A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Home Sweet Home"Autobiography of abuse
12 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
Another well written, SPAG free, chapter. Things do seem to be looking up for her. Even though you had a tough relationship with your mother, it seems like she was willing to help you out when needed. I shall press on.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Another well written, SPAG free, chapter. Things do seem to be looking up for her. Even though you had a tough relationship with your mother, it seems like she was willing to help you out when needed. I shall press on.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 14-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2009
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Yes. But hold onto your seat, things start to get really pretty soon.
Comment from WRITER1
This was a good chapter, I read the 57th chapter first, so I know what happened there. Your writing is very good. The thought and emotions come through very well.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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This was a good chapter, I read the 57th chapter first, so I know what happened there. Your writing is very good. The thought and emotions come through very well.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your high rating an kind comments. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from jojosug
I read this in the wrong order, but that has taken away form the quality of writing or my ability to follow the story. Once again another riveting chapter.
Jo
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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I read this in the wrong order, but that has taken away form the quality of writing or my ability to follow the story. Once again another riveting chapter.
Jo
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review...glad you still were able to follow the story.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This is written really well. I've found no typos or spag at all. You are so lucky in that you could go home to your mother. She may see only what she wished to see, and be unable to accept anything you ever told her, but at least she loved you enough to let you stay.
I'm glad Valerie was safe at home.
Warmest wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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This is written really well. I've found no typos or spag at all. You are so lucky in that you could go home to your mother. She may see only what she wished to see, and be unable to accept anything you ever told her, but at least she loved you enough to let you stay.
I'm glad Valerie was safe at home.
Warmest wishes
Kat
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Yes, it turns out to have been a wise choice. Thank you for your high rating and continued interest.
Comment from marion
Hi there, again!!
So short, so short ... but I presume this chapter was just a brief introduction to your mum with more to come. So I will move onto the next posting ... Marion.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Hi there, again!!
So short, so short ... but I presume this chapter was just a brief introduction to your mum with more to come. So I will move onto the next posting ... Marion.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Yes. This is one of my shorter chapters but needed to set the stage. Thank you for your continued interest.
Comment from Cranial Thinker
Again Smurphgirl I can see a strength in you building and now a softening at the same time,like a balance is about to happen,but its just few more things must happen to solidly ground your character.Ohhhhh! this is so good I wish I had the whole book to curl up with.Again a job extremely well done.Cranial Thinker
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Again Smurphgirl I can see a strength in you building and now a softening at the same time,like a balance is about to happen,but its just few more things must happen to solidly ground your character.Ohhhhh! this is so good I wish I had the whole book to curl up with.Again a job extremely well done.Cranial Thinker
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you so much for your kind review. Yes, things are starting to come together but I must warn you they get worse first....story of my life!
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I am truly loving every minute of your book.Please keep it coming.Cranial Thinker
Comment from laurelp
A more peaceful chapter than the last one. I can understand why you would prefer the house to a car with all your injuries. Nicely written chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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A more peaceful chapter than the last one. I can understand why you would prefer the house to a car with all your injuries. Nicely written chapter.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from prodigal
I read the last two chapters out of order. This is another very well written chapter. Her mom is oblivious to anything the daughter does. How sad. I enjoy your writing. - Sam
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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I read the last two chapters out of order. This is another very well written chapter. Her mom is oblivious to anything the daughter does. How sad. I enjoy your writing. - Sam
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. I am pleased you like it.
Comment from BethShelby
You story is going well. The feeling you express come across nicely as does your relationship with your mother and some of conflicting emotions you feel like the love/hate relationship.
"but my inability to manipulate the spoon, sugar bowel,"
in this sentence I think you meant "bowl."
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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You story is going well. The feeling you express come across nicely as does your relationship with your mother and some of conflicting emotions you feel like the love/hate relationship.
"but my inability to manipulate the spoon, sugar bowel,"
in this sentence I think you meant "bowl."
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind reveiw. Yes, it was definitely a love/hate relationship. Again, thank you.
Comment from penelope
Well, I had to find out what happened next. I really must go back. You describe so well the complexitiy of families, especially when problems are not spoken about. This was a calming chapter. I liked your descriptions of the house; what a change from the motel. The only thing I can critique is that your first three lines started with 'I'. That can be easily changed though. Now I'm off to read the next one. Penelope
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Well, I had to find out what happened next. I really must go back. You describe so well the complexitiy of families, especially when problems are not spoken about. This was a calming chapter. I liked your descriptions of the house; what a change from the motel. The only thing I can critique is that your first three lines started with 'I'. That can be easily changed though. Now I'm off to read the next one. Penelope
Comment Written 21-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2009
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Yes, I do have to work on the "I" in my work. Thahk you for your kind review, I sincerely appreciate it.