Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Saga Continues"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
33 total reviews
Comment from Jose Saic
This chapter, gives us a very interesting story of how a couple just married,with financial difficulties arrived a town and try to move a house or apartment.
They solved that problem, but the place they get for living is not very nice: Noair conditioned, but many roaches, although not very big. And so on.
Is written with a very good sense of humour a let us with the suspense of what wiil be next.
Very nice, i like it
Congratulations.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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This chapter, gives us a very interesting story of how a couple just married,with financial difficulties arrived a town and try to move a house or apartment.
They solved that problem, but the place they get for living is not very nice: Noair conditioned, but many roaches, although not very big. And so on.
Is written with a very good sense of humour a let us with the suspense of what wiil be next.
Very nice, i like it
Congratulations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Jose for the six star review and for the great comments. If you've not read the other part of this, I think you'll find a lot of humor there as well. It is in my portfolio under The Adventure Begins and it is still paying points and member cents as well.
Beth
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You are welcome.
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Beth Shelby, this is unvarnished truth, as they say. I've not been far from such experiences myself. I think a virtue of your writing this is that you don't spread on with a glowing tale, Your narration of the experience sounds real, and you are good at the details.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Beth Shelby, this is unvarnished truth, as they say. I've not been far from such experiences myself. I think a virtue of your writing this is that you don't spread on with a glowing tale, Your narration of the experience sounds real, and you are good at the details.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2009
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Stubly, Thank you for reading and commenting. I pretty much tell it like it is. I'm not sure I'll let the twins see it though. LOL
Beth
Comment from Freeflyer
These poor people. I hope they get a break soon. Your story is very well written and the imagery is good. I could actually see that elevated bathroom, what a pain to have to walk through there to get to the bedroom. Keep up the suspense. Until next time...
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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These poor people. I hope they get a break soon. Your story is very well written and the imagery is good. I could actually see that elevated bathroom, what a pain to have to walk through there to get to the bedroom. Keep up the suspense. Until next time...
Freeflyer
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank YOu Freeflyer, You do realize that I am one of those poor people. We survive with the same ups and downs that most people endure but now that they are history, I can laugh. I appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
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Sorry in using the word "poor" I did not mean it as aposed to "rich". But poor as in unlucky. I too came from humble beginnings and life has improved as I have gotten older but I never forget who and where I came from.
Cheers
Freeflyer
Comment from elframoso
She gave us the directions to her house and the key. "Make yourself at home" she told us. "We'll get your apartment ready as quickly as we can."
good text
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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She gave us the directions to her house and the key. "Make yourself at home" she told us. "We'll get your apartment ready as quickly as we can."
good text
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
Beth
Comment from jakuper
It's wonderful story. Ot the part (second) of it.
I liked both. So much humour, though so tough beginning.
Roaches hanging by their legs from the ceiling and the gas-heating an electrical pot - those are the funniest things I heard. And you took them so easy (or is it that just now you take them that easy :-) ?)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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It's wonderful story. Ot the part (second) of it.
I liked both. So much humour, though so tough beginning.
Roaches hanging by their legs from the ceiling and the gas-heating an electrical pot - those are the funniest things I heard. And you took them so easy (or is it that just now you take them that easy :-) ?)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2009
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Thank so much for your review and comments. I don't think I took it so easily at the time. LOL.
Beth
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Another brilliant installment in the life of Beth! I so love your writing. You seem to be able to make even the most dire circumstance sound amusing. I guess it's easy enough to laugh with hindsight, but I think you're a sunny person anyway!
Just one typo: "In case of a fire we, had permission..." (lose the comma)
Really enjoyed reading this, Beth.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Another brilliant installment in the life of Beth! I so love your writing. You seem to be able to make even the most dire circumstance sound amusing. I guess it's easy enough to laugh with hindsight, but I think you're a sunny person anyway!
Just one typo: "In case of a fire we, had permission..." (lose the comma)
Really enjoyed reading this, Beth.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Kat, Thanks again. I'm so glad you caught that comma which I totally misplaced.
Beth
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Beth You know how to give good descrptive and clear details of wit you had to go through
I like you story you said there is going to be more?
smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Hello Beth You know how to give good descrptive and clear details of wit you had to go through
I like you story you said there is going to be more?
smiles
Gert
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Gert,Thank your for your review. I've done quite a few of these but i probably will do a few more. Did you read the one before called The Adventure Begins? It is also posted on page 2.
Beth
Comment from jojosug
I've lived in some pits when I was younger. The description of your apartment, reminded me of one of them. A nice story, well written, very simple and effective.
Jo
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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I've lived in some pits when I was younger. The description of your apartment, reminded me of one of them. A nice story, well written, very simple and effective.
Jo
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you, for reading and commenting.
Beth
Comment from LairDog5
I'm not married but I alwas thought the first two years would be the most interesting. It's fun writing about your life and past experiences. Anytime I did I was insired to write others! It's funny you saying you'r never seen a split-level bathroom. I too lived inan apartment that had one. Good job on this. It moved along great stayed interesting. God bless!
-LairDog5
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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I'm not married but I alwas thought the first two years would be the most interesting. It's fun writing about your life and past experiences. Anytime I did I was insired to write others! It's funny you saying you'r never seen a split-level bathroom. I too lived inan apartment that had one. Good job on this. It moved along great stayed interesting. God bless!
-LairDog5
Comment Written 28-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2009
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I especially enjoyed you comments
Beth
Comment from Gip7
Oh my gosh! This is so funny, and boy, can I relate to those roaches - yuk! We had them too when first married, only we moved in with my MIL -- worst move ever! They will out-live people, I am sure.
This is a great, well-written story and I love the descriptions. I can 'hear' the sarcasm in your voice through the words. The bathroom sounds ridiculous and I like the line 'if we held our breath' - ha! Love this!
grammar: you have forgotten commas in a few places before the end quotes in some of your dialog
para: 'It was scarcely . . .' 2nd line - no caps on 'we'
Thanks.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Oh my gosh! This is so funny, and boy, can I relate to those roaches - yuk! We had them too when first married, only we moved in with my MIL -- worst move ever! They will out-live people, I am sure.
This is a great, well-written story and I love the descriptions. I can 'hear' the sarcasm in your voice through the words. The bathroom sounds ridiculous and I like the line 'if we held our breath' - ha! Love this!
grammar: you have forgotten commas in a few places before the end quotes in some of your dialog
para: 'It was scarcely . . .' 2nd line - no caps on 'we'
Thanks.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Gip7 Thanks for reading and for you great comments. Also thanks for finding the spags.
Beth
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You are very welcome, Beth -- my pleasure. Gip
