CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Annelisa
Fantastic! The imagery is amazing. This is one of the best that I've read. The red and black format was the perfect choice!
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Fantastic! The imagery is amazing. This is one of the best that I've read. The red and black format was the perfect choice!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"Red River" Yikes! This haiku poem paints a picture of an erupting volcano in a quite area with lava flowing down. Well done.
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"Red River" Yikes! This haiku poem paints a picture of an erupting volcano in a quite area with lava flowing down. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from SunlitWhisper
I must be missing all the fun with these Haiku poems. I swore I would not enter any of them so now I'm left wishing I could enjoy writing them as well. LOL
Nice poem so good luck.
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I must be missing all the fun with these Haiku poems. I swore I would not enter any of them so now I'm left wishing I could enjoy writing them as well. LOL
Nice poem so good luck.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is certainly an apt description of a volcano, Sue. I like the way you personified it, as a being that sleeps and then wakes in a fury. Nice job.
Sally
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This is certainly an apt description of a volcano, Sue. I like the way you personified it, as a being that sleeps and then wakes in a fury. Nice job.
Sally
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from rama devi
Wonderfully alliterative haiku. Brilliant, strong imagery and well delivered in this true to form haiku. NO nits in this, a fine post. Great closing line.
Loving light,
rama devi
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Wonderfully alliterative haiku. Brilliant, strong imagery and well delivered in this true to form haiku. NO nits in this, a fine post. Great closing line.
Loving light,
rama devi
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
I don't know how you do it. This is one of the best haiku I've read in quite a while. It reads like published haiku. Great job.
Fred
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I don't know how you do it. This is one of the best haiku I've read in quite a while. It reads like published haiku. Great job.
Fred
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...an excellent haiku and very clever about the volcano. When I was in Hawaii we flew over the active volcano and it is a sight to behold. The lava is bright red and steam comes off as it hits the sea. Very impressive and you have captured that with this haiku. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue...an excellent haiku and very clever about the volcano. When I was in Hawaii we flew over the active volcano and it is a sight to behold. The lava is bright red and steam comes off as it hits the sea. Very impressive and you have captured that with this haiku. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I remember hearing about a volcano that has been dormat for a very long time and they are waiting for it to erupt in the near future. I forget what the name of the volcano was though. I wish you all the best in the contest
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I remember hearing about a volcano that has been dormat for a very long time and they are waiting for it to erupt in the near future. I forget what the name of the volcano was though. I wish you all the best in the contest
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
Comment from Jewell McChesney
red river rages ...
What a great line.
I'm thinking this would be better had the word "volcano"
not been in the body of the poem.
You have described it well though. Your imagery, clear.
Good luck in this contest.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2009
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red river rages ...
What a great line.
I'm thinking this would be better had the word "volcano"
not been in the body of the poem.
You have described it well though. Your imagery, clear.
Good luck in this contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2009
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The word "Volcano" was mandatory to be in the haiku, according to the contest requirements. Thanks very much for your review. Sue :-)
Comment from bard owl
Mother nature is not a kindly maternal essence. I find her to be a pragmatic, old witch for whom the soul of man means nothing. Your haiku is excellent. The sudden rush of a volcano from silence is terrifying, to say the least. Best of luck in the contest, Sue. Blessings, Linda
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Mother nature is not a kindly maternal essence. I find her to be a pragmatic, old witch for whom the soul of man means nothing. Your haiku is excellent. The sudden rush of a volcano from silence is terrifying, to say the least. Best of luck in the contest, Sue. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009