A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Living in a Fish Bowl"Autobiography of abuse
12 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
This is another fantastic chapter. Moves quickly and elicits a response from the reader.
came up with a terrific idea.
I scrubbed the walls with Lysol an (Evil Eddie didn't give you your space between paragraphs.
Great chapter.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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This is another fantastic chapter. Moves quickly and elicits a response from the reader.
came up with a terrific idea.
I scrubbed the walls with Lysol an (Evil Eddie didn't give you your space between paragraphs.
Great chapter.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 11-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2009
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Thanks. My neighbors thought it was a pretty good solution too.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Another intriguiging chapter in a well written autobiography. I am impressed with how, when push came to shove, she found herself building a deck and installing windowpanes. The leaky roof solution was brilliant. Excellent chapter. Seraph
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Another intriguiging chapter in a well written autobiography. I am impressed with how, when push came to shove, she found herself building a deck and installing windowpanes. The leaky roof solution was brilliant. Excellent chapter. Seraph
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Thanks. Having an obsessive personality does have its occasional benifit. Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Very well told. I feel for Valerie so much. You needed the drink to calm your nerves, but one leads to another. I can understand fully, and relate to this type of ultimatum. On to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Very well told. I feel for Valerie so much. You needed the drink to calm your nerves, but one leads to another. I can understand fully, and relate to this type of ultimatum. On to the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Sadly, that was the case. Thank you for your continued interest. I appreciate all your coments.
Comment from jodeecee
terrified little girl/,/ convinced that at any minute she would be seen for what she really was, a fake.
began as quick drink to relax a few nights a week/,/ quickly turned into four or five doubles every night of the week.
Another great chapter!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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terrified little girl/,/ convinced that at any minute she would be seen for what she really was, a fake.
began as quick drink to relax a few nights a week/,/ quickly turned into four or five doubles every night of the week.
Another great chapter!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words and continued assistance with my all too many SPAGS....
Comment from jojosug
I can really relate to this, it was like reading an episode from my own life. It is so easy for the absent parent to be critical, but not take responsibility for day to day care. You conveyed this so well in this beautifully written piece.
Jo
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I can really relate to this, it was like reading an episode from my own life. It is so easy for the absent parent to be critical, but not take responsibility for day to day care. You conveyed this so well in this beautifully written piece.
Jo
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from laurelp
in th refrigerator. - forgot the E in "the" - first error I have found in a long time. You didn't leave it there for me to find now did you (just joking). So, back to drinking. Not a good thing. Hard on you and your family. When oh when do you get help. I know it will happen, I just wonder how low do you sink first. Don't mind my ramblings. It is an excuse not to get back to working on something I need to finish. Until the next chapter. laurelp
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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in th refrigerator. - forgot the E in "the" - first error I have found in a long time. You didn't leave it there for me to find now did you (just joking). So, back to drinking. Not a good thing. Hard on you and your family. When oh when do you get help. I know it will happen, I just wonder how low do you sink first. Don't mind my ramblings. It is an excuse not to get back to working on something I need to finish. Until the next chapter. laurelp
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Of course I left off the e, just to see if you were paying attention! LOL Not to worry, help is near. Again, thank you for your interest and kind review.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Another great write Valerie. You've crammed an awful lot into this chapter.
Although I've given you five stars, this is for writing style and content. Now I'm going to pick it to bits for SpaG! Evil Eddie has been up to no good in your work:
"......orange juice in th(e) refrigerator...."
"......over $1,200[,](-) more than I could......"
".....They had always [obeyed](do you mean 'abided by' or 'obeyed the')by the rules......"
"....to my dismay, Richard agreed with them...." There is a line break (Evil Eddie) at 'Richard'.
".....I was loosing (losing) control....."
What a very ingenious solution to the leaking roof. You prove in this, what a very resourceful woman you are.
Hope the 'picking' helped.
All the best.
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Another great write Valerie. You've crammed an awful lot into this chapter.
Although I've given you five stars, this is for writing style and content. Now I'm going to pick it to bits for SpaG! Evil Eddie has been up to no good in your work:
"......orange juice in th(e) refrigerator...."
"......over $1,200[,](-) more than I could......"
".....They had always [obeyed](do you mean 'abided by' or 'obeyed the')by the rules......"
"....to my dismay, Richard agreed with them...." There is a line break (Evil Eddie) at 'Richard'.
".....I was loosing (losing) control....."
What a very ingenious solution to the leaking roof. You prove in this, what a very resourceful woman you are.
Hope the 'picking' helped.
All the best.
Kat
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Gotta tell you, I hate the word LOSE/Loose...I have yet to get it right. Thank you for your high rating and always excellent help.
Comment from SLIMTOPPLAYER
Kids always takes, to the one who let's them have their way. So to them, their mother was a tyrant, strict to the rules..type of mother. This is chapter 34? I'm way behind. Maybe I can go back and read....and try and play catch- up. From what I've read, I'm giving this a five star.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Kids always takes, to the one who let's them have their way. So to them, their mother was a tyrant, strict to the rules..type of mother. This is chapter 34? I'm way behind. Maybe I can go back and read....and try and play catch- up. From what I've read, I'm giving this a five star.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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For starting so late, I appreciate your high rating. For what it's worth it is a fast read if you decide to start at the beginning. Again, thanks for the high rating.
Comment from ladybird
I haven't read any previous chapters, but I was very impressed with the quality of writing here.Told very well portraying the slow breakdown of a woman desperatly trying to cope with life and living.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I haven't read any previous chapters, but I was very impressed with the quality of writing here.Told very well portraying the slow breakdown of a woman desperatly trying to cope with life and living.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. I know it is difficult to start something in the middle...but most of my book is a series stories that on occasion can stand alone. AGain, thank you for your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from adewpearl
I love Valerie's resourcefulness in fixing that leak and her sense of humor about it - it says a lot about her character that she does not allow a problem to conquer her - rather she is determined and flexible enough to find a way.
I was loosing control losing
Your assessment of the situation with the girls is spot on - so many times when parents differ over discipline, the children think the pushover parent is the "nice" one, which puts undue pressure on the responsible parent to continue to be responsible
I'm sorry to see in the end the start of a new problem Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I love Valerie's resourcefulness in fixing that leak and her sense of humor about it - it says a lot about her character that she does not allow a problem to conquer her - rather she is determined and flexible enough to find a way.
I was loosing control losing
Your assessment of the situation with the girls is spot on - so many times when parents differ over discipline, the children think the pushover parent is the "nice" one, which puts undue pressure on the responsible parent to continue to be responsible
I'm sorry to see in the end the start of a new problem Brooke
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I have to say I hate the words LOSE/LOOSE...I have yet to get it right! Thank you for your kind review. I have to laugh, I left a lot out. I also tore out a wall in the kitchen, put in a sliding glass door in the living room and replaced the old, broken window in my bedroom. Being obsessive does occassionally have it's upside. Thank you for your kind review and high rating.