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A Leaf on the Wind

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Autobiography of abuse

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Comment from medicnate
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That is so disgusting. I would die just seeing the goop on the floor in the kitchen. I can't beleive you had to clean up all of that, yuck. Can't wait to read what happens next. hehe

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2009


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2009
    Yes, this was one of the most emotionally devistating times of my life. The why remains a mystery to this day. Thank you for understanding the difficulty of that situation and for your kind review and high rating too.
Comment from marion
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Hi there smurphgirl
What a huge move ... Mexico. I have been there once, just on a tour whilst we were on a holiday in the USA. I am glad your mother is getting the chnace do do what she wants, albiet in such difficult circumstances. I will now move to the next chapter. Marion.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your continued interest and honest concern. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
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Visions of "Thelma and Louise" are flying in my head. lol Smurphy, this is such a gripping story that I don't want it to end. The thought that freedom from those nasty siblings is in sight is exciting. Wonderful work! Smiles, Seraph

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you. Yes, getting away was definintely what we needed to do.
Comment from laurelp
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Excellent choice to leave them behind. Leaving your children would, of course, be a lot harder. I found no errors, only discust at your sisters. But then, they are also very sick people. It is their children I feel the most for.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thak you again, for your high rating.
Comment from Firefly54
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The giving of the exact time at the end as you climb into the car to move on is very good plan... it adds a lot of strength to the conviction that you showed here. ANother excellent chapter

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you very much for your continued support.
Comment from adewpearl
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the plants dead, gunk on the floor, mold in the fridge, unflushed toilets, drapes gone - this is horrible. No wonder your mother wanted to leave the country to put distance between her and her daughters -- I realize she was a bad mother as you all grew up, but nobody treats another human being the way they were treating her, their own mother.
Brooke

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    My sentiments exactly. My mother had her faults but what they did was inexcusable. Thank you for your high rating.
Comment from jojosug
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Your sister's are such angry women, it really is eating them up, so sad. This is a very sad chapter, home is so important to us all and losing or having it threatened, especially when your older, is truly awful. Another beautifully written chapter, written with such clarity.

Jo

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you. It was a difficult time for both of us.
Comment from jodeecee
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stood staring in speechless shock at the senseless destruction /to what/ /cut:that/ used to be Mom's pride and joy.

Denise took the washer, dryer, and all of Mom's tools with her when she left. She even took the lawn mower and garden tools. Unable to use the oven or stove, Mom and I were forced to eat sandwiches and fast food from MacDonald's and Wendy's.
(you already mentioned the washer and dryer and tools above)

used 1998 Saturn and after packing it with the bare necessities, /we/filled the tank with gas, /and/ cut:we/ were ready to leave.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
    Thanks for the kind review and your absolutely well appreciated keen eye. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
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Wow! this must have truly been very hard to put into words,the exploding emotions,mind going everywhere,with only one audible question,"Why"? What could she have gained by doing such a thing as this.Pure hatred,assuredly not a simple misunderstanding.Oh,but what a perfect out come,to be able to put ones dreams into reality.Again Smurphgirl job extremely well done.Cranial Thinker

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
    Thank you so very much for your kind review. Only 4 chapters until the book is finished!
reply by Cranial Thinker on 30-Mar-2009
    I look forward to the big end,as my mind is racing trying to figure things out before you post,but it will also sadden me because I want have this to look forward to read anymore.You are a most gifted writer,Smurphgirl,a master communicator if you will. Cranial Thinker
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
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Another stunning piece of writing, Valerie.
I cannot understand how your sisters could treat their own mother so cruelly - or you. It seems so spiteful and petty. I hope Sarah kept your destination secret, but I have an awful feeling she didn't.
I only noticed a couple of typos in this one:
"Mum and I were horrified at what I did see." (what we did see)
"...short, sweet and too the point.." (to the point)
Apart from that, brilliant.
Warmest wishes
Kat

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 30-Mar-2009
    Thank you. It's hard when I have to cram so much information into such a short space. I sincerely appreciate your continued interest and support.