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When I dabble at things.....

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Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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A very good morning to you. A beautiful poem of love and committment, the way it should be. I enjoyed.

A favor: I just posted the sequel to my poem Nine Hundred Miles, the new one is titled "Nine Hundred Miles to Go", please take a look an tell me what you think.
Loyd

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009
    Loyd...

    It was about commitment until my son's fiance walked away without an explanation leaving him as One again.

    Thanks for reading and commenting.

    Carol
reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 03-Jul-2009
    I am sorry and I know that happens and is always so sad. Thanks, LOyd
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I don't understand this type of poem, but I liked reading it and felt it had deep meaning, and was uplifting and sad at the same time. The photo went with it very nicely. You did a great job.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
    Barbara....

    Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I was thinking about my son and the pain he is going through right now. His fiance walked away without any explanation. Life's tough.

    Thanks for stopping by. I greatly appreciate it!

    Carol
Comment from Perp Ihebom
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A sad story of love gone sour. Unfortunately, many people are walking on this lonely road as a result of emotional injuries sustained from love. kudos

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
    Perp...

    Thank you for reading and reviewing. I greatly appreciate it. The poem was written with my son in mind. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from stormwolf2
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Loves bliss and then forgotten promises. A lovely poem and well written. It has a smooth flow to it and I love the first stanza.

Good luck.

Best wishes,
Malcolm

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
    Malcolm...

    Thank you reading and reviewing. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from S.Yocom
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I would not have guessed that this was your first attempt at a tetractys, Carol. It is beautifully written and follows the rules of the form. Well done.
Sally

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
    Sally..

    Thank you for your kind and appreciated words. I wrote it while thinking of my son. His fiance walked out without any explanation. Closure is difficult for him. Thanks again.
    Carol
Comment from steevie
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this is an amazing poem and as you said in your author notes though, regarding inexperienced writings, this hardly seems the work of the inexperienced

your words are well put together and have much impact, going from positive to negitive, is superbly mastered excellent write and as regards to starting over again, sometimes its the best thing

steve

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    Steve...

    Thank you for your most gracious comments. I greatly appreciate them. And for the six stars....words can't tell you how much that means to me.

    Thanks again - Carol
reply by steevie on 05-Jul-2009
    your welcome carol
    i am pleased that you are pleased

    take care

    steve
Comment from ylime
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This poem was nice, I liked the way lines are arranged in tetractys :) The content was beautiful. I look forward to reading more. I feel bad for the speaker, they seem so sad. :( LOVED the poem.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    ylime...

    It was written for my son whose fiance simple walked away...without ever saying why. His heart still yearns for her. Thank you for reading and commenting. Carol
Comment from joan marie
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I am not going to worry about the form as I have never written one. The content is terrific. How true of so many throw away relationships today. Well penned. joan marie

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    Joan Marie..

    Good morning and thank you for your kind remarks. My son was engaged after dating for four years and one day she simply said goodbye. The pain he carries is obvious every day. Thanks for stopping by. Carol
reply by joan marie on 01-Jul-2009
    You're welcome, It is said. I had the love of my life turn onto the wrong path to a place I couldn't follow him. It is so hard. Too bad we can't just turn off our feelings sometimes. jm
Comment from jmyron
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I do not often write tetractys but I do enjoy them. You seem to have the line/syllable count down, adn the content is great. Write on.

John

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    John...

    Thank you for reading and commenting on my first attempt. It is greatly appreciated. Thanks again Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
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I don't know if you did the poem the right way or not. I just enjoy reading the poetry. This was a lovely one about the bleeding heart. Well done.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
    fictionwriter...

    Thank you so much for your kind words. They are greatly appreciated. Carol C