POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "With Each Day"When I dabble at things.....
50 total reviews
Comment from Wild Flower
Really beautifully done. I loved the part about walking with two cups of coffee. That just speaks volumes about the loneliness and a bit of disbelief I think. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Really beautifully done. I loved the part about walking with two cups of coffee. That just speaks volumes about the loneliness and a bit of disbelief I think. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Wild Flower...Thanks so much for reading my poem. Starting off a new day with dreams of love and happiness and then remembering it will never be again.....devastating. It's like praying it's a nightmare and finding out you are awake.
Thanks for reading and commenting. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from sherrymccall
You did such a beautiful job of describing the pain associated with losing someone you love. I felt your sorrow, and pain as it brought back so many familiar feelings that i experienced with losing my grandson. I dont get the oppurtunities much with my work schedule to get online alot anymore but when i do, i go straight to see if you have any new writing. Your work is awesome and i enjoy reading your stories, poems, or whatever you write. You are a natural and i feel you will go a long way in your writing. God bless you.
Sherry
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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You did such a beautiful job of describing the pain associated with losing someone you love. I felt your sorrow, and pain as it brought back so many familiar feelings that i experienced with losing my grandson. I dont get the oppurtunities much with my work schedule to get online alot anymore but when i do, i go straight to see if you have any new writing. Your work is awesome and i enjoy reading your stories, poems, or whatever you write. You are a natural and i feel you will go a long way in your writing. God bless you.
Sherry
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2009
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Sherry...
You bring tears to my eyes this morning. I don't think I've ever had anyone say such wonderful things about my writing. I truly thank you. I haven't written lately, but I am telling myself to get over my sadness (July 13, 1981) I buried my son. It's been a long time but sometimes it feels like yesterday. I know he's in a better place and I'll be okay too. Thanks for all your kindness. God bless you. Carol
Comment from Phoenix Rising
The pure emotional flow in this one is powerful as it draws the reader through this tale of woe. And Mino's artwork enhances your poem.
Very well done.
PR
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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The pure emotional flow in this one is powerful as it draws the reader through this tale of woe. And Mino's artwork enhances your poem.
Very well done.
PR
Comment Written 12-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009
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Phoenix...
Thank you for your kind review. I agree that the artwork expressed the sorrow I was trying to show with my words.
Thank you for taking the time to read it. Carol
Comment from Nanny 6
This is a most heartfelt and emotional poem. It is filled with the pangs of grief and undying pain. You portrayed these feelings vividly in this well written piece! Judy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a most heartfelt and emotional poem. It is filled with the pangs of grief and undying pain. You portrayed these feelings vividly in this well written piece! Judy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Judy... Loss of a loved one is a never ending event...some good days, some bad. Thanks for your kind words. Carol
Comment from c_lucas
It is difficult to overcome the emotional luggage of a relationship gone bad. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Congratulatios on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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It is difficult to overcome the emotional luggage of a relationship gone bad. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Congratulatios on winning the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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C lucas...
Thank you for the kind words. They are greatly appreciated. Thanks again - Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
Comment from bow2heather
This was an exceptional piece! I loved the flow of your poem. Your words were filled with very strong emotion. How sad it must be to lose someone you love so much just to have to learn to face tomorrow with out them. They say time heals but how much time would it take for someone to completely heal from such a tragedy? Great work altogether!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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This was an exceptional piece! I loved the flow of your poem. Your words were filled with very strong emotion. How sad it must be to lose someone you love so much just to have to learn to face tomorrow with out them. They say time heals but how much time would it take for someone to completely heal from such a tragedy? Great work altogether!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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It's never really gone, just lurking in the shadows. Some days you feel alive and others...well, they are better left unsaid.
Thanks for reading and for the kind and generous review.
Carol
Comment from Shirley B
This is a beautiful poem. I'm glad you are still filled with hope after a loss. Your poem was very good. I was in the contest too. I can honestly say, your poem was better. Congradulations. Happy writing. Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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This is a beautiful poem. I'm glad you are still filled with hope after a loss. Your poem was very good. I was in the contest too. I can honestly say, your poem was better. Congradulations. Happy writing. Shirley
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009
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Shirley...
How kind of you to speak so highly of my poem. I sincerely appreciate your kind words. Carol
Comment from RapturedHeart
Wow! This is absolutely superb, Begin Again! I started off in the garden with you thinking I'd be joining you in feelings of 'contentment' or 'joy' maybe - what a huge surprise! Very well done - you've captured the pain and inability to accept the death of a loved one; a very real stage of grieving. Kudos on your win - well deserved! Take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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Wow! This is absolutely superb, Begin Again! I started off in the garden with you thinking I'd be joining you in feelings of 'contentment' or 'joy' maybe - what a huge surprise! Very well done - you've captured the pain and inability to accept the death of a loved one; a very real stage of grieving. Kudos on your win - well deserved! Take care,
Heather
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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Heather...
Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate every word. Thanks again Carol
Comment from --Turtle.
I read this poem, I thought it was great. I liked the rhymes, every piece seemed to fit so nicely. The picture suited the mood, too. The colors were right, very blue.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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I read this poem, I thought it was great. I liked the rhymes, every piece seemed to fit so nicely. The picture suited the mood, too. The colors were right, very blue.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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turtlestage...
I appreciate your kind words, but I miss all instruction. Have went back to the writing board so to speak and am writing on the novel again. You should be prepared! Thanks for reviewing ....I thought the grey and blue set the mood. Thanks again my friend, Carol
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Don't worry, I'm working on my eagle eye... poems are the hardest for me to offer suggestions on changes on. Especially when they pull a feeling. I think poems should do something... like get you to think or feel, and then when they rhyme, and have a beat, well... I had a cup of coffee today, and missed my stupid duck. Can't compare a duck to a person, but dang it. I miss my little friend.
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turtlestage... No matter what you love.boy, girl, dog, cat or duck ...it doesn't matter what it is. If you loved it and lost it, you ache inside because there is something missing. I'll try to send a smile your way and maybe cheer you just a little.
LET MY SMILE BE YOUR UMBRELLA....UNTIL YOUR EARS GO AWAY.
My thoughts are with you my friend....Carol
If it will make you feel better, I'll make lots of mistakes so you can tell me about them!
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But I need my ears : )
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EARS TEARS...YOU NEEDED SOMETHING TO CORRECT cAROL
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, how sad is this, Carol -
you brought tears to my
eyes -- such an emotional
heart-felt piece, your
words full of despair and
anger.
A great entry for the contest - and I see
you've won -- congratulations, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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Oh, how sad is this, Carol -
you brought tears to my
eyes -- such an emotional
heart-felt piece, your
words full of despair and
anger.
A great entry for the contest - and I see
you've won -- congratulations, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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Margaret...
Grief can be overwhelming and we must struggle to find that glimmer of hope. Thanks for your kind comments. Always your friend, Carol