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A Leaf on the Wind

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Autobiography of abuse

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Comment from medicnate
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Your sister sounds like my older brother. Too rich for their own good, flaunt it, but also like to complain about not having any money for things. Sheesh. What a mess. I shall read on and see what happens.

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2009


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2009
    Yes, the joy of greed. Take care and I'm pleased you are sticking with this.
Comment from marion
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Hi Smurphgirl
Again, I am captivated with your story. I will make only a short review on each chapter as I have five more to go. I'd like to read them all in one swoop so time won't allow me covering SPAG and/or edits. There seems to be a twist in very chapter, and I was sad to see that once again, "everything seemed to be your fault". Marion.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your enthusiasm for my work. Don't worry about the spags...I have plenty of help in that area.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
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Hi Valerie:)
It's easy to see what stress you and your mother were under. It is a terrible thing when children reject their parents. I'm sure your sisters never understood the pressures your mother lived under.

Mental illness all too often cuts family ties. Sometime the real problem is the inability to accept tahat a mental wreck remains part of their family. Maybe they want to remember the distant past and simply can not accep[ the present.

The hurtful nature of the letters is perhaps striking out at the lack of support when they were abused. It must surely be part of the denial process.

You write about these painful times with clarity that is surprising. I think it is your resolve to protect other that allows you to tell about such pain. Once again you are giving me the courage to tell my own story af abuse and a lifetime of healing both body and soul.

Thank you for having such courage.

Your writing is excellent as usual. I found only one small typo: [I chuckled when Teresa complained that Mom had no money in the bank and that her credit [card ==>cards] were maxed out.

I am reviewing as much of your story as time allow.

Roger

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thak you for your kind review. You will be happy to know it is near the end.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
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What a wild and action packed write, Smurphy. You have a real gift for telling a story. This read with ease and pulls at the reader's heart. Great writing, as always! Wonderful. Seraph

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    I'm glad you liked it. I am posting the second to last chapter as we speak.
Comment from Firefly54
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I don't know how I missed all this... I thought you were having a lazy spell and hadn't been writing anything! I must check and make sure I get notified in future.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your continued interest and high ratings. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from adewpearl
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stress on mom and I was horrific should be and me
she moved your mother against her will and then complained about the expense of it - she is a real winner, that one!
Again, I close a chapter with my jaw to the ground at the misbehavior of your sisters. Brooke

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
    Thank you. I know I have said it many times, but I truly appreciate your kind and enthusiasic reviews.
Comment from jojosug
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God, what a pair of bitches! I just don't get what their problem was. Its as if they have to punish somebody for their own hurt. You wrote about this difficult time beautifully but with great sadness.

Jo

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
    Thank you. This was a difficult chapter because it didn't have much dialogue and was primarily informational and that can ofte come arcross as boring.
Comment from penelope
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What can I say? The behaviour of your sister is despicable. Your situation is indeed almost unbearable and I'm curious to see what happens next. I hope and sense there might be a light at the end of the tunnel. As usual, the writing is captivating, and I don't have any suggestions for improvement. Penelope

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
    Thank you for your kind review. Without giving away any secrets, yes there is a light at the end of the tunnel. We are near the end of the book.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
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This is so heart string pulling that I found myself rereading some of the lines to make sure what I had read was correct.The coldness that your sisters showed towards helping
your mom,and the stress it put on the both of you.I see their bitterness goes very deep and its going to take something mighty big to pull that out of them.So I am believing something is getting ready to come to full head here.Again,Smurphgirl job extremely well done.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009
    Yes, we are close to the end of the book. I think you will be pleased with the ending. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by Cranial Thinker on 29-Mar-2009
    You are very welcome,Smurphgirl.Cranial Thinker
Comment from jodeecee
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Both Mom and I were reeling from the /cut:sudden and// all too rapid move from her big house/into/?/to our little apartments.

Teresa complained that Mom had no money in the bank and that her credit card bills /were/maxed out.

Afraid something terrible had happen/ed/ to Mom I could barely speak when the officer questioned me.

"Just to make sure, give me your sister's phone number so I can speak wit/h/ her."

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2009


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
    Thanks for the help. This was a hard chapter to write. More informational than anything and doesn't really flow very well. I need to go over it and see what I can do.