A Leaf on the Wind
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Comment from medicnate
Gripping words. Keeping me reading all night tonight. It's 4AM, hehe. This chapter flowed just as well as the others. The dialogue and emotions were real and kept pushing me to read the next paragraph. This is great writing. I'm not sure if I ever told you that before, hehe :0)
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Gripping words. Keeping me reading all night tonight. It's 4AM, hehe. This chapter flowed just as well as the others. The dialogue and emotions were real and kept pushing me to read the next paragraph. This is great writing. I'm not sure if I ever told you that before, hehe :0)
~medicnate~
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank yo very much for your kind review. Not an easy book to write or read. I am impressed you are still with it.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Another great chapter, Smurphy. The author's notes really summed up the chapter. If this were mine, I would include them in the body of the chapter, but you are the ultimate author of your work. Exceedinly authentic dialogue. Great work! Seraph
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Another great chapter, Smurphy. The author's notes really summed up the chapter. If this were mine, I would include them in the body of the chapter, but you are the ultimate author of your work. Exceedinly authentic dialogue. Great work! Seraph
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I have been told this before and am considering inculding them in the individual chapters.
Comment from laurelp
It is so hard. To tell her what has happened to you seems an impossible task. Yet not telling her isn't working either. Quite a dilemma. I will be curious to see how you decide to handle it or will it be handled because of circumstances. As always, I found no errors.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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It is so hard. To tell her what has happened to you seems an impossible task. Yet not telling her isn't working either. Quite a dilemma. I will be curious to see how you decide to handle it or will it be handled because of circumstances. As always, I found no errors.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review and I'm thrilled you didn't find any spags!
Comment from penelope
Gosh, what a dilemma. Almost impossible. I can imagine you wanting to protect your daughters rather than having one big cover up. So hard to know what to do. I hope you got to tell them later on, so they could understand what was going on with you. Again, I didn't notice any errors. Penelope
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Gosh, what a dilemma. Almost impossible. I can imagine you wanting to protect your daughters rather than having one big cover up. So hard to know what to do. I hope you got to tell them later on, so they could understand what was going on with you. Again, I didn't notice any errors. Penelope
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, it is a dificult dilemma.
Comment from adewpearl
Rationality seems to go out the door when dealing with such emotional trauma - why it is OK with Valerie that her daughters know about her own bad behavior but it isn't OK they know the abuse she suffered as a victim, that explains her bad behavior later on, is mystifying from any rational standpoint. Your dialogue in this chapter again helps with character development so effectively. Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Rationality seems to go out the door when dealing with such emotional trauma - why it is OK with Valerie that her daughters know about her own bad behavior but it isn't OK they know the abuse she suffered as a victim, that explains her bad behavior later on, is mystifying from any rational standpoint. Your dialogue in this chapter again helps with character development so effectively. Brooke
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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I probabaly should have clarified (I may go back and do that) that it was not okay that they knew of my bad behavior...sadly they were present during much of that period. I inherited a lot of my mother's "if you ignore it, maybe it will just go away" attidude. I sincerely appreciate your critique and will try and address that after reviewing the chapter.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This is extremely well told, Valerie. You have courageously pinpointed what a lot of people dare not admit - you quoted "once a nut, always a nut". This is so true. Apparently nearly 60% of people will experience some form of mental illness during their lifetime, and yet public perception is that mental illness is something shameful and taboo. I agree, someone who has experienced 'problems' in the past is very rarely treated with any credibility. It enrages me.
No spag or typos that I noticed, well edited as well as beautifully written.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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This is extremely well told, Valerie. You have courageously pinpointed what a lot of people dare not admit - you quoted "once a nut, always a nut". This is so true. Apparently nearly 60% of people will experience some form of mental illness during their lifetime, and yet public perception is that mental illness is something shameful and taboo. I agree, someone who has experienced 'problems' in the past is very rarely treated with any credibility. It enrages me.
No spag or typos that I noticed, well edited as well as beautifully written.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Thank you once again for such a kind review and high rating. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from jojosug
I hope you were able to share your story with your children. I have, and it has made for much better understanding. I am in awe at the fact you kept going in the face of such pressure, at work, in the home and your health, what amazing strength.
Yet another powerful and well written chapter.
Jo
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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I hope you were able to share your story with your children. I have, and it has made for much better understanding. I am in awe at the fact you kept going in the face of such pressure, at work, in the home and your health, what amazing strength.
Yet another powerful and well written chapter.
Jo
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Thank you, I sincerely appreciate you high review and continued interest.
Comment from jodeecee
This is a very good chapter. I only had one question-
am I miss understanding? Or is this confused, the Tona and Sarah...
Thirty minutes later Sarah and Richard were pulling out of the driveway. Tina and I had not spoken in months and now Sarah was gone too. I stood staring out the window, tears streaming down my face. I lost 'Sarah' months ago, and now I feared I had also lost 'Tina'.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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This is a very good chapter. I only had one question-
am I miss understanding? Or is this confused, the Tona and Sarah...
Thirty minutes later Sarah and Richard were pulling out of the driveway. Tina and I had not spoken in months and now Sarah was gone too. I stood staring out the window, tears streaming down my face. I lost 'Sarah' months ago, and now I feared I had also lost 'Tina'.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Yes, I got them switched...I will go back and correct. Thanks for pointing this out. I've changed their names so sometimes even I get confused.
Comment from marion
Hi Smurph-girl
I so much wanted to explain for Valerie, her situation to Sarah ... to help her understand, such is the way that this chapter gripped me. So she would understand. No doubt, all that is yet to come in your story.
I wondered if the last sentence was back to front -- should it not read:
I lost Sarah(Tina) months ago, and now I feared I had also lost Tina (Sarah).
I will move onto the next chapter. I am still hanging onto every word in On a Leaf in the Wind. Marion.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Hi Smurph-girl
I so much wanted to explain for Valerie, her situation to Sarah ... to help her understand, such is the way that this chapter gripped me. So she would understand. No doubt, all that is yet to come in your story.
I wondered if the last sentence was back to front -- should it not read:
I lost Sarah(Tina) months ago, and now I feared I had also lost Tina (Sarah).
I will move onto the next chapter. I am still hanging onto every word in On a Leaf in the Wind. Marion.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Yes, I got the names switched...I changed their names in the book and sometimes I get them confused. I'll go back and correct this.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
I know to very well how a mental disorder can go bust on a family,I lost my wife and step-son first,then my entire birth family and I have literally been on my own since,no one to really talk to except my Doctors,and my two Bulldogs.To try to talk to them was completely out of the question as once a crazy always a crazy and who is going to believe someone like that.This is so extremely very well written,I could feel your blood rushing when you heard Denise giving your daughter advice.Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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I know to very well how a mental disorder can go bust on a family,I lost my wife and step-son first,then my entire birth family and I have literally been on my own since,no one to really talk to except my Doctors,and my two Bulldogs.To try to talk to them was completely out of the question as once a crazy always a crazy and who is going to believe someone like that.This is so extremely very well written,I could feel your blood rushing when you heard Denise giving your daughter advice.Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Yes, I know well, once crazy always crazy. I sincerely appreciate your opinon and value your continued support.
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Again you are so very welcomed,you earned it big time.Cranial Thinker