Comment from royowen

Excellent

It seems ypu had a bit of a problem with a school bully, it happened in those days, but no one did anything about it, you had an interesting life from growing up in a normalish family, I think it's pretty normal to realise in middle our youth is feeing from us. Beautifully written Joan, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022

Thanks for the positive comments and all the stars. I guess it was as 'normal' as it could be. Glad you like it, Roy.
Joan

reply by royowen on 20-Jun-2022

Well done

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

This is very well done. You told your life story clearly and concisely. I found it most interesting and enjoyed every word. It appears you had a great life. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022

Thanks, prettybluebirds, for your encouraging review. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Joan

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

An autobiography in rhyme! What a brave undertaking, Joan! This says so much about you and does so in a way that strikes a chord in your reader. Beautifully done!

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022

Thanks, Tony, for your kind words. I appreciate all the stars. Glad you liked it. This was written a while ago. I have some to add to it.
Maybe I will.
Joan

Comment from Sarabran

Excellent

Such a delightful poem and a clever idea writing your biography in poetic form. I think that you did an outstanding job with this. I found 1 minor error that you need to change.
My brother took(my)down the aisle. Change to me.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2009

Thank you for reviewing this poem and Ode to Mom and Dad. I am glad you liked them. I shouldn't trust spell checker so much. I always forget it won't find wrong words if they are spelled correctly.

dragonpoet

Comment from dahlin1

Excellent

I love your poem. Most of the time it moved quite smoothly
and certainly were able to follow your life story. However, it could have alittle cleaniing up. There aew 1 oe 2
typos and meter was a little off That is my hardest problem also. Sound as though you had a nice full life

best of success. dahlin1

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2009

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Thanks

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Dragonpoet

In general, you told your life story quite well through this poem. Detailing the ups and downs throughout. Many can relate to those same feelings.

The rhyming was a little tough here and there, but I enjoyed it anyhow. That's what matters!

Good luck Carol

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

Thanks

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I really liked this, and could relate to many parts of it. You did a wonderful jobe describing your life. I wonder how many others can relate their life to me. I need mor words.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2009

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Comment from liz10240

Excellent

I like this. You have your life nicely laid out in a concise form, good rhyming. A couple of typos to fix, otherwise good piece.

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 Comment Written 25-Jul-2009

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Comment from Amfunny

Good

This was rather interesting, however you have some corrections to make:

After grade two bask (BACK) to Illinois we went
Back to public school I was sent.
Third through sixth grade when (WENT) just fine

Some of your rhymes seem a bit forced, but overall it was nicely done.

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 Comment Written 25-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2012

Thanks