Carol
Comment from DeboraDyess
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Nicely done. You have a concrete beginning, middle and end, use the words well and show character development in 150 words. Who'd have guessed it possible?! Blessings and luck, Deb

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Deb...I even surprised myself...A lifetime in 150 words. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from perunest
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A concise, simple story that gets
straight to the relationship between two
people. It's tough to write a story in
100 words, and even harder when you have
to use a group of particular ones. Nicely
done! Carolyn

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Carolyn Thanks for the kind review. It was a challenge but fun. Thanks again Carol
Comment from EllieKaye
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Yours is a sweet love story with a happy ending. I enjoyed your entry and bet you will do well in the voting. It was nice to see you highlighted the required words in red. Great job here!

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Ellie Thank you for the kind words. It is difficult to put a whole lifetime into 150 words (at least for me) but I enjoyed it. I am happier that others found it enjoyable too!
    Thanks again Carol
Comment from ladybird
Exceptional
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A very fine entry well deserving of a six. This is very good in that you have not used the given words willy-nilly, but as following each other in a sensible storyline. Using these words and keeping to the hundred word remit doesn't sound easy. Well done and good luck with it.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
    Ladybird...I am extremely humbled by your six stars. Writing a story in so few words is definitely a challenge for me. Putting a lifetime of living in those few paragraphs seemed impossible. Your praise makes it all worthwhile. Thank you so much for your awesome review. Carol
reply by ladybird on 30-Jul-2009
    You're welcome.